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Thread: Trapped in my own Mind- Engivale & Pakaveli

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    Trapped in my own Mind- Engivale & Pakaveli

    Trapped in my own Mind

    Engivale.
    Pakaveli.

    "I Think, Therefore I Am."

    Extinct is the link between me and the Yucatan...
    And you could stand to hear me out for one minute-
    Accepted as ever, i never elected this senate...
    I meant it- The day that I said, "I hate you!"
    Misread, it states true that this day was taped to
    ...The wall like a poster...
    Killed the guy that raped you and now it's all over...
    I'm only human, I don't do everything right,
    A licquor consumin' fiend pursuin' his dream to recite
    Words from a brain that's been burned in a flame
    That serves entertain-
    Mint purposes... I'm strikin flint surfaces....


    “You scratch my back I’ll scratch yours”

    Tempus Fugit, Time flies through granular sand
    Feral Fellows don’t understand the artful grandstand
    Disband loyal lovers to hand votes as planned
    To Majority sectors by minority electors
    Clapping back are the Katrina safety inspectors
    Crash 2 towers & the headlines script your name
    Picked your game now slit to pain the hedonistic gain
    Excuses are lame you plotted to maim laughed in vain
    Think therefore you are, Descartes rejected by peers
    Stop thinking and the null hypothesis slowly disappears


    “Lies repeated 100 times warp the truth”

    I knock on my mind's door just to hear the echo,
    ...Let go...
    Of this heart-stoppin fear and set flow.
    To a rhythm of beat and defeat mindstate,
    ....Stop thinking... repeat, and Die late...
    Why wait for irate supply to gain force...
    Trees appetizer to Oil for society's main course...
    A plane forest is cited for logging,
    Government implores us not to notice what's appauling...
    Falling always deeper,
    Calling lies truth cuz why bruise your brain's keeper...
    ...My head just surrounds me...
    Grounds me to Earth, but my soul's inversed like how we see...


    “Death is death as long as it isn’t me who’s dying”

    Shaded the aftermath only to repeat the misbegotten past
    A blast or two disrupt the peaceful curfew, cadaver crumbles
    Soldiers stumble; shoot the humble abode made from glass
    The old man aghast twisting bearded hair in a cast he mumbles
    Grumbles then shouts he hears the screams of sirens blaring
    Blackboard fatally wounded & knowledge breathing out its lungs
    Whilst I sit in the helicopters cockpit, drinking cool wine I unwind
    The metallic bird sways I ignore the jargon whispered in tongues
    Captivating Fireworks spark & I fall trapped in the pilot’s mind


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    yup yup yup. dopeness defined dudes. I really was not let down at all by this peice, I loved it. Both came with solid verses, and provided a great read. Engivale your flow was what stood out the most, you never let me down flow-wise lol, your peices are so easy to read, it just rolls off the tongue, it really amazes me, props on that. Pakaveli you had a great storyline and your imagery and emotion were fucking dope, I really felt everything you wrote, so props to you too my man. Dope peice keep it up dudes.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=311120

    ^leave feed on that please
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    some of these lines flow like pro's prose, seriously tho. like what was said above, this was an easy read with lots of meaning. the structures nothing special but the flow and rhymes make up for it. i didn't see much difference in skill either, both of you guys made this a great read.

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    Thanks...Link checked.

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    ^uppin 4 me and pak, i gotta finish watching the colbert report, let's get some love from the community guys, I will be up to rtf on anything requested and pak is always good about that, better than me in fact.

    A.I.

    "She managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines."


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    Yeah links will be chequed cheuqed...

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    Very nice collab...you both fit in very well and i doubt with you telling us it was a collab we wouldve noticed...both you flowed very well on each verse...you both had some really good multies but i think eng came with more...pak i could tell what verse was yours each time just cause of the style...as u know i read each of your oms along with engivale and i never wasted time doing it..and it was the same here...just real nice collab, fresh topic..and it was very creative..hit up an om of mine.
    Empire

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    ha yeah i mos def like the overall stlye of text ie layout and font usage has good instant effect............



    I Think, Therefore I Am."

    Extinct is the link between me and the Yucatan...
    And you could stand to hear me out for one minute-
    Accepted as ever, i never elected this senate...

    ^pscho shit f'real i liked that ...... rhyming and flow was ill titer


    Tempus Fugit, Time flies through granular sand
    Feral Fellows don’t understand the artful grandstand

    ^thats just ridiculous realy....... insane...........ha cuckoo


    Lies repeated 100 times warp the truth”


    yea


    Shaded the aftermath only to repeat the misbegotten past
    A blast or two disrupt the peaceful curfew, cadaver crumbles
    Soldiers stumble; shoot the humble abode made from glass
    The old man aghast twisting bearded hair in a cast he mumbles


    dayum i aint readin no more =for now coz ish is kinda sic n ill hafta read it again later

    shit is all in all cuckoo n tite tho f'sho

    i'm 1

    pz
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    Aight thanks.

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    yeah for real the piece had many interesting mettas. and flows was mos def off point. tho it changed up in the last verse. i thought the flows b4 that was more technicalyu refined. all ya'll verses was otherwise merged together quite defly. and had much clarity in the wording.. concepts was twisted to say the least

    keep poppin them 1's

    pz
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    I know what ya means flow wise i changed it to poetic in the last one...good lookin'.

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    Bumpty.

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