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Thread: My Rap's feedback plz (only in Lyrics)

  1. #1
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    My Rap's feedback plz (only in Lyrics)

    alright all i need from all ya'll is sum feedback on my raps positive and negative so i can work on it all and get betta anyways everyday i'll put a new song in here in lyircs of course to get feedback so be sure to keep c'mon back each day thx boiz and galz

    "Sellouts"
    check check 3-0-4
    come back if yo wana buy sum more
    of my raps sellin
    i'll never quit spittin
    me and my hommies be gettin
    fame na lil shortie we dont preten we know the dope game
    all hoods the same
    my hood is yo hood
    its all good
    we be rollin up
    sayin yo was up
    "party-hardy up in here
    party-hardy up in there"
    ya we like to party
    lol we like them gals that dike
    anybody that aint our hommies
    we be lyk mike and take out the jabronies
    wit the KO get out the way YO
    if i keep dis up we go far up
    we follow Fity our shit wont be shitty
    we follow game our shit will be lame
    we sellout our big bang hit
    thats the sound when we spit
    dats rite it's me Rik
    some say i suk and sum say iam sik
    but all the gals know i got the biggest dik
    alright enough bout me it's allbout my Gees
    "party-hardy up in here
    party-hardy up in there"

    -------------------------------------------------
    "iam back"


    I'm here right in front of you
    and i can smell yo fear
    and so can all the hommies around here
    listing to my freestyle
    so iam back and its been a while
    i'll pick up the beat style
    and spit so check out this shit
    look at this dope sniffin clown
    he dont show his teath cause they so brown
    this nigga know i'll throw it up
    just as he knew i'd knock his bitch right up
    ya i'd say she o-kay
    thats why i'll do her in again today
    iam on the corner pimpin yo bitches
    there on the corner sipin on my
    whoops did i almost say it?
    wat u gunna do? about it
    try me try me is wat she said
    and i tried and made her cry
    iam on the curb an u bout to learn
    that iam the realist
    and iam serious
    bout my rap
    click-clap is wat they do
    when i step up and dew the dew
    me and my crew role up
    i see you wishin u was me
    i see you tryin to be dishin on my crew
    lookin threw the window
    hoping u gunna follow threw
    with that dope game
    we all the same
    sellin drugs clippin thugs
    delivering duffles bags
    gettin away from home from those nags
    so iam offering this one op
    ither u join me or stop
    cuase if not u'll be buried
    if yo lucky u'll be hurried
    to the hospitol
    u'll be lyk the game
    be capped and be in a chair lyk a fool
    messin wit us and him
    is a low nigga sin
    remember and this shit will reflect
    the gun is no way the rap
    is the way to express
    how we feel and the color is how we dress
    Rik-a-Rap
    "Penns Grove OG" NEW JERSEY

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    the medicine man
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    probably the worst thiong i've ever seen in a while.


    that gangsta shit is played, and you didnt flip it well enough for me to like it.
    next time you writing try to think of something fresh, you structure was weak, one good thing was you had a basic flow, but it was way of a decnt level, you need to make yours bars ryhme not 3 lines here two lines there. Your lines were so short that it seemed most of it you were only doin one line that ryhmed and moving onto the next.

    read the tutorials.

    just gotta keep trying, everyone is shit when they start off.

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