A Bit-C-H

[Mooby]

A bitch aint nothin but a bit-C-H
You can tell em who they is by the look upon they face

I said a bitch aint nothin but bit-C-H
You can tell em who they is by the way they make ya chase

I used to fuck with this bitch from way down south
Had to use the paper bag with the hole cut for her mouth
I said an ugly ass bitch I'd only fuck at night
The only time I got scared was when she turned back on the light
She aint had no teeth, just gumbs along my dick
But I dropped that bitch quick when I found out that she spit
Left her ass quicker than a dog leavin shit
Gotta find a new bitch for this dick

Cause a bitch aint nothin but a bit-C-H
You can tell em who they is by the way they actin fake

Yeah a bitch aint nothin but a bit-C-H
You can tell em who they is without a double take

There was a bitch I was fuckin from North Carolina
A big booty bitch with a nice hot vagina
Wouldn't let her on top cause she weighed over a ton
Used to fuck the fat rolls on her tummy-tum
She ate me out of everythin but my house and my home
She even got off usin my garden gnome
But I rolled out one day, decided to get lost
Told the fat bitch I was gettin haggen-das
I gotta find a new bitch for this dick

Ya know a bitch aint nothin but a bit-C-H
You can tell em who they is by the way they ass shake

Said a bitch aint nothin but a bit-C-H
You can tell em who they is by the way they look baked

I see the bitches in the club, dance to the music
The beat aint shit but they still rockin to it
They try to hook a man by the way that they dress
And these bitches got me sprung, that I do confess
So I'll hit the bitch quick then drop her the next day
Leave before she wake up cause you know you gotta pay
I've been fuckin these bitches from all over the world
I'd tell ya bout it now just ta make ya head twirl
But there aint no bitch for this dick

Cause a bitch aint nothin but a bit-C-H
You can tell em who they is by the way they actin fake

Yeah a bitch aint nothing but a bit-C-H
You can tell em who they is by the look upon they face

Said a bitch ain nothin but a bit-C-H
I gotta find a new bitch for this dick

For this dick...
For this dick...
For this dick...

[Mooby]

Looking for feedback of what people think of this. Let me know, the good and bad. Thanks.

[Mooby]

Hmm... no toughts. I guess there must be nothing wrong with it...

[~A.S.P.I.R.E~]

well its kinda graphic son lol.......that aint bad but u no jus all that same gangster shit ya here on the streets...simple rymes...wasnt that creative, dog i mean ur talkin bout a bitch lol..........but kept me into jus 2 see some dirty shit u said, jus try 2 be more creative man and elevate ur lines..iunno im new 2 the rapbattles sojus my suggestions

~1~

[Mooby]

Well I will keep that in mind, however it's difficult to read it without knowing the beat and my specific flow to it. I understand.

[Spekz.]

its a poor concept, i see it all the time by new topical writers....it may fit better on an audio track but topicals are much more advanced into concepts/creativity/complex writing....such as wordplay/flow/rhymescheme/wordchoice/alliteration/imagery/emotion/...etc sure you wrote with high graphical content and tried to be humorous but it is something we see a lot so it was nothing new to the original kats in here to be honest..im not trying to hate on you...im tryin to make you better.... topical writing is much more complex than that.....as for you writing you gotta be more creative and definetly need better word choice...such ass

I used to fuck with this bitch from way down south
Had to use the paper bag with the hole cut for her mouth

sounds better if you write it likes this

so i used to fuck this bitch from way down south
slipped a paper bag on her head with the mouth cut out
.....
or something along those lines...when you read it ...it should flow no choppy.



JUST TRYING TO HELP...for tips go to the OM HALL OF FAME...and read shit by BOUNCE, BRIXTON, TIM....ETC.


Also please leave some feed on my piece

LINK IN MY SIG!

[C.A.Mcshann]

Shit was kinda funny but its not really creative at all...Theres about 1000 songs out there saying the whole thing, NWA did that bitch is a bitch shit a long time ago dawg...bout 88. So next time think of something original that no body has really done before.

[Mooby]

Thank you all, it means so much to get the oppinions of 17 year olds.