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    The First Martyr

    The First Martyr




    Tuesday 23rd August – Cleansing my Sins


    As I lay on my mat, face down, forehead on the ground
    Trying to hear for a sign, but there’s never any sound
    Will I cause more distress? Or will I show a new path
    Hoping to finish this mess, As I bathe in my bath
    So much tension and friction, I can’t help but cry
    The Government hates our religion, I ask myself why
    We can’t compete against the country, we’ll just get beat
    I led a life of peace and love, so why am I feeling the heat
    Gently place a robe on myself, and enter the bathroom
    Pick up a comb and belt, and my hair, I easily groom
    So nervous, so confused, don’t know if It’s right
    As I place myself to bed, for another sleep depraved night


    Don’t know how to act…
    …will it be seen as courtesy
    They storm in a pact…
    ..and kill Buddhists with no mercy
    So many hurt, so many dead…
    …but why do I choose to cry
    As I stay thinking in bed…
    …is it their power I despise?

    No! Their acts are full of sin!…
    …but they love to bring us fear
    Crush our hopes like a tin…
    …I feel like the end is near
    Pray to my god, but nothing differs…
    …start to lose my faith in this mess
    As I rest, I think of calm things, rivers…
    …beaches, anything, but my distress



    Wednesday 24th August – The Start of the End


    I wake up, feeling renewed, and now face a new day
    The blue sky I left behind yesterday, has turned gray
    Shaking off doubts, I think positive, to achieve my goal
    Although my body may be burnt, you can’t destroy my soul
    Prepare my last breakfast of my life, and think back
    On my past, the strife, and the love I always lacked
    This is the start of battle, I say my last goodbyes
    Wonder into the desert, that’s a barren, nothing but dry
    My goods are packed, and I’m ready to travel
    My wrinkled feed, grazed, on the hard road made of gravel
    Am I a slave to this game? Am I digging an early grave?
    But nevertheless, I carry on, stay focused, stay brave

    How many more need to die…
    …the streets are riddled with blood
    When will they realize, open their eyes…
    …there is no peace, or love
    The Government should take action…
    …but all they do is laugh in our face
    Cause they’re members of the faction…
    …that shows nothing but disgrace

    The travel is full of pain…
    …but the sacrifice must be made
    All my people will be slain…
    …50,000 may die, if I don’t offer the trade
    My life for many innocent victims…
    …I must give one last gift
    Eliminate all possible symptoms…
    …so the country, can lift



    Thursday 25th August – The Sacrifice


    I have traveled for days, and am almost there
    The rough ground has left my feet, hard and bare
    My body is weak, numbness in multiple limbs
    One week has passed, As I walk, singing a selection of hymns
    I cannot talk, no more energy left inside
    I think of lots of poems, that I use to recite
    I made it to the town, It’s more beautiful than I thought
    I have hardly any goods, compared to the ones I brought
    Prepare myself for the pressure and pain
    Because in this game, there's no room for leisure and fame
    I sneak somewhere I cant be seen, and act subtle
    Put on my robes, light the match, and take the beer bottle


    I step into the middle of the city…
    …and I soon catch the towns eyes
    As I attempt this holy suicide…
    …people begin to realize
    As the liquor pours over my head...
    …I think not about death
    No matter all the tears shed…
    …I think about the legacy I have left

    Light the match and watch it burn…
    …I can feel the heat
    Light myself alight, but I will return…
    …to the people I have hurt, and greet
    Them with a friendly smile…
    …and all the fighting will seize
    We have won our trial…
    …a country full of utmost peace



    After all the violence and bloodshed, its my name they mutter
    The peaceful, moving and loving First Martyr


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    all dates, and events leading up to this mans, brutal, yet completely understandable suicide, are fiction. But the suicide, and this monks death, is completely real, and so is the photograph taken and prsented in my OM.

    uppin for some feed.
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    ok this was str8 HOT...im GLAD to fuckin have you on my CREW FA SHO!....this was great nice multies and great assets of wording and strucutre...str8 fire man...well developed and elouped to a great emotion..nice feeling on it aswell as FLOWMAN!...nice nice nice

    i have to say HOF material.
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    Quote Originally Posted by +AffIzIaL+
    ok this was str8 HOT...im GLAD to fuckin have you on my CREW FA SHO!....this was great nice multies and great assets of wording and strucutre...str8 fire man...well developed and elouped to a great emotion..nice feeling on it aswell as FLOWMAN!...nice nice nice

    i have to say HOF material.
    lol thanks man, took me about 1-1/2 hours to do. thanks for the feed.

    uppin for some more feed

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    straight dope verse man.....its woz sicc through out, ur good at topical man....and phat at sigs also lmao no seriously tho man that is a truly heavy poem....n its the first one i'v ever seen about the blazing monks in ww2.....its a nice peice man keep it up

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    Quote Originally Posted by gun-point
    straight dope verse man.....its woz sicc through out, ur good at topical man....and phat at sigs also lmao no seriously tho man that is a truly heavy poem....n its the first one i'v ever seen about the blazing monks in ww2.....its a nice peice man keep it up
    thanks man, good to have some great feedback on this peice. uppin for some more feed

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    this shit is straight ill..nice vocab..multies...mettas..and you had a hella flow..this would be 10/10....you got creative....and your verse was hella complex thats all a good thing..hot ass shit mann..keep doppin fire.......hola at ya boi...
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    Agreeing with the rest of them.
    This was an amazing drop, good job on it.
    Hope to see more from ya.
    Hopin' to see ya in some topical battles too.

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    holy fuck, 10/10?? lol this wasnt even my best. my shit will keep you easily amazed in the future if u think this was fire. uppin for some more feed, peace homies.

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    well it was hot.....
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    aight, uppin for some more feed homies.

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    damn that wazz good for a GFX head no doubt just get a bit more imagery in there I'll do a collab with you in the future if you would like that was pretty good I would say you have potential in the topical genre

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    Quote Originally Posted by Lick Wid
    damn that wazz good for a GFX head no doubt just get a bit more imagery in there I'll do a collab with you in the future if you would like that was pretty good I would say you have potential in the topical genre
    thanks man, PS: im not a GFX lol, i just make sigs for people that ask for them. I do specialize in topicals and this is not close to my best rhyme, i will think of a quality peice soon and drop fire when you least expect it . thanks for the feed homie.

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    whoa dead ass, this piece was crazy....i'm feelin that shyt, everything about it was official nothin lagged, nice vocab choice...good wording...good structure...and nice flow, overall 9.5/10


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    Quote Originally Posted by Hav
    whoa dead ass, this piece was crazy....i'm feelin that shyt, everything about it was official nothin lagged, nice vocab choice...good wording...good structure...and nice flow, overall 9.5/10
    thanks man, il hit up some feed on your peice and return the favor.

    uppin for some more feed.

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