The Minority

[LedgenZ]

The Minority



we like revolution weather
solar dust and brimstone
several birds of one feather
can’t kill us with ten stones
we sculpt clouds like hand puppets and paper masks
we’re voodoo dancers naked at a sacred mass
we’re riot inciters with polite anesthesia –we
lapse into sacraments to exquisite corpses
quite lightly and leisurely
collapsing in fragments to exit the courses
we’re philosophic assassins for hire
we’re hollow earth shelter seekers
pissing water art and breathing fire
the sin of men’s selfless teachers
we’re the roman candles of discourse
audiophiles to our own voices
we’re the heavily saddled gift horse
the audience files to our own choices
weighing down our ghosts with magnets
paperweights for the paper thin
with skeletons in our cabinets
laying face to face with fate again
you lay awake in the plains and badlands
we’re the walking talking cadavers in black
unearthed birth of the 21st century bad man
victims of past words and matters of fact
we frighten the masses with airwave treachery
allegedly sever syllables spoken ill legibly
several silly fools want to tote the new weaponry
loaded for the bloke who spoke the truth epicly
we, the people of the united fates of apathy
laugh as our lair dilapidates rapidly
swoon to the moon with our bags packed happily
and crash back to earth when the clock strikes apogee
nasty as we have to be, black pageantry in action
spooning food for thought that couldn’t feed a fraction
of the population, hoards getting shot but not inoculation
vacant state of disarray displayed across the nation
play the doctor diagnosis, patience only serves to hurt you
we’re the voodoo priests who beseech to curse you
the few who sleep will rue the slew who sneak through curfew
and slink beyond the breech of decent virtue
we’re the victorious veterans of a holy holocaust
we’re the one’s who find all when all is lost

[FATAL CONCEPT]

we’re riot inciters with polite anesthesia –we
lapse into sacraments to exquisite corpses
quite lightly and leisurely
collapsing in fragments to exit the courses

my favorite lines of this piece...overall I think you did a nice job wit flow, delivery, and creativity. this was a very skillful open mic drop in my opinion. I really liked how you went into detail and pieced everything together in the right place. The opener was very good as well as the closer, keep droppin cuz this was a good drop to read and not have to try an flow wit it cuz it flows very cleary along with style that was easy to read.

-keep droppin

[LedgenZ]

^thanx for peepinp, up........

[Nique.]

First off, who the fuck are you. Second off, this was dope as fuck, like a Spoken Word down to the tee. The emotion was fantastic, the imagery was dope, and the flow was on point. I read this out loud and it was perfect. My favorite part:

paperweights for the paper thin
with skeletons in our cabinets
laying face to face with fate again
you lay awake in the plains and badlands
we’re the walking talking cadavers in black
unearthed birth of the 21st century bad man
victims of past words and matters of fact
we frighten the masses with airwave treachery
allegedly sever syllables spoken ill legibly
several silly fools want to tote the new weaponry

Tongue twisters out of the ass, but nothing BUT truth nevertheless. Shit was dope. I'm loving this, seriously. Also nominating it.

Nice to see freshness.

[LedgenZ]

damn man thanx for the love its truely apperciated and will be returned

[LedgenZ]

up.....

[Dan Dare]

A good message, and lot of very eloquent lines here, made this a good drop. Your meter seemed to get a bit more stretched towards the end and the piece suffered just a bit rhythmically, but I loved the closer.

This made me think actually, of Tyler Durden in Fight Club, when he says: "It's only when we've lost everything that we're free to do anything." Similar sort of idea.

Fave part:

we, the people of the united fates of apathy
laugh as our lair dilapidates rapidly
swoon to the moon with our bags packed happily
and crash back to earth when the clock strikes apogee

I was really impressed with this though, I was tempted to sig the bit above, but I see Nique's already beat me to it on that tip. Nice to see some new talent on the boards (unless you're an alias are you?). Regardless, keep writing.

[LedgenZ]

nah...no alias dawg...just plain ole ledgenz...thanx for the czech though its really apperciated.

[LedgenZ]

up...

[Bounce]

I concur with nique, this was dope man. I've peeped your stuff before, I must say you are a great fucken addition to our OM forum. Very well doen here, technicaly sound as well as strong message. complex and original, dope on all accounts. HOF for sure. I hope you stick around and look forward to seeing more from you inthe future.