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    Yesterday

    Something a little longer, with a little more content.




    It seems only yesterday
    We were sitting in the dark,
    Eating icing from the tub,
    And chatting of boys
    And school
    And laughing over
    A shoebox of photographs.

    It seems only yesterday
    That you dyed your hair red
    And pierced your own ears,
    Swearing that we were
    Best friends forever,
    While you skipped
    Right out of school,
    And my life.

    It seems only yesterday
    That a joint and a fake
    Couldn't be found
    When looking in your bag
    For some lip smackers.
    Remember the pear kind
    Tasted real bad?

    It seems only yesterday
    I ran into your mom,
    She wished I'd come to visit;
    Like we were still friends.
    But I got left behind,
    Because a guy with a car,
    Always called you Big Red,
    Like that was cool.

    It seems only yesterday
    That I didn’t see you at all,
    The memory of our friendship
    Rarely resurfaced
    For either of us,
    I had moved on with my life,
    You were busy messing up yours.

    Here we are today,
    Reminiscing of the yesterdays
    Of years ago
    That still seems so fresh,
    When we open up
    That shoe box of memories,
    And filling the blanks of the years
    When we wandered apart.

    Here we are today
    Like we never really scattered,
    And the silence we both expect
    Never comes, the apologies
    We never said
    Don’t need to be spoken,
    A cup of coffee mended
    What time pulled apart.

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    Re: Yesterday

    Damn...sounded like u lost a best friend. That's what I picked up anyway. I felt the rhythm even though it didn't rhyme. It was a nice heartfelt piece.

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    Re: Yesterday

    Quote Originally Posted by Aycaspaydz
    Damn...sounded like u lost a best friend. That's what I picked up anyway. I felt the rhythm even though it didn't rhyme. It was a nice heartfelt piece.
    You picked up right. Thanks for the feed.

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    This was actually pretty cool. A nice poem for a beginner, and I liked the abstract but yet real flow it had to it. It wasn't too hard to understand, although it was just right. This had a nice message with it, and it was a nice and deep poem. Good job.

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    word, nice shit

    I'll edit more feed when I'm sober.

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    Re: Yesterday

    I liked this poem alot remind me of one of my old poems it started off coo and then wen't to sad and then as soon as i thought it was going to end on an bad note that last 2 lines surprised me. imagery was very vivid in the second stanza it felt as if I could see the kid walking off to school, the emotion i this peace was powerful seriously I loved every bit of it almost could've made me cry if I was as strong as I am lol, I'm just amazed this peace has so much emotion makes my poems look like shit lol, pfft please drop more poems like this Idk if this'll get i but hell ima sure nominate it.

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