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Thread: [SS] If Looks Could Kill

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    [SS] If Looks Could Kill

    'If Looks Could Kill'
    Up to now I have said all with many tales untold
    Imploding out of panic as I explode out of rage
    As I show my mold to you and shape up a face
    My veins run wild while my memories grow cold
    I blame none in part, myself is to blame in fact
    Too late to erase what is done once I've said it
    Harsh truths mold me into what I have dreaded
    All the world's a stage; why am I a playless act
    I flourish in the lights, but the dark smothers me
    But I flagrantly accept that I am shrouded by evil
    I am my own imperfection, my body as an easel
    Yet I am influenced, the world told me what to be
    Watch them point and stare as I let this pin rest
    So tear me down, but don't bring the past around
    A direction to perfect images has not been found
    I look back into myself, finding nothing but an index
    Creating hands that cut, bleed, and such hazards
    For I am only of this world, a beast coming undone
    I took life for granted unsure why I'm running from one
    Pretending to have no care about what does matter
    I have made plans for destruction, my life the interface
    My palm the carrier for today's commited tradgedies
    I can't introduce the real me; you would just laugh at me
    Fierce anxiety; my thoughts wind up and begin to lace
    Take this heart, take this life; conform it to your earth sir
    For I cannot make more excuses for my sorrow or grief
    Today I am your liar, tomorrow I am the starter of belief
    But now I see myself as my own imperfected murderer
    Wu-Tang Forever
    Nothing Was The Same

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    Re: [SS] If Looks Could Kill

    links coming soon....please feed and I will hit yours up too
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    Re: [SS] If Looks Could Kill

    Hmmm where should I start, I liked this topic for the simple fact it reminds me of one I did not to long ago. But anyways this was a pretty good read. The imagery you displayed here was pretty good, I like how you were very descriptive at parts. Flow was ok not to bad. But on the bas side of things this sorta had a poetic vibe to it at sections well I guess it not necessarily bad but I dunno. You should work your rhyme schemes a little more tho I was thrown off at times by it. And you should try and throw some multis in there now and then. But overall I guess this was a pretty solid for an up and commer. Good work` And keep elevating. Get at me anytime if you ever need help.
    - Peace Easy.

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