sad gurl in a mad wurld

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she was just a child vilated by a man so vile-
acts that she couldnt combat the thought made her bleed bile.
the first month her body felt the ripping her fragility stripping
waking up every morning from nightmares but never slept
just this uneasy feeling so sickening.
late nights clenching pillows tight she'd dream inst6ead of trying to fight
beaten repeadily sililiquies had her contimplating ways to end life.
But she survived thow for some reason her weight started blowing up
Hrs were spent to a porcilen god throwing up.
That’s the only one she could worship as her young ass and hips
Were assaulted by his dick and fist kiss for effection
but a fathers love has nothing to do with tongue and lips.
She was calmed when young by his finger tips.
Now she fear hot touch from the memories of being hit.
Every day another late it’s serious
she not understanding what happened to her period
plus she always hungry and her waiste size stretched like a bungee.
Always sick she figured it was cause of the sick shit don’t to her figure
Learned to hold back the tears it got him off quicker
Avoid when he’s off the liquor,
But her mind was a gun with a finger behind the trigger.
Saw a doctor for the proof, but when she herd it feared telling him the truth.
So he never knew just continued to do making her more screwed
In lue of the pain she tolerated it trying to stay sain
Picking a name thinking of lies so the child would never live with her shame.
The same man that loved made love to her bodily portions
Made himself a grandfather and father later gave her an abortion
After that she tried yelling rape but met with accusation she lied
And realized that the future like this was something she couldnt take
Her body wont tolerate so she lte the razor escabate
Her wrist until she finally found the only way to escape.



http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...565#post4560565
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=295884

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[Engivale]

Okay, man, sorry noone has commented, I think it's just a tad played as far as a story goes, but maybe it's from some sort of personal experience or someone you know or read about.

I thought you flowed decently, but at parts it got a little bit rugged and slipped, but that is okay because you told your story and got your point across on it. I think it was a decent piece, but you may have written it too quickly and not concentrated so much on the language as you did the story itself.

6/10

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