A Feather

[Lord of Pens]

A Feather



Sweeping through the air elegantly, whisping through winds gracefully,
Roaming through the land wonderingly,falling, touching the ground gently,
Oh how I envy a feather, the warm night coats it as if it were a sweater,
See the world as if an air traveler, and even dipped in ink to write letters,

Swaying from side to side with the invisible parachute the wind provides,
To be blown away in the sky, and flow freely like an oceans summer tide,
Every piece of you soft as silk, every part of you the white color of milk,
The middle of you hard and sterdy as if they were built like stone stilts,



Even different types, but they all fly more free than a young boys kite,
No string to hold it tight, No ribbons holding it away from the blue sky,
To have a purpose, to either keep an animal warm or to fill a jacket,
At least they don't make a racquet, to live life without any regrets,

Different sizes, every feather is different and holds new surprises,
Don't you all realize, to be able to even see when the Sun rises,
Oh to be a feather, wouldn't have to worry about bad weather,
Cuz see a feather, to be bound, when will that happen, never,



Oh those beautiful feathers,


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[Lord of Pens]

uppin for feed.

[FanQ.]

This is creative and very decent. The rhyme scheme made the piece very easy to read and relaxing. The tone of this piece was very calm, not forced just speaking/talking ya know?. Uh The imaginary was very well portrait you used metaphors and they were also decent as well. The Emotion from this verse was express in a vivid way but you can still feel the feelings of the character speaking about feathers. Overall this was pretty decent man.

Hey if you want, I'm down for a collab, get at me man. I'm liking your style. Return the favor please by leaving a feedback on my piece called "A Nocturnal Reverie". Link in sig bruh. Thanks peace.

[Lord of Pens]

Thanx. uppin for more feed.

[Soule]

I liked thie wordplay and structre. What you did by doing a story on both fethers was really cool and I liked it alot. the flow was great through this whole peace but work on the rhyme skeme ok?. the creativty and imagenary wa nice and I liked the story alot. Keep up the good work. 9-10. Keep writing man,.

~LeX

[XM]

An very impressive display of imagry and the emotion was beautiful, the vocabulary and the word choice was amazing it went along with the topic perfect, the structure was fairly decent and the syllable count was just about even good job homie

[Lord of Pens]

Thanx for the feed everybody.

[Lord of Pens]

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