Hey there!

It looks like you're enjoying Rap Battles Forum but haven't created an account yet. Why not take a minute to register for your own free account now? As a member you get free access to all of our forums and posts plus the ability to post your own messages, communicate directly with other members and much more. Register now!

Already a member? Login at the top of this page to stop seeing this message.

User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 5 of 5

Thread: Dandelions Blue's.

  1. #1
    I'm Twisted. FanQ.'s Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2006
    Age
    35
    Posts
    764
    Battle Record
    1-0

    Dandelions Blue's.


    *Strums*

    I sit in this room with bloods sprayed on the walls,
    Strumming my guitar while My Niagara River Falls,
    Feeling the wetness on my cheeks as I make this call
    To everyone who’s walking death in heaven hall.
    I tap my foot in a rhythmic, for the people heart beat,
    Just to flashback the cherish memories that’s been discrete
    From the concrete streets and the human flesh minds,
    The bind used to be tight and bright, but now we’re blind
    Like Ray Charles, we’re looking right inside the darkness,
    Black Panthers affiliations is no more a big caucus
    *String Pops*
    *Strums*

    I hear drip drops from the ceiling. Their souls are crying,
    My Soul quakes, they’re talking, while my lips quivering.
    Clench my fist on the handle of the guitar. Black power,
    Gotten so sour, we used to help others but now it’s like “Our”
    And “Mine”. We’re losing a lot of pedals everyday,
    By heart aches, pain and tears of reign, in addition the hate
    All this stuff is clogging the peace system, we can’t flow
    Together no more, so the nutrient has stopped, so we can’t grow.
    I can’t take this; the stress is peeling my insides like a banana,
    There’s no freedom, and we’re clinch so tight in its bandana
    *String Pops*
    We’re growing so much anxiety and I’m too. “No more strings”,
    Along with the whole society, I’m feeling so blue, “No Feelings”
    So many of us are like flowers with thorns, love can’t touch us,
    Its Like Porn, we fuck our own people with a big hard hate thrust,
    Without no protection and we inject Death aids in their souls,
    Lungs fold and shoot some white Envy that can leak red holes.
    “I can’t express” We’re Burning our own, fuck call us “Jews”
    “And I’ll be damn, no more strings, I’ve lost my people and my blues”
    *Smashes the Guitar*





    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=303932
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=303086
    Last edited by FanQ.; August 4th, 2006 at 03:27 PM
    It's my own space, my own time, when I'm just out there letting my thoughts go. It's part of my day like eating, and it's one of my favorite parts.

    Louise Kent


  2. #2
    I'm Twisted. FanQ.'s Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2006
    Age
    35
    Posts
    764
    Battle Record
    1-0
    ..............bump.
    It's my own space, my own time, when I'm just out there letting my thoughts go. It's part of my day like eating, and it's one of my favorite parts.

    Louise Kent


  3. #3
    Banned
    Join Date
    Aug 2006
    Location
    Ontario, CA
    Age
    61
    Posts
    357
    Battle Record
    1-1
    To be honest, I didn't really even think about the N.O. incident....and you said it was about that. overall the piece is not bad though. I like the wording in the middle stanza, the one that says Strums. The wording there was your best wording in the OM and it was pretty creative. Emotion wasn't felt by me very well, but I did enojy this as a read. Keep writing....you didn't do bad by any means.

    -Old Man (link in my sig)

  4. #4
    I'm Twisted. FanQ.'s Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2006
    Age
    35
    Posts
    764
    Battle Record
    1-0
    Thanks man.............
    It's my own space, my own time, when I'm just out there letting my thoughts go. It's part of my day like eating, and it's one of my favorite parts.

    Louise Kent


  5. #5
    I'm Twisted. FanQ.'s Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2006
    Age
    35
    Posts
    764
    Battle Record
    1-0
    ......................
    It's my own space, my own time, when I'm just out there letting my thoughts go. It's part of my day like eating, and it's one of my favorite parts.

    Louise Kent


Similar Threads

  1. W4: Joe Metts vs. Blue Bayou - Blue wins via NS
    By Barcotic in forum Closed Battles
    Replies: 6
    Last Post: October 29th, 2013, 05:15 PM
  2. Blue Bayou (3-0) vs. Flash (2-1) Blue Wins
    By Token in forum Closed Battles
    Replies: 11
    Last Post: October 24th, 2011, 01:28 AM
  3. Blue Bayou (2-0) vs. Slowhands (0-0) Blue Wins
    By Token in forum Closed Battles
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: October 10th, 2011, 10:12 AM
  4. The Blue
    By Lyricistism in forum Poetic Scriptures
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: May 23rd, 2007, 11:04 AM
  5. In Blue ( Hate to the peeps in blue)
    By Plain-Thug in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: March 10th, 2006, 04:08 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •