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    The Public Execution

    The Public Execution


    “I shall not need the head cloth; I want to see the world before I die”


    My decomposing carcass will be prey to vultures; the ulcers
    Begin to clandestinely erode the core that stored the lore
    Burn body burn, begin the penultimate firework display
    Lay the lay workers to rest as the bloody butcher behests
    Me to lie on my knees with my head forward on the gap
    They then strap my hands and people start to clap, clap
    At the show of whom they believe is worthy of death
    By decapitation they wish to steal the zeal of my last breath

    “I shall lie down and laugh at the irony of what is to be”

    The drought of woodworms was not to be, they chewed in extreme ecstasy
    Me the man now the dunce, being tested and tasted by worms in abundance
    The cold steel of the knights armour mocked as my head locked steadfastly
    Locked in the lock that locks the fate now unlocked to show no penance

    “Let me see my reaper”

    I have one chance to look and so I look at the face displayed as an open book
    The man operating the hook that will bring this crook to the reaper in the nook
    I see with clarity and as I see I vision the demonist regime striking at my head
    Eyes were closed but then they opened them, to see the look of a man who’s dead

    "..."


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    At the show of whom they believe is worthy of death
    By decapitation they wish to steal the zeal of my last breath
    very nice drop here pak but its not nearly the best ive seen of you...u lacked multies on some lines but meh u came up with the flow was didnt fall much....strutre was very good i like how u did it....this was a very creative drop i must say i dont read shit like this often but when i do im impressed and i deff think that your becoming of the best topical writers on this site...good drop...
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    Yeah preciate the honest feed bloodz, checked your lwork, it was very goo, stay up
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    Before i go.....^
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    OH YEAH!.crazy mettas n aliterations. rythm is str8 smooth on this joint. ill have to read it some more later when am chillin n get back to you some more. coz it appears you poured out the artistic cup on this peice and its not a quick one to read
    shit is str7 tite n neat tho

    imma holla bak still

    glimpse this joint on the way out

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=301704


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    Preciate it V, i'll check up ya linkage tommorow no doubt.
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    sorry about taking so long to get to this dude, I was quite busy, you know how it is.

    anywayz, here's what I thought of this:
    yet another very good peice from you dude, I was really feeling this one, your metaphors are what made this peice dope in my opinion, they were fucking crazy dude lol and they flowed very well too. The storyline was great I loved the read, it was very descriptive and you showed that you are on top of your game at the minute dude. Like Vortex said, this peice wasn't one that I could leave feed on after only one read, I read this peice three time, that's not a complaint or a criticism, it shows that this peice is extremely complex. And by the way I didn't mind reading it more than once because it was a very enjoyable read and I could have read it about five hundred times before getting even the slightest bit bored, (ok maybe that was a bit of an exxageration) lol. as I've said before you always drop solid OMs in this forum and I can see you elevating a lot with every peice, pretty soon you're going to be right up there with the best my man. Keep at it, I love reading your peices and watching you elevating, and I will continue to do so. Props

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    Preciate the commetns, Thanks...good to see you enjoyed it, stay up.
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    checked^
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    yo this was good drop the topic was good you always present something that is different and dope no change with this one saw some great metas in there great job with that the flow changed up a little bit but nothing to serious the structure was complex and that was interesting and the rhyme scheme was original just like the structure also nice vocab in there overall 9/10 stay up
    leave feed on my om aproaching night
    hit up these om's wit some feed

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