Hey there!

It looks like you're enjoying Rap Battles Forum but haven't created an account yet. Why not take a minute to register for your own free account now? As a member you get free access to all of our forums and posts plus the ability to post your own messages, communicate directly with other members and much more. Register now!

Already a member? Login at the top of this page to stop seeing this message.

User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 14 of 14

Thread: Visions and dreams

  1. October 23rd, 2006, 04:38 AM #1
    lyricalweaponry
    lyricalweaponry is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Oct 2006
    Location
    Dat 504........NEW ORLEANS
    Age
    40
    Posts
    75
    Battle Record
    0-4

    Visions and dreams

    There's a fine line between vision and dreams,
    vision is seeing.......while a dream is believing,
    believe me, one mans dream is another mans vision,
    the only thing being, is that that man is seeing.
    Stick with me here....
    Imagine that, when your eyelids drop, the violence stops...........
    Silence emerges as peace converges.....on every part of this sleeping person,
    The reason being is that this dreams version.....
    is a complete diversion of the real worlds version
    And the nightmares lurkin when you lift that curtain...
    sleep is interrupted and then your immersed in.....
    battle's and attacks, actual facts,
    remember seeing is vision, and your eyesites back,
    and if I might add, that you can't strike back, your just a pawn for however this nightmare acts.
    The truth is a vision, Martin luther had a vision, if it was a dream he wouldn'tve completed his mission.
    Intuition is part of vision, makebelieve is for dreams...
    Dreams are confusion, vision says what it means.

    Just remember that theres a fine line between vision and dreams..
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  2. October 23rd, 2006, 04:48 AM #2
    lyricalweaponry
    lyricalweaponry is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Oct 2006
    Location
    Dat 504........NEW ORLEANS
    Age
    40
    Posts
    75
    Battle Record
    0-4
    5 horseman
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...70#post5231170
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  3. October 23rd, 2006, 04:50 AM #3
    lyricalweaponry
    lyricalweaponry is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Oct 2006
    Location
    Dat 504........NEW ORLEANS
    Age
    40
    Posts
    75
    Battle Record
    0-4
    dj.."As I"
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313376
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  4. October 23rd, 2006, 05:53 AM #4
    Ascend
    Ascend is offline
    Rookie Veteran
    Join Date
    Jul 2006
    Location
    Your Conscience's Conscience
    Age
    34
    Posts
    244
    This is a pretty good drop, the lines that stood out to me the most...

    Imagine that, when your eyelids drop, the violence stops...........
    Silence emerges as peace converges.....on every part of this sleeping person,
    The Vocab. was good, Imagery could have been better and flow was a bit confusing at first but picked up towards the end. It had a good feel, so overall I'd say this was a pretty good drop. Oh yeah, the structure was a little 'ew' here and there, but still, good job. Keep up.

    Check 'The Two', when you get a chance.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313372
    -Insert Sig-


    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  5. October 23rd, 2006, 10:43 AM #5
    ~AbrazaMeTanto~
    ~AbrazaMeTanto~ is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Jul 2006
    Location
    Alexandria, VA
    Age
    33
    Posts
    91
    Battle Record
    0-1
    this drop was entirely true i was completely amazed in its entirety... this was absolutely amazing i was feeling your whole peice it totally grabbed my attention... in essence its all true... your vocab was ok... your story line was crazy...but overall i was really feeling this peice
    MakinEveryOne Talk!


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  6. October 23rd, 2006, 10:51 AM #6
    Forum
    Forum is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Aug 2006
    Location
    A city where the wind blows..
    Posts
    2,282
    Battle Record
    14-6
    This was a complete drop. The imagery was there the vocab was used well and the topic was cool too. Though structure could use a lot of help it'z content was nice. Overall this was a good read. Nice Shit Keep it ^


    Battles I need closed

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

    ___________________
    OMHOF x1
    If I voted in your battle or left feed on your OM plz RTF

    Open Mic's


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.



    L.S.
    N.A.
    M.C.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  7. October 23rd, 2006, 01:49 PM #7
    .......*
    .......* is offline
    Banned
    Join Date
    Oct 2006
    Location
    A Pool of Legendz.
    Age
    41
    Posts
    282
    Battle Record
    1-1
    Damn Structure would've added to this piece. nice flow. multi's, imagery and consistancy through out. You played the topic good enough to impress me. Overall this was a good read ya rhymeN is kinda different yet not really it may have been the structure. ya vocab is nice nothing to be said about that. overall a good read. keep @ it famO.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  8. October 23rd, 2006, 03:14 PM #8
    Atti
    Atti is offline
    mcmxviii Atti's Avatar
    Join Date
    Aug 2003
    Posts
    4,445
    Awards Legendary PC - Award Request Accepted Legendary Member - Award Request Accepted Legendary OM - Award nomination from Spree accepted. SS HW Champion - Award nomination from Spree accepted. Haiku Champion - Award nomination from Spree accepted. OM HOF - Award nomination from Spree accepted. OM HOF - Award Request Accepted PC HOF
    haha you remind me a bit of Ledge in the way that you flow and have such a cassual narritive pressance about you. although, you're not quite there. i feel like this was TOO casual, like when you said "stick with me here." haha just so unneeded man, if we've started we'll proooooobally keep with it. aside from that though alot of this was very insightfull and i throughouly enjoyed reading it. i loved the fluency of both the rhyme scheme and the content. it made for an overall solid piece that kept moving. i liked this alot though, very breif, but for what it had i had very few complaints which is rair. i'll be curious to see how your writing developes within your next few pieces or whatever. keep writing.

    if you would, Abstanti Collective's newest collab ...
    "Anathema"
    po'ethics /
    abstanticollective.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  9. October 23rd, 2006, 05:48 PM #9
    DaMicSnatcher
    DaMicSnatcher is offline
    ~Miss Jacque~ DaMicSnatcher's Avatar
    Join Date
    Dec 2005
    Location
    Mil-Town
    Age
    34
    Posts
    1,009
    Battle Record
    11-11
    I liked this a lot, the vocab was good and overall it was a pretty decent piece. I would have liked it to be longer though, but to me that would be the only flaw. I think it had deep thought and meaning and every line was perfectly constructed to what you felt and what you wanted to portray. It was a good piece...keep up the good work
    HOW YOU GONNA LET A GURL BEAT YOU?
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  10. October 23rd, 2006, 07:43 PM #10
    lyricalweaponry
    lyricalweaponry is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Oct 2006
    Location
    Dat 504........NEW ORLEANS
    Age
    40
    Posts
    75
    Battle Record
    0-4
    appreciate that....................................uppin more feedback
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  11. October 23rd, 2006, 08:00 PM #11
    soulstice.
    soulstice. is offline
    dead on revival soulstice.'s Avatar
    Join Date
    Apr 2006
    Posts
    3,204
    Battle Record
    8-3
    ok i saw your link in my collab thread, and i see that you have soooooooo potential... i thought you would SUCK cuz your name... but you could really get the hang of this fast... good multies, some slack in the flow in small places, but this was good for a first drop.. just try to make it a bit more complex. respect

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  12. October 24th, 2006, 02:14 AM #12
    lyricalweaponry
    lyricalweaponry is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Oct 2006
    Location
    Dat 504........NEW ORLEANS
    Age
    40
    Posts
    75
    Battle Record
    0-4
    feed
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  13. October 25th, 2006, 01:25 AM #13
    lyricalweaponry
    lyricalweaponry is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Oct 2006
    Location
    Dat 504........NEW ORLEANS
    Age
    40
    Posts
    75
    Battle Record
    0-4
    Can I get more feedback?
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  14. October 25th, 2006, 06:25 PM #14
    lyricalweaponry
    lyricalweaponry is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Oct 2006
    Location
    Dat 504........NEW ORLEANS
    Age
    40
    Posts
    75
    Battle Record
    0-4
    last time for feed!!!
    Open Mic.....



    The Art of Deception:


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.



    Visions and Dreams:


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
« Previous Thread | Next Thread »

Similar Threads

  1. shattered dreams (shattering dreams)
    By Lambragini in forum Closed Battles
    Replies: 16
    Last Post: February 11th, 2006, 11:14 AM
  2. visions vs O.B.L.I.V.I.O.N
    By visions in forum Closed Battles
    Replies: 18
    Last Post: October 21st, 2005, 03:15 PM
  3. Corrupted Visions: Dreams (feat. Credz)
    By -uski- in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 6
    Last Post: March 9th, 2004, 11:49 PM
  4. Corrupted Visions: Visions of a Dreamer [dope piece leave feed]
    By Gene Pool in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: February 21st, 2004, 06:23 AM
  5. visions in my dreams.....dedicated to the one i love
    By endovidualmind in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: January 15th, 2003, 12:18 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •  

Forum Rules