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Thread: Relationship: The Apologetic Visionary and The Unforgiving Poet

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    Relationship: The Apologetic Visionary and The Unforgiving Poet

    Apologetic Visionary

    Romancing flames have burnt out with winters change
    In the center of me though, still a flicker remains
    A dim glimmer, upon a shimmering golden wick sustains
    Well lit to burn through eternity, when the wax is malaise
    Intact with my passion my senses have let go of the mundane
    Now all that exist to me, is the reminiscent memories ive claimed
    Love, i have never and will never shun, or turn my head away
    Even if Eden is without it and the heaven's give it no praise
    So i refraine from the rest, until i find a felicity in life
    Until love wilts like rose pedals and its stem tilts and alights
    And returns to the dirt, with dust and cuddled roots alike
    Until i meet it there in death, beneath ebony soil and oak blight
    Deep infactuation has taken me and to it i am a slave
    My chains of lust bind me to never forget my lovers name
    And forever i am hers, forever i shall retain
    The stale love that use to blossom, in the tender months of spring

    Unforgiving Poet

    A fire has sparked in the depth of darkness
    As you forcefully deny & refuse it
    The wax descends its pureness
    Loosing sense & releasing its own destiny
    Reminiscent memories no longer exist or are claimed
    Love shunned & turned into nothinglessness
    Eden has no praise without its Heaven
    Cannot refrain from life & rest
    Love wilted as you let the petals fall
    No returning back to where it once came
    Sweet engangments no longer occur
    & you are freed from my soul
    Lusting chains have burst & forgotten the lock of THY name
    As Spring arrives this stale love will wither away



    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=4690088
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=300251

    just so you guys know, i know the two styles are alot different, it was purposly made that way.

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    This was nice, it's been a while since I've read random poetry, felt good to see in OM. I loved the contrasting styles you incorperated into this work, very nice addition. I thought the diiferences were exceptionally good, as one covered the same concepts in very unique approaches. Langauge was fluid, emotion was felt and imagery was good. A very solid display here, nice to see something different and appealing to my peotic tastes. Very familiar, just can;t place it...

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    thank you. more feed plz. lol.

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    multies was coo.......... flow was on..... vocab and wording seemed ace...
    was mos def emotive flooded.. imagery was on sum smooth shit........yeah was dope..... nice metaphoric quotent gave it a good edge and depth. poetics was ace. crispy new shit........ was nicely formatted structured and all merged together well. yeah.. nice pice

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    ive been reading quite alot of OM's and in all honesty this is up there as a good drop, you had pretty much everything. Good multies, good flow and nice structure. also unlike alot of other OM's i didnt get bored, drift off or fall asleep reading this lol.
    nice drop


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