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Thread: "One Life" ft. Ledgenz

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    "One Life" ft. Ledgenz

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    All I need is one life...



    Speak my name, no more jokes – matter fact fuck a title
    Touch no bible with no hands to God – hoping with luck the sky will
    Open to destruct what I will – but religion’s run amuck with idols
    Incisions that’ll touch the vital – my visions of such recitals
    I admit that I look up to rivals and suffer trifles
    knowing that as such my child will
    Have a better life to lead – mind still travels at hyper speeds
    Death concurs and conquers when life agrees to lie in peace
    Yet strife impedes and gripes increase, inner hatred becomes a silent beast
    Violent beef inside you creeps and steals thoughts like a strident thief

    I shot Salomon;

    Gamora longs to rest sin's head in his prolonged songs
    to pay a plot of testament to the knots of our sedative God's palms.
    All along we bled, and then there were 10... Bred to stone, hendge
    eye's raped a cumulo hope before those stones laid a lone bed
    for vice to strattle virtue in a church booth;
    I confess, I attest to my dead.

    In line with the meek to inherit the earth and share in it’s worth
    We apparently weren’t aware of the curse like a parent at birth
    Believing that life is grand and fair at the first
    Becoming gods or just summing odds – just impairing the girth
    Some portals not meant for mortals – simples can’t reach Olympus
    Venturing with fractured sentences hoping to increase the interest
    Give priests repentance – I’ve no need for friends or kinship

    Now I can dance with daddy's body around my pants and lobby
    the ignorant hands to gather round and command our bodies.


    Receding – my feet are drenched as when I bleed the sin drips
    Don’t need a deity to free me from being – it’s senseless
    Breeding a vengeance against those who feed me repentance from unholy vows
    Still you holier than thous used to kneel to golden cows
    Now spoken in scrolls you found supposedly on Moses’ mount
    Of how supposedly I’m going south for the views of which I’ve spoken now
    This isn't religious backdraft it's a passive resistance,
    last act to contact auspicious contrast because odds are in
    flash sequence; this life could last as composite image...

    If I could focus this vintage lense for just a second I could book this past
    for future visits, so this successful living would last behind the looking glass
    on those 80 degree days...
    were the sun breathes deep and those open hand waves aren't pacts,
    No! Those are brash acts of desperation and creation of last laughs
    Rippling off attraction from the soul of hearts gone black
    and mouths gone stale in braille humidity were we now begin to pass.


    In reality you hope you’ve found a way to ease your mind a bit
    Find coincidence embellished to make a sign of it
    In my mind it’s time to quit running bull in china with this line of shit
    Resign to submit nevermore – no reverence to a reverend whore
    For every sign of six you affix I’ll reveal seven more til heavens door
    Opens to accept the scores flocking to your metaphors
    Blood shed of or for the masses as if that was what your letters’ for

    All I need is one life!

    One life of my own, one wife and a home
    Spoken from a god on an unlikely throne
    Broken by ghosts, give me one night alone
    Hope lost for hosts, imprisoned, unwriting poems
    Last edited by Atti; July 5th, 2006 at 11:05 AM
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    abstanticollective.

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    Lol, you only need two links man... But is this settup ok with you?
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    abstanticollective.

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    This was pretty deep... i liked ledgenz parts more for the rhymescheme and content... this was filled with a lot of good multies and poetic language... u guys made crazy references and kept me interested... although some parts seemed boring since i couldn't understand everything, but all in all it flowed nicely. the ending had a nice hook-type thing goin and Myself made the more interesting references to history and shit... both came dope tho.

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    lol I know but I have scores of unused links....its more of a political statement!

    and yeah the setup is cool....if we ever get any replies.

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    oopss spoke too soon....thanx for the peepage ES...always apperciated.

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    I liked this piece alot, the flow coming from legendz was mind blowing stuff, Peraonally i wasn't keen n the structuring, but it didn't down size the read for me... it was complex, yet at the same time easy of the tongue which i like when i'm reading a verse... a very poetic aproach which as you will know... i fucking lovvveee lol... you kept my interest basically the whole way through... which is unlike most pieces i read... i usually get to like the second stanza and die of boredom, but i was genuinely interested at this. well done guys.
    AI


    “¡Viva la Revolución!”

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    Ya you love my shit... I know I know

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    Wordsnot. This was noice... The diversity between the two verses were mad nasty ill dope, Ledgenz had Ledge had the dope flow with the multies and superior rhyme scheme, while Mys had his poetic touch to the piece, which evened out the piece real well and amde it a diverse read.

    This isn't religious backdraft it's a passive resistance,
    last act to contact auspicious contrast because odds are in
    flash sequence; this life could last as composite image...
    ILLNESS

    and... In reality you hope you’ve found a way to ease your mind a bit
    Find coincidence embellished to make a sign of it
    In my mind it’s time to quit running bull in china with this line of shit
    Resign to submit nevermore – no reverence to a reverend whore
    For every sign of six you affix I’ll reveal seven more til heavens door
    Opens to accept the scores flocking to your metaphors
    Blood shed of or for the masses as if that was what your letters’ for
    the flow was picking up and made that stanza take incredible flows and insane rhyme scheme.. damn this good dudes.. keep it up.

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    i thought this was quite the read, and worth my inactive time. anyways the emotion upon this piece was awesome and just my taste,the imagery was vivid and well thopught out as well,the structure and the way both came in was meshed well together, both of you keep doing your thing.and atti never stop amazing me dude!
    AI

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    Legendz- This is my first comment, and my first read on this site and all I want to say is...real. That's the only thing that can describe how I feel about this piece. It spoke to me in a voice not in words and the chills I got on my spine were electric. I will look for more of this from you. Thank you for the post.

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    well damn you and your greed for feed you faggot vultures lol. on to the peice, for the most part and one main thing i noticed is that you two write well together and your styles coinside well which made it a better collab than most. you both add so much complexity and metaphorical value to the peice that it's hard to say who was actually a better addition but the peice in itself is pretty exellent. i feel legendz took it as more of a hip hop type thing and his parts reminded me of nas's one mic for some reason, whereas myself took it from more of a poetic standpoint and just killed it with his complexity, thats what made this a good collab. good job guys.

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    Emotion was written all over this piece.. yall brought up hot schemes, which make it relevant and more interesting to read, vocab added alot to ur piece, most of the flo was great which make the read go smooth n not have to read twice n stuff , the imagry was great and the concept was exicuted well.. good piece

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    wow...thanx for the feeding freenzy guys

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    this was your piece consistancy of dopeness in emotion and flow...creativity in ART FORM of speaking ones mindless thoughts and visions..my dude this was a nice read worth real time!.

    RTF on my links if so possible.

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