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    Somewhere a Murder was heard - short verse

    Open the chase - holdin holes to the most of this guns holdin phase~
    Ghosts stroll in place - as the hallowin knocks all the gouls at your face~ (Halloween)
    pullin general old folk in embrace as this choke hold straps the Red and Blue back at base~
    Bring the bold to an age as porolled souls endulge on this girls center stage~
    but darkness embarks her, so shes spittin out blood, shadows, and eye lashes of pastors~
    wheres the spirit? - someone asked first - as she vomited a peice of mind revealin she had cursed~
    feelin drillin eyes, fillin up on villinous despise as the pills she used were plecebloes in her mind~
    Still appealing at the sky - thinking heaven was a place shed go if she continued with that life~
    Her family supported her in this - they kissed her when they meant to miss her when she was sleeping in deep bliss~
    And impeded beseach this - to see that the only way shed be okay is to spoil - leaving her need-less~
    Her father hoped for the best - As she was planned to go home to her grandfolks in the west~
    But she got killed instead - her papa wanted to give her presents but instead gave her death~
    She had dreams of seein green trees and romance~
    But her father took them away before she had a chance~

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    Well this is quite boring IMHO. You didn't really need the long lines and ~ marks to help this either...you need to work on everything. You could've done much better with the broad topic, but I didn't feel that from this peice and I am sorry that it didn't work out for you the way you wanted it too...good try!
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