Mystery Disguised

**EvilJester** · October 11th, 2006, 08:10 AM

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312023
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312023

Just a quick drop, havent done any in a while..

The eye of the beholder is like the eye of the storm
Fury from within is like a side and a thorn
Piercing your skin, going deep within
Like a bare foot stepping on a needle point pin

I take inspiration from Aesop Rock and JMT
Those cats and niggers plow through NYC
And then take a breath, behold the power they have
Over the thousands of people, pointing them like a Sat-nav

Like a compass…
Pointing in the direction of the holy city
Like Allah, making the people unified and witty
United so much they like the brotherhood committee
While Mother Nature works her ways, disguised by ambiguity

Mystery…
Now behold what I’m about to recite
Think about my words in the day or in the night
Because the power on earth runs deeper that its veins
Right to the source of its mystery, deeper than Muhammad’s remains
Running deeper than the lava that leaks deep within
Yet higher than the heaven, where we all must begin
I tell the truth because I had to have something to recite on
I had to take something to insprirate and set my sights on

An when those Niggas call you a liar, start to light your fire
Tell them of the history, the belief and the attire
And then, on that spot, you might just start to aquire
another beleiver in this religion, in this belief that we require.

**NiNjah Red** · October 11th, 2006, 08:41 AM

yea u had some real interesting lines in places.and flowed was maintained well for the most part. but lost fluency according me in certain bars. but still it did have a nice overall feel to it. so was entertaining and the wordplay added more life to the lines i reckon...wording in few lines/bars could of been better for want of more clarity . and correct grammar but minor still..vocabulary was decent. joint was good

hut this 1 if u get time

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=312359

**Spoken** · October 11th, 2006, 09:59 AM

this was not well thought out...the imagery was weak and the vocab was also..the mettas were off..alright multies tho..you really to to work on how complex your strucure is...you really need work...in alot of parts it got me very very mixed up...you need to peep other people drops and help yourself..stay up

XM · October 11th, 2006, 12:23 PM

Kinda rushed dontcha think....not a bad piece but i honestly just wasn't feelin it you started with a good approach but after your first couple lines where you got to say'n nigger n shit is wasn't anything else that interested me, elevation is a must hopefully you'll do better in the future