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    Off With Your Head: Killing brilliant Ideas

    A hack from an oversized hatchet, sent a racket through their nerves
    The facts preserved in the stimuli, seen in the eye, perished for the worst
    The dreams, in a keen sense, dreamed of being prevailed to all of society
    Variety, deemed unnecessary sensed that freedom of speech causes anxiety
    Sharp blades, darting phases of thoughts being caught, swiftly by an axe
    Past mysteries, ancient history raises soft riots being fought, as if a task
    Speak thy mind, reek your lifetime, being counted down before your eyes
    Leak some kind of open minded expression, you are then expressing lies


    Chop like a rock…
    …fought a economy
    Lots of easy shots…
    …taught astronomy


    Then off with your head
    …So be dead
    Silent said, wickedness fed
    …As you read
    Books, labels to be crooks
    …Genius you be
    Genesis, wasn’t proven
    …It’s been said
    To be off with his head


    Mercy isn’t accounted for, accounting lousy, rowdy clouds of blood
    Brain chunks rain’ thumps ideas laid by spud brilliance thrown in mud
    Cure a disease, please, rather portray respect for a spec brained king
    Pure no ease, lethal breeze, array kept, as the hatchet took a final swing
    Bye go to hell, cells of a man, who said “I can” to Satanist movements
    Die; ring a victory bell, damn, free speech movement, an improvement?
    Drip your thick evil plasma, feeble rhythms, rid of um’ what a drag
    Expecting major deaths, higher theft? And what the hell is the plague?


    Head be gone, for long, you’re so wrong, what we did was satirical
    It’s all said and done, we killed evil, a scientist, the devil…a miracle

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    EDIT. Well on second thought.. its not so irreparable. its actually pretty decent. I just want you to shorten up your lines. it makes the peice long and drawn out. really long winded. other then that you oculd do better but no complaints.
    Last edited by Daz; September 24th, 2006 at 11:14 PM
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    weird story but decent flow,few stretched lines but shit was decent nice drop keep postin n practicin peace
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