ManKind

[Engivale]

This is like the house I grew up in;
Forever I sever these ties still corruptin'
My brain
My insane twitches
These inflamed unnamed snitches
That come up in like dicks in some bitch's-
Snatch, Catch - The Ball
You're It
You've got AIDS and gay parades can't Save Shit
A Brave Clit can take this punch
I Hate this young aged racist bunch
of Bastards
Ain't this what happened when
The white guys started rappin
Actin' black-
You can count on that
If bein colored means seeing other
People as Smothered; Trapped...Exact..
.Lee... I said this before
No entry from my peasantry for war...

I see this world like the Earth does...
Worthless humans polluting, Please disperse us..
Kill us slowly...
Mother Earth, What's the Use?
We're refuse and you know garbage should die-
So why wait? This time's trait is to be reckless-
Expect us to get worse- This is a curse
Mankind, No hand unscanned, Rhyme
Can't express how we've caused Regress
Millions of species suppressed by these
Emotions like cold feces...
Feeds the flies - Bleeds the eyes
Of old lizards, Distracts prey-
Disrupts Predators
This last play is for mass debiters
Who steal money - Deposit
I just lost it, Why be funny?
I'm serious, This furious toothless culture
it's old laws puttin' clause on us like a
Ruthless Vulture...


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[P. Mortuus]

Nice like your usual style, the flow was remarkable, which made the read that much more enjoyable na mean.I also liked the rants on the world and seperating world from earth was very clever. The structure suited this type of an om and i read all te way to the end without stopping. Whoch basically means this piece was adle to keep me grasped and attentive for long enough and this results in me saying that this piece was more than worthy the time i spent reading & feeding on it. Only problem i found is the ending the rhyming got awkard for me there bu other than that a nice short snetenced read, Stay Up.

[Omega.]

this was great even though it was like you just wrote it down and how you felt on it you made it come out well...

This is like the house I grew up in;
Forever I sever these ties still corruptin'
My brain
My insane twitches
These inflamed unnamed snitches
That come up in like dicks in some bitch's-
Snatch, Catch - The Ball
You're It
You've got AIDS and gay parades can't Save Shit
A Brave Clit can take this punch
I Hate this young aged racist bunch
of Bastards
Ain't this what happened when
The white guys started rappin
Actin' black-
You can count on that
If bein colored means seeing other
People as Smothered; Trapped...Exact..
.Lee... I said this before
No entry from my peasantry for war...
^^
loved your opener and i liked how you used the wordings to your advantage and how you did a good job on your vocab and eye catching....very nice and enjoyable read my dude!.....

I see this world like the Earth does...
Worthless humans polluting, Please disperse us..
Kill us slowly...
Mother Earth, What's the Use?
We're refuse and you know garbage should die-
So why wait? This time's trait is to be reckless-
Expect us to get worse- This is a curse
Mankind, No hand unscanned, Rhyme
Can't express how we've caused Regress
Millions of species suppressed by these
Emotions like cold feces...
Feeds the flies - Bleeds the eyes
Of old lizards, Distracts prey-
Disrupts Predators
This last play is for mass debiters
Who steal money - Deposit
I just lost it, Why be funny?
I'm serious, This furious toothless culture
it's old laws puttin' clause on us like a
Ruthless Vulture...
^^
it was like an urban type of flow shit ya know.....it was like a DMX shit...it was nice man real nice and great my dude!...

stay up we should collab later on in life

[Illus']

This is like the house I grew up in;
Forever I sever these ties still corruptin'
My brain
My insane twitches
These inflamed unnamed snitches
That come up in like dicks in some bitch's-
Snatch, Catch - The Ball
You're It
You've got AIDS and gay parades can't Save Shit
A Brave Clit can take this punch
I Hate this young aged racist bunch
of Bastards
Ain't this what happened when
The white guys started rappin

Nice lines here , definitely a different style of
metaphor rhyme scheme.

Your word use is an odd style the way you
mix everything together however it makes
sense. Makes it an easy read.

You've got AIDS and gay parades can't Save Shit

deep line there imagine if every line was as much
as an impact as this one . definitely would
be nominated by me.
Short yet meaningful

Stay writing and using the same style.

[Engivale]

^uppin

[Engivale]

^uppin

basically because I just read like ten pieces that sucked ass in the front page of OM.