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Thread: Lyrical Jawn.

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    Lyrical Jawn.

    6. just a sheerly lyrically track, like some 95 hip-hop, no-topic, lyrical jawn


    Pffft..

    Ferocious and viscious,
    So potent, consistent, on making hopeless decisions,
    Provoking a witness, victims are thrown in the prisons,
    Foes in Christian sadistic cult-specific throned on commission,
    Consoling commitments, gripping and blown by the spirits,
    Then in zone by the image, and Christ's a chromed, iced inscription,
    A prone hyped addition of a home life addiction,
    Bible inflictions leaves us miserable, like long psych prescriptions,
    Grown enlightened, yet ignorant. No truth in the end,
    It's just foolishness- protruding into uselessness trends,
    From the puke in the binge, youth is the root of the cringe,
    That is fused between the two movements of truth and our sins,
    Proving to be ruthless, intruding, it's confusing, and then,
    Our stupid choices are alluding to abuse and revenge,
    Yet we're used to the spins, thrusts that few could avenge,
    Being smooth is a miscue in a viewable lens,
    Misused and screwed in a sense, yet we abide by the laws,
    But then fight for it all with and for reliable cause,
    See we vibe with the flaws, just so excited, in awe,
    Then the plight of a fall hits us, like a strike of a claw,
    Recite and then pause, think about employing yourself,
    Not in form of our wealth, but in restoring our health,
    Then informing ourselves about our arguable fate,
    And our fallible weight of burdens fall at plausible rates,
    The cause of our hate crawls from the slums of our race,
    And holds an astonishing place in our heart and our face,
    Yet we pardon the stakes, willing to go far if it takes,
    Our ability to judge, disregarding mistakes,
    So startled, we may stay bottled then thus,
    We remain hollow- until we learn to follow in trust.
    Improbable JUS- tification modeling US,
    Some action must be taken, so swallow it UP,
    Harboring lust, plain Jane's now borrowing bucks,
    And debt's becoming a beast- mauling and crushed,
    Hauling the fuss, and now the finest has came,
    Now you've heightened the blame between all your whine's & complaints,
    It's designed in a range of our high and lows,
    Where we're riding slow through Life on a minor road,
    The cycle shows, that we're the cause of our death,
    The reason for all reasons, the scars on ourselves,
    All the talks on the shelves now, and the turn is mischievous,
    Cuz Life is a long path, until you learn to lead it.


    -Nique
    Last edited by .Nique.; July 16th, 2006 at 11:27 AM
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    this had a decypherable flow about it
    mad on the multi's, some good rhyme scemes
    and sorta stayed on topic for somthing that had no topic
    life in general, nice rhyme 8/10

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    6. just a sheerly lyrically track, like some 95 hip-hop, no-topic, lyrical jawn
    then its ill for what it is, couple of bars were a lil hard on
    the transition, cud a been the way i was spitten,
    just a decent drop cant say much more,gud
    in relation to intent ....peace
    Woven miraculous miracles in immaculate verse……….
    Within meticulous syllables kill inaccurate verbs……...
    Vicious superlative anarchy simulator of words………..
    Vocally hit at velocities watching amateurs burn……..

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    6. just a sheerly lyrically track, like some 95 hip-hop, no-topic, lyrical jawn
    then its ill for what it is, couple of bars were a lil hard on
    the transition, cud a been the way i was spitten,
    just a decent drop cant say much more,
    Woven miraculous miracles in immaculate verse……….
    Within meticulous syllables kill inaccurate verbs……...
    Vicious superlative anarchy simulator of words………..
    Vocally hit at velocities watching amateurs burn……..

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    thought the flow was terrible on this... stick to what you know, is my advice

    you went over the top on this one
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    ^Ahahaah. You're English. You probably just couldn't catch the flow.

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    Last edited by .Nique.; July 13th, 2006 at 06:46 PM
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    Nique, it’s like your flow never stops, it just keeps going, and going, and going, and going, like damn is it batteries or steroids – what the fuck?

    Anyways, exceptional piece – at least I think it was, hell to tell you the truth I don’t even think I know what this piece is about, I mean don’t get me wrong – I read it, but I can’t remember anything about it; your flow was just so deep I kind of just got lost in it to be honest. Hmmmmm….hold on let me go back and re-read this.


    LOL, guess I skipped that little caption at the top of the page, no wonder I couldn’t put my finger on the concept. Anyways this was dope for what it was, hella complex and lyrically boastful. Your Hip-Hop superpowers were on full display here!

    p.s.- anytime you fill like safing the the world one rap battle at a time, just holla at ya boy. I keep my cap at my mama's house, and believe me when I say she keeps it clean, pressed, and ready to fly.

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    ^lol yea, it isn't really about anything in particular, except general things...that's why it's called 'lyrical jawn'..the league that i'm currently in had that as one of the topics..felt good to be at ease and just start typing without thinking about a specific storyline and/or content..laid back

    and dev, thanks for the critique
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    this was unique and koo and fresh ya know.....nice touch to it and flow was exact and the creativity and complexity was good. nice drop nique...
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    Lol @ Dev

    this shit flowed the whole way through

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    Sick writing. This is something that just comes naturally after a longtime. You learn to have great structure and internals without even rereading or looking it over. Good talent, Nique, even if it was somewhat of a half-assed keystyle.

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    I really dont think Dev was reading the same piece i just did. Flow was bananas!! I fealt this piece. What i got from it was .. basically, as humans.. we constantly contradict ourselves. We want to do good... but we do the oppisite. I dont know if that was the point or not.. but thats what i got out of it.. and all that matters is that I AM HAPPY... lololol. Well done.
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    Thanks E, and I added on to this.
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