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Text (b.2001 - d.2006)
LLL Season Four: Champion
LLL Season Four: Undefeated
Rbs 1st Text Tourney Champ
LLL's Longest Streak (22-0)
Former SS League Champ
Rbs 1st Battle In Legends Forum
Rbs 1st 1-2 Punch Champ
Member of A.I.
wassup Key
14
voted on champ & contendorship matches, and about 3 more
Last edited by Vaskez; June 18th, 2006 at 07:06 PM
Waddup. 14's coo
Artificial Intelligence
Originally Posted by Mr. Key
I seen Key's plans for the summer n frankly this bastard's sad
Fuck takin some internet class...
...your presence done took all the class it had
And dude, ya aint have to visit strip clubs to see what you need
Since you already see the topless than most peeps in the league
See, Key's got big plans but his cash won't make jaws bound to drop
When he goes on an affordable cruise and travels around his block
True, home's where the heart is, for you that's Buffalo I remember, son
So it's no coincidence that in the pics your sweetheart resembles one
The ladies love me tho, cos I'm the bomb and I get my dough up
But they feel even safer next to Key...
...knowin that chump'll never blow up
Now I talked a lot already but there's still things to be said
N I'd insert shit here...but I don't think you'd fit in the thread
Fool, I'm knowna flatten domes, whoever starts bitchin is dead
But we'd have to SMOKE that much...
...before a Key produced a hit to the head
Last edited by Vaskez; June 16th, 2006 at 11:38 AM
Dont step in my presence, ull get sonned, ur rep'll jus lessen
But I wont beat u too bad...this sunday im expecting a present
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Im nice duke, u'll get dissed, partly cause your garbage
So fuck beatin Key, u have enuff trouble winnin arguments wit Marvin
Face it, ur wack as fuck kid, ur rep just saddens
Bitch, Spit only ask u to join SC, cuz the forum needed extra padding
N we all have women problems, alotta chicks bitchin too hard
My girl throws bitch fits....you just hope ur bitch fits in the car
Learn how to please a woman, and stop stumblin, u foo
Cuz your girls never get off....thats just what they want u to do
U must b confused, so grab ya girl cuz ur sex rep is slumpin
And b sure to swap spit wit her..
Cuz u been on his dick since u joined Second Coming
And as for looks, ur hideous, seriously man its a shame
Ur face starts deep debates...over which side of the familys to blame
Last edited by Chewy; June 17th, 2006 at 12:15 AM
Artificial Intelligence
uppin for votes
I seen Key's plans for the summer n frankly this bastard's sad
Fuck takin some internet class...
...your presence done took all the class it had
well... not that creative, but slightly creative...seemed more straighforward than anything, so it didn't necessarily depend on creativity (altho that'd be a plus)... barely above avg
And dude, ya aint have to visit strip clubs to see what you need
Since you already see the topless than most peeps in the league
Haha. Good line, good job relating the quote to this, cuz honestly, otherwise you would've had to force the concept of a stripclub into the line.
See, Key's got big plans but his cash won't make jaws bound to drop
When he goes on an affordable cruise and travels around his block
Haha... again... Good use of the quote, you're lucky I bothered to read it. I almost didn't since I'm so tired, then figured it was important.
True, home's where the heart is, for you that's Buffalo I remember, son
So it's no coincidence that in the pics your sweetheart resembles one
Ehh... Calling his girl a Buffalo isn't that good of a diss... so even though you pulled it off smoothly (it wasn't extremely creative, but that wasn't the goal here) the diss still was just meh. When you write a line and go for the "surprise" factor you have to think about whether the actual diss is good in itself in the first place. This time, I have to give you credit, your execution wasn't to blame, I just didn't like the diss. dissing people's girls isn't my favorite, and calling her a buffalo? meh
The ladies love me tho, cos I'm the bomb and I get my dough up
But they feel even safer next to Key...
...knowin that chump'll never blow up
Meh. Seemed like a FL type diss put into an LLL style format. You're relating the concept of a bomb to the "slangish" terminology "blowing up"... bad concept, not creative.
Now I talked a lot already but there's still things to be said
N I'd insert shit here...but I don't think you'd fit in the thread
played, no
Fool, I'm knowna flatten domes, whoever starts bitchin is dead
But we'd have to SMOKE that much...
...before a Key produced a hit to the head
I honestly don't get this, prolly cuz I'm tired, lol
Dont step in my presence, ull get sonned, ur rep'll jus lessen
But I wont beat u too bad...this sunday im expecting a present
waste of a couple lines, this didn't diss him?
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Im nice duke, u'll get dissed, partly cause your garbage
So fuck beatin Key, u have enuff trouble winnin arguments wit Marvin
Lol, i chuckled, above avg
Face it, ur wack as fuck kid, ur rep just saddens
Bitch, Spit only ask u to join SC, cuz the forum needed extra padding
the forum needs padding? that makes no sense, meaning your diss depends on something that makes no sense, making the diss ineffective... at least it made no sense to me, anyway
N we all have women problems, alotta chicks bitchin too hard
My girl throws bitch fits....you just hope ur bitch fits in the car
not a true personal. never felt that type of stuff much. this is kinda creative so i give you points for that, but still...avg
Learn how to please a woman, and stop stumblin, u foo
Cuz your girls never get off....thats just what they want u to do
same as above, but a tad bit more creative this time.'
U must b confused, so grab ya girl cuz ur sex rep is slumpin
And b sure to swap spit wit her..
Cuz u been on his dick since u joined Second Coming
Good creativity, again, but I don't see it as true, lessening the impact significantly. although, as was in the last few bars, good wit... just... not a good personal. avg
And as for looks, ur hideous, seriously man its a shame
Ur face starts deep debates...over which side of the familys to blame
same
Key - I've never seen vaskez's pic if its even up, so some of your disses I can't really get into that much, and also you had too many girl disses. Not one of your best verses in my eyes, which is cool. You'll be feelin it next week
Vaskez - One of your favorite verses I've seen as far as the FIRST HALF goes. In the second half, you slumped a lot... I think you used the personals from his quote pretty effectively... but the rest of the battle got less creative & not as personal...you HAVE to have one or the other or both in my opinion.
vote - vaskez
this was a pretty decent read
i didnt get that "wow" reaction from either verse
but there was a couple of nice lines, which ultimatley decided the winner
vaskez
first off i really dont like reading quotes in battles, pics are cool to diss cus it
only takes a quick glance to notice, but u have to figure most people dont like to vote anyway because it takes time.. so to have to take extra time to read a fairly short quote from your opponent, to try to squeeze in some personals is kinda forcing the issue for me, but thats me..
i gave you the benefit of the doubt and didnt really hold it against you cus these days it is hard using personals against the same people every week and most of the generic disses are played no matter how you flip them
just thought id throw that in for free
I seen Key's plans for the summer n frankly this bastard's sad
Fuck takin some internet class...
...your presence done took all the class it had
not bad, coulda been better
And dude, ya aint have to visit strip clubs to see what you need
Since you already see the topless than most peeps in the league
this was nice, good wordplay in reference to the quote, when u think about
it, the this coulda been used without the quote and still have the same effect
See, Key's got big plans but his cash won't make jaws bound to drop
When he goes on an affordable cruise and travels around his block
again this was decent and u could have gotten away with it, without the quote, just depends
True, home's where the heart is, for you that's Buffalo I remember, son
So it's no coincidence that in the pics your sweetheart resembles one
i liked the concept, the wording may have hurt u bit, so this was just meh to me
The ladies love me tho, cos I'm the bomb and I get my dough up
But they feel even safer next to Key...
...knowin that chump'll never blow up
i get it, but it really didnt do much for me
Now I talked a lot already but there's still things to be said
N I'd insert shit here...but I don't think you'd fit in the thread
shit punches are played, no matter how good you flip them
this was a fairly weak flip, so its not gonna grab most readers
Fool, I'm knowna flatten domes, whoever starts bitchin is dead
But we'd have to SMOKE that much...
...before a Key produced a hit to the head
this could have been better, i get the concept but u lost me on the actual diss, idk
Key
Dont step in my presence, ull get sonned, ur rep'll jus lessen
But I wont beat u too bad...this sunday im expecting a present
nice opener, i had to think about it a minute, but i get it
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Im nice duke, u'll get dissed, partly cause your garbage
So fuck beatin Key, u have enuff trouble winnin arguments wit Marvin
lol, i thought this was nice, i liked the diss and the wording which in most cases is more important than the actual punch
Face it, ur wack as fuck kid, ur rep just saddens
Bitch, Spit only ask u to join SC, cuz the forum needed extra padding
seen this type of punch before, so it didnt do much for me
N we all have women problems, alotta chicks bitchin too hard
My girl throws bitch fits....you just hope ur bitch fits in the car
i have never really heard the phrase "bitch fits" idk, maybe its me
but that made the punch seemed forced to me, the concept was decent but
it still came off as being forced
Learn how to please a woman, and stop stumblin, u foo
Cuz your girls never get off....thats just what they want u to do
this was meh, thats two girl disses in a row you dont wanna go overboard
U must b confused, so grab ya girl cuz ur sex rep is slumpin
And b sure to swap spit wit her..
Cuz u been on his dick since u joined Second Coming
dam, another "ya girl" reference, even though the diss was really aimed at him and Spit, the reference itself is getting old
And as for looks, ur hideous, seriously man its a shame
Ur face starts deep debates...over which side of the familys to blame
closer was meh, but decent at best
dam key what hurt your verse, was the "girl" references, u used three in a row
i personally think its ok two use it one time at most, but i have always been
criticized for using them.. and it never good to bark on the same concept more than once, it limits the creativity factor
i did like your first 2 or 3 lines though, but i dont think they were goos enough to carry your verse
in thats case i am voting vazkez
even though i dont like quotes in verses, i felt that even if i didnt read the quote he could have pulled of some of the punches i liked
v/vaskez
appreciate the time you took to do the detailed breakdown fellas, thanks
2-0
And dude, ya aint have to visit strip clubs to see what you need
Since you already see the topless than most peeps in the league
See, Key's got big plans but his cash won't make jaws bound to drop
When he goes on an affordable cruise and travels around his block
True, home's where the heart is, for you that's Buffalo I remember, son
So it's no coincidence that in the pics your sweetheart resembles one
The ladies love me tho, cos I'm the bomb and I get my dough up
But they feel even safer next to Key...
...knowin that chump'll never blow up
Now I talked a lot already but there's still things to be said
N I'd insert shit here...but I don't think you'd fit in the thread
rally nice verse opener was iight... closer was iight also.. but i really dug the lines above...
vs.
N we all have women problems, alotta chicks bitchin too hard
My girl throws bitch fits....you just hope ur bitch fits in the car
Learn how to please a woman, and stop stumblin, u foo
Cuz your girls never get off....thats just what they want u to do
U must b confused, so grab ya girl cuz ur sex rep is slumpin
And b sure to swap spit wit her..
Cuz u been on his dick since u joined Second Coming
And as for looks, ur hideous, seriously man its a shame
Ur face starts deep debates...over which side of the familys to blame
nice lines here... the the girl punches were funny as fuck...
nice drop overall
i got vaskez winning by 1 quotable
V/vaskez
good drop fellas
hit my contender up
V
seen Key's plans for the summer n frankly this bastard's sad
Fuck takin some internet class...
...your presence done took all the class it had
ok open
And dude, ya aint have to visit strip clubs to see what you need
Since you already see the topless than most peeps in the league
ok
See, Key's got big plans but his cash won't make jaws bound to drop
When he goes on an affordable cruise and travels around his block
nah, ok but not hard
True, home's where the heart is, for you that's Buffalo I remember, son
So it's no coincidence that in the pics your sweetheart resembles one
ok
The ladies love me tho, cos I'm the bomb and I get my dough up
But they feel even safer next to Key...
...knowin that chump'll never blow up
hah
Now I talked a lot already but there's still things to be said
N I'd insert shit here...but I don't think you'd fit in the thread
predictable but decent at best, kind aplayed concept tho
Fool, I'm knowna flatten domes, whoever starts bitchin is dead
But we'd have to SMOKE that much...
...before a Key produced a hit to the head
almost... lol
nice..
key
Dont step in my presence, ull get sonned, ur rep'll jus lessen
But I wont beat u too bad...this sunday im expecting a present
oh
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Im nice duke, u'll get dissed, partly cause your garbage
So fuck beatin Key, u have enuff trouble winnin arguments wit Marvin
eh
Face it, ur wack as fuck kid, ur rep just saddens
Bitch, Spit only ask u to join SC, cuz the forum needed extra padding
ha
N we all have women problems, alotta chicks bitchin too hard
My girl throws bitch fits....you just hope ur bitch fits in the car
ok
Learn how to please a woman, and stop stumblin, u foo
Cuz your girls never get off....thats just what they want u to do
ehh
U must b confused, so grab ya girl cuz ur sex rep is slumpin
And b sure to swap spit wit her..
Cuz u been on his dick since u joined Second Coming
nice
And as for looks, ur hideous, seriously man its a shame
Ur face starts deep debates...over which side of the familys to blame
decent
hmmm tough call here...
vote - vaskez
I seen Key's plans for the summer n frankly this bastard's sad
Fuck takin some internet class...
...your presence done took all the class it had
^^Nah^^
And dude, ya aint have to visit strip clubs to see what you need
Since you already see the topless than most peeps in the league
^^Cool^^
See, Key's got big plans but his cash won't make jaws bound to drop
When he goes on an affordable cruise and travels around his block
^^Haha nice^^
True, home's where the heart is, for you that's Buffalo I remember, son
So it's no coincidence that in the pics your sweetheart resembles one
^^Lol^^
The ladies love me tho, cos I'm the bomb and I get my dough up
But they feel even safer next to Key...
...knowin that chump'll never blow up
^^Nah^^
Now I talked a lot already but there's still things to be said
N I'd insert shit here...but I don't think you'd fit in the thread
^^Played man.......^^
Fool, I'm knowna flatten domes, whoever starts bitchin is dead
But we'd have to SMOKE that much...
...before a Key produced a hit to the head
^^Ok Closer^^
Vs.
Dont step in my presence, ull get sonned, ur rep'll jus lessen
But I wont beat u too bad...this sunday im expecting a present
^^Ok^^
Im nice duke, u'll get dissed, partly cause your garbage
So fuck beatin Key, u have enuff trouble winnin arguments wit Marvin
^^Nar not feelin it^^
Face it, ur wack as fuck kid, ur rep just saddens
Bitch, Spit only ask u to join SC, cuz the forum needed extra padding
^^Nar^^
N we all have women problems, alotta chicks bitchin too hard
My girl throws bitch fits....you just hope ur bitch fits in the car
^^Haha nice^^
Learn how to please a woman, and stop stumblin, u foo
Cuz your girls never get off....thats just what they want u to do
^^Meh ok^^
U must b confused, so grab ya girl cuz ur sex rep is slumpin
And b sure to swap spit wit her..
Cuz u been on his dick since u joined Second Coming
^^Nar^^
And as for looks, ur hideous, seriously man its a shame
Ur face starts deep debates...over which side of the familys to blame
^^Cool closer^^
Vote/Vaskez, he had more lines that made me laugh and alot of keys stuff was pretty basic.. Although Vaskez did have the played as hell "shit" line, the rest of his stuff was pretty fresh.
Nice Battle Guys.
Hit mine up plz.
5-0
Good battle Vaskez, u've come a long way, goodluck in the playoffs.
Im done.
Artificial Intelligence
thanks man, but what do you mean you're done? No more texting?
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