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Thread: Goodnight, Snow White

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    Goodnight, Snow White

    He was a secret, tucked underneath her bed and
    embracing the sixth blood stain on Jesus's womb.
    She was a wedding dress, painted white with the
    clouds she wore, and the sun shone throug her
    pupils. They were a problem.
    He had an attraction to one of seven devils's
    dancing upon children's tombs and mausoleums.
    She had no fantasy of serpent hearts pillaging
    her body and no dream of becoming Mother Goose Grim's
    object of mangled mindscape depression. This, they, them. Was a problem

    No man is an island. No body is a resting place for
    a perverted escapade. No soul knew
    about this problem. Months later, she
    had a secret under her bed, ensnared by the same stain
    he embraced. A paradoxical union beneath the
    eyes that seek. He threw black paint on the wedding
    dress of clouds she wore. He harvested
    secrets like her, inside his mind. She burnt them, yet they froze her.
    Cold forever, her soul icing over. She can never forget his
    breath, icy with the stench of one thousand and one desires.
    One thousand and one desires fulfilled.

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    Nice job dude. You are defiinitely a great story teller, and your crisis style is also good. Abstract, and weird in someways but just emotional and descriptive in other ways, and you just know how to weld random things together and make a tin story that never fails to let the reader appreciate it. Awesome job on this one, and I liked the oblong views in it, yet the original concept.

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    thanks, man

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    Whadafxup

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