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    Nothing to Lose... (a little more morbid than I'm used too..)

    Don't take this as me thinking I'm some kind of bad ass or anything like that... I wrote this because I got pulled over last night, got a DUI.. AGAIN.. and I'm pissed... I want to kill some cops, who cares if I'm white and from the burbs?

    desperate measures can fuck up your reasonable times
    let me tell you the story about how I came to find
    this to be truth, no excuses, just cold and hard fact
    it happened halloween 2006, it's hard to look back
    upon that night, that night, oh that motherfucking night
    I don't think that it will ever rub me right...
    at first it was so tight, me in my angelic stance
    white sweater, white pants, and some fiery romance
    I chanced a kiss I guess, at least that's what she tells me
    I didn't get it, but the hugs were good enough to melt me
    all the boys were kickin it, a few girlies for their sides
    enough liq to sip us sick, too much liq for me to drive
    but I did it anyway...
    keys... ignition... clutch... reverse... hit the road
    left turn onto sheridan, windows up because it's cold
    2pac for the flows, around here we still hold him dear
    Nothing to lose! how ironic.. let me paint the picture clear
    I couldn't steer for shit, bobbin and weavin like a boxxer
    left lane, right lane, I layed it out plain for the officer
    "Sir, I'm fucking drunk... No need for me to be takin the test"
    He just wouldn't let it rest, unimpressed by the way that I stressed
    the point that I wasn't drivin', it was a friend of a friend
    he offered up his services because I was seein in tens...
    "Where's this guy at then?" The mighty officer asked
    I said.. "The ass got gassed, took off right after we crashed.."
    an unlikely story, it didn't pass, quickly cuffed up my hands
    I was as guilty as innocense, but he was fuckin up my plans
    So I slammed my damn fingers right into the fuckers belt
    whipped out his millimeter, quickly licked off a shell
    man, I was drunk, I admit it, my thought patterns were foggy
    but it was freakin beautiful what I did with his body
    I can't be rotting in maximum, I'm too short and too skinny
    so I dragged him from the street to where the waters were movin swiftly
    I took a rock from the rivers edge, and sharpened IT'S edge
    it was a bloody mess, took me ten minutes to get off his head
    moved to the arms and legs, dear lord it was a nasty procedure
    took his uniform, and cut from him any and all identifiable features
    took a breather, I was fevered, bloodlusted and lost in the onslaught
    took a look at the car, made sure it was still in the parking lot
    got back to business, lookin for witnesses, I never found one
    in love with the sickness of it, startin diggin the ground up
    bury a limb here, a limb there, smash the dental records null and void
    morbid as it is, I won't lie... the shit was enjoyed
    I took pleasure in dismembering the filthy swine
    in love with my crime, I musta lost track of time
    until I heard...
    sirens wailing, my face pailing, I just about lost my nerve
    I'll die if I serve prison time, I'm just a white boy from the burbs
    words can't describe the feelings I felt inside, it's like then I died
    heard a loudspeaker crackle out.. "Timothy Dodge, we'll take you dead or alive!"
    I still had the nine, my mind was now putting together the pieces
    He musta radioed the precinct, then they radio'd back and he wasn't recieving
    the lone cop that came for backup, played catch up with the scenario
    found an empty casing, no officer, couldn't figure out where we'd go
    musta heard me working dirt, How could I have been so absurdly loud?!
    I WASN'T THINKING! and it seems that they've got me surrounded now...
    my mind flitters back to 2pac, nothing to lose, I bust out two shots
    a cop drops, it's too cold and too hot, they buck back.. Time to get got
    I spot one running from the left, another one running from the right
    I impress the trigger, the first hits lefts chest, with the second he loses life
    12 shots left, my hearts darker than the night as I let the shots fly
    cops die one after the other, I could almost hear their momma's cry
    a bullet slides through my pull-up, my trigger, I pull it.. the bloods sticky
    my fingers caress the deathbringer, with targets I'm not that picky
    then one hits me, two hits me, three hits me, I'm going down
    another round lodges itself in my shoulder before I even hit the ground
    I've got one shot left, it's my shot, and it's fucking precious
    the moral of the story is, nothing's sweeter than your own death is...





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    Yo this was crazy as hell..and i like...screw structure and all the other aspects of writing ...this was packed with imagery and dats all that matters to me...i wish it was longer....i know how it feels to be pulled over so when you was talking about burying a cop limb from limb it kinda made me smile a lil bit...lol..yo this truly was a sick piece to me i dont care what no one else says....rtf plllzz my shit gettin slept on ..."Hell's Angels"...
    appreciate it

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    pretty good son... long as

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    yo

    ight yo i liked this one.good wit the lines and shit. u stayed wit it and brought it through.
    "So I slammed my damn fingers right into the fuckers belt
    whipped out his millimeter, quickly licked off a shell"

    i liked that line right there it was hot i was feelin it when i got to that part. keep it up. ight



    i seen u commented my other 1 that wasn't my first 1 i had posted before but i got to post my real songs up. gotta get some credit.

    holla at this 1 u'de like it. ight
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    Quote Originally Posted by ..IllThoughtZ..
    Yo this was crazy as hell..and i like...screw structure and all the other aspects of writing ...this was packed with imagery and dats all that matters to me...i wish it was longer....i know how it feels to be pulled over so when you was talking about burying a cop limb from limb it kinda made me smile a lil bit...lol..yo this truly was a sick piece to me i dont care what no one else says....rtf plllzz my shit gettin slept on ..."Hell's Angels"...
    appreciate it

    Word, thanks homie.. I'm not big on "structure" personally.. I think it just holds you back.
    I'll get to your stuff before the weekend is over.. I'm extremely busy with this audio tournament at the moment, otherwise I'd get at it right now.

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    yes.. this would be an up.

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    The verse was good, I just wanna say, I also got a DUI on halloween, you're not alone. Probably thousands issued that night. Don't let the fucking system get you down, take a loan out and pay a good lawyer to fuck them over, it's well worth the money, that's what I'm doing. Best lesson is not to blame the cops, it's your own fault, you need to realize what you did and NOT repeat your mistake, driving drunk is like the dumbest thing you can do at your age, you'd be better off getting a girl pregnant or quitting your job to take a two month acid trip.

    I'm just saying, accept responsibility, man up and get the shit done the right way, move on and learn from experience, I'm trying to do that too and it sucks and it's tough, but we gotta learn some way, God tests us like this. I've had a good friend die and another come close because of driving drunk, there's ppl that care about you and you're putting THEM in jeapordy every time you drive drunk, not you. It's them who will have to live with it if you crash and burn, you got off easy this time like I did.

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    ^lol, trust me.. I know what you're saying.. I was extremely pissed when I wrote this though, therapy session type deal.
    I accept 100% responsibility for my actions, the cop had nothing to do with me getting drunk and driving. I was just upset, know what I mean.
    thanks though, dude, seriously.

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    yeah folk i like that.
    you know how erybody feels about the cops (or 12 as I like to call them.)
    nice to see somebody put it out there in the open.
    erything we wanna say but dont.
    keep typing and push the dream!
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    i actually like this one. it was long but i like peices that are story telling. it makes it
    more interesting to read cause u dont know what might be comming cause u made it up. u had a lot of imagedry in it as well. the concept is a little played cause people like to talk about things from the dark side but all in all it was nice dogg. keep'em commin.
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