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    Leave Me Where I Lay

    Leave Me Where I Lay . . .
    By: Nash

    The truth is, i'm in a fluently ruthless state & my heads all over
    thoughts poppin distraught, i feel like i barely know her
    into the eyes of the bestower, i'll be sober soon . . .
    i need to bleed my tears, needin' her like the sun needs noon
    but it tear's my limbs away, like monsunes on harsher days
    & they say today i'll stay safe in a way, but that's just play
    it's gay, although i hate that word, i've thrown myself to use it
    i look at the ground to see that bruised bitch. i'm a fool, shit ..
    . . .the drink slides it right down my throat, the anger that is
    it's her fault, that she could no longer stand this . . .
    this relationship, the one i ended. one she'd pretended to love
    i acted cowardly, but she was distracted ..
    and death was what i was thinkin of!
    so i held the gun sturdy, my feelings tossing and turning . . .
    the bullet WILL be burning, but not in a sense of physical hurting
    the myth's so dirty, & today, i feel i've created a bigger legend
    the readers have the wrong idea, somethin' aint been mentioned
    i'm feeling detentioned, i need this extention, i love her too much
    but as i clutch this trigger, bigger thoughts of death becomes a grudge
    & such beatings are to be kept a secret, the beating'll be slain
    i want you all to leave me where i lay, and DON'T remember my name
    yeah, you've found out, i'm held back, worthless, i've seen NOTHING
    and to make this pain hurt less, i'll show HER that i'm doin' something
    i'm not bluffin' bitch, this is some poetic shit. gonna turn to things bigger
    a lonely, and rejected city slicker, & she sentenced my head to the trigger



    i dunno i kind've freestyled this a couple months ago, i'm sure i could've juiced it up and fixed problems with it but to hell with it ..read it, hope you like it.


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...43#post4836843
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=304169
    Last edited by Cody Nash; August 11th, 2006 at 05:29 PM

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    yeah, i pretty much hate OM :\ ..

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    Lmao it's cool Cry you had some ok imagery nothing special but you are kinda good at the creativity at some point but you made yur concept look a bit played for some reason like it was used before in a sense you had some vocabulary but that only means so much try reading other verses in the OM forum it should get easier as you go on.

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    havent read one of your topicals for a while glad i saw this one imgrey was dope had some nice line ill quote one

    so i held the gun sturdy, my feelings tossing and turning . . .
    the bullet WILL be burning, but not in a sense of physical hurting

    example of your imagrey you also had some nice emotion just work on some more inner rhymes and it will flow better because it was a bit choppy okay verse though ive seen you do better


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=305341

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    thank you sirs. i'll get around to those tomorrow, i g2g right now. but thanks.

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