Dear Diary/featuring NiNjah Red

[The Vortex]

Dear diary… forget yesterday, I hope my destiny brightens
Send me sunrays, I’ll grow wings – fly away mentally enlightened
Insights’ opened, I open the spoken mind aligned unbroken
Standing in line with the 144000 chosen raised & awoken
Souls revoking Beelzebub’s hold, resisting his choking system
Unruly rascals revolt missions, but barely consult in wisdom
Now they Pulp Fiction & supply sub vision to bloat addictions
I’ll canter thru this decadence fearlessly with Jah in my corner
Enter an arena, gladiator, half moon crest & a star on the armour


Jah bless no lies, digest your eyes, no man cyan curse
Just realise Omega come last & The Alpha come first
Look how the sunshine from the skies, rise up the earth’
Even though the wicked them a deal in despise & hurt’
Under sword & dagger, Lord me jus’ a move like ninja
Jam Jamaica, run like Dunns, some carry guns by the river
Babylon can’t test The Don, fire lick them & them gone
Jah Jah calm then storm, love listen to King David psalms
We keep moving on as the World spins in these palms

[The Vortex]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313276
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313184

[Johnny 6-feet]

Abstract stuff man. I dug the complexity of the vocab but i found the imagery hard to follow although it was interesting, couldn't really pin the subject down. Could you enlighten me? More multi's would've been good to see.

How's it going anyway man? I aint been on here for ages.

[Tragedian.]

real nice drop...kept up the flow all through and kept me intrested from the started...had some nice sense of vocab you put the right words in the right place..multies we're nice as usuall by you...strutre was nice and easy to read which kept me intrested...maybe just work on coming with more creative topics...real nice..check out dear brandi...kee up.

[O.Z.]

Yeaa i like this one....tough vocab and all that good shit....multi's on point, no bad side to this post....keep on keepin on sonny....1

[Ascend]

I was kinda feelin' this piece, not as much so as Vortex's last drop ' Fuck Your Hate' but it was still aight. There was mad feel in the first verse (Not to demean the second) and though it was short it was well written, so the same for the second.

Check - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=313372

[NiNjah Red]

yeah thamx all for the lookout yo


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Abstract stuff man. I dug the complexity of the vocab but i found the imagery hard to follow although it was interesting, couldn't really pin the subject down. Could you enlighten me? More multi's would've been good to see.

How's it going anyway man? I aint been on here for ages.

yeah was like me talking to the God or Jah.in me you know. connecting to the good and knowing i cant lose with God on my side kind of thing you know. NiNjah being thaat Jah spitting in this verse. and also out to deliver out - going worldwide blessings. .


somethig along those lines still. so with Jah i was spitting in that Jamaican lingo.....



yeah sometimes i get too lost in the multies tho and lose out a bit on imagery......


pz

[.......*]

Nice drop! Vocab usage was very extensive. it flowed well but I didn't really get the meaning of this Piece. It contained good structure, nice emotion, a few good multi's and that was about it. being that it was a journal piece you may have been conversing with that of a higher power or maybe a thought piece. IDK? good shit though as far as completion.

[Spoken]

this was a nice and decent read nothing to overboard and nothing real basic...both had nice schemes and ninja i feel you on your part cus ima doa poetic verse about jah babylon ya know so i know were your getting at...though at times the emotion in this seemed abit too wonderous like it fet some areas did not need to be detailed ya know so it seemed a but useless but none the less this was a nice and pleasant drop from you both i see good elevation sons!..keep at it!

[NiNjah Red]

cool nah man

bless

[The Vortex]

peace

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