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Thread: Ramdon i dont give a FUCK you can rap this to any beat

  1. June 13th, 2006, 01:35 AM #1
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    Ramdon i dont give a FUCK you can rap this to any beat

    YO MY FIRENDS SAY SOME SHIT ABOUT ME
    IM FUCKIN PARANOID I GOT HIT BY AN ASTROID
    SO I WORTE IT DOWN ON A PICE OF PAPER,
    FIRDENS SAY IM A FAKER SHIT’, NO PAPER!
    I USED BLOOD AND HAIR TO WRITE EM
    I HEAR LIGHTING I GET FRIGHT END
    I FEEL IN SECURE
    THAT’S WHY I DRINK LACQUER
    DISPOSE OF YOUR BODY IN THE SEWER
    LYRICAL CONTENT WORSE THEN THE CURE
    SERIOUS, SEROUSLY
    WHEN YOU SEE ME O D
    YOULL RUN UP A TREE
    THEN ILL COME AFTER YA
    CRAFTER
    USING A CHAIN SAW FROM MASSACRE
    GIVE YOU A MASSIVE SCAR
    Kidnapping a movie star
    From ER in a police car
    WATCH OUT IM A CLASS ACT RAPER
    GRIM REAPER PUSH YOU OFF A CLIF STEEPER
    IM FUCKIN STANDIND IN THE LUNCH LINE
    READY TO STRANGLE YOU WITH FISHIN LINE
    SO FUCKIN GET YOUR CREW AND YOUR NINE
    IM NOT SCEARED THE DIVEL IS PREVIENTING ME FROM DIEIN
    That’s why when you here sirens
    I’m always lien firing off, firing shots
    To stop these massive blood clots
    FIGHTS WITH WIVES WHO WILED KNIVES


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...90#post4593890
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...29#post4593929
    And all that gibberish
    that you were spittin'
    you need to kill it
    Cas your style is like dying in my sleep
    , I don't feel it
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  2. June 13th, 2006, 04:06 AM #2
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    I don't know what to say, I'm speechless...

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  3. June 13th, 2006, 04:39 AM #3
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    what y ?
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  4. June 13th, 2006, 05:09 AM #4
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    That was just straight up freestyle? If so, it's aight... It's pretty creative and shit, can't really fuck with the structure. But like I said, if its just freestyle, it's good. Peace

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  5. June 13th, 2006, 05:22 AM #5
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    CRAZY KILLER, IMA KILLER BUT WHEN I GROW UP IM GOING TO BE A DRILLER,
    WHO SAW THAT MOVIE THILLER, WAS THAT FUNNY DUDE IN IT? BEN STILLER. I LIKE PAM ANDERSON I WANNA CHILL WITH HER.

    random, i loved it. you inspired me. keep coming
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  6. June 13th, 2006, 05:38 AM #6
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    I dont think so.

    this piece was kinda free style material but it wasn't that good.

    I liked the creativity and you had some nice lines in this piece. I would say loose the CAPS LOCK and make it lower case. Tidy up your structure and widen your vocab. Your vocab was a lil scrappy over some places of this piece.

    I would give you top marks for a free style and creativity but i dont know if its just me but i like reading pieces with strong vocab and your piece didnt really have that. You had an ok topic but my advice for you is in future use better vocab and it will better the outcome of your piece.
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  7. June 13th, 2006, 05:52 AM #7
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    shit was garbage

    rof

    sry, SOMEONE needed to tell you
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  8. June 17th, 2006, 08:37 AM #8
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    thx fot the comments
    And all that gibberish
    that you were spittin'
    you need to kill it
    Cas your style is like dying in my sleep
    , I don't feel it
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  9. June 17th, 2006, 08:52 AM #9
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    Umm.....

    Flow: 6
    Vocab: 5
    Structure: 4
    Creativty: 7

    Basically I Didnt Like It. Nothing Appealed To Me. You Need To Work On It More, Like The Structure, Some Short Lines, Then Outstreched Ones.


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  10. June 17th, 2006, 09:11 AM #10
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    Umm Yea This Wasn't Good Nor Wicked Bad But Still In The Middle Kind Of
    I Wasn't Feeling The Topic With The Randomness It Was All Over The Place
    Rhymes Were Nice I Suppose, Impressive Multies Even Though There Were A Few
    Flow Was Meh, No That Good..Vocab Wasn't good, Elevate On That
    Overall This Was Like A 6/10.
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  11. June 18th, 2006, 03:29 AM #11
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    i aint even gonna leave feed because this isnt good at all....some bullshit....are you being serious kid?

    0.5/10 for trying

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  12. June 18th, 2006, 03:40 AM #12
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  13. June 18th, 2006, 05:19 AM #13
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    I'm 'posted' on the 'block' in amry fatigues with 'steel sparkin'
    Translate the 'slang' when I'm 'barkin'...
    The 'M.J. throwback'll' penatrate ya 'shootin gaurd' and have 'boxed in'
    The 'paint' decorating the 'hardwood's' goin' be thicker
    When I 'pull off the shot' ya whole 'squad' goin' pour 'liqour'
    'Mah nigga'... I 'work the crops' like 'slaves' to drape the 'whitest cottons'
    I know it might be a 'Shaka' but this cypha's a 'Pro Club'...
    so scrub, tell me how your ass got in
    I go through 'withdrawls' after installing smacked 'crack' on every track I'm 'rockin'
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    Of 'papa' slash biggie with 'momma titties' like 'Brittney'...


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  14. June 18th, 2006, 09:45 AM #14
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    IM FUCKIN PARANOID I GOT HIT BY AN ASTROID

    ^LMFAO! Good lord this was wack.
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  15. June 18th, 2006, 09:47 AM #15
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    Flow: 6.5
    Vocab: 6
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    not bad..some parts needed work

    overall=21/30
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