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    War Generals- Dusk2Dawn Feat. IsIs

    War Generals



    Dusk2Dawn- American War General
    IsIs- Britian War General


    Paranoia sets in, takings steps cautiously, as I see the red coats approach,
    I hop the side of the coach, my men steadily line side by side ready to encroach,
    Step on a roach, murders and killings will be abrupt, scream at my men Attention,
    Alright Gents, lets have prevention of this dispicable army having time for redemption,
    Not a soul is getting exemption, we're fighting this war for the freedom of our great nation,
    These jakes placement, is strange, unheard of in the crowns royal military stations,
    Men don't lose motivation, the hope of our nation's salvation we’ll win with their annihilation,
    Lets deprive their patience, hold the line and wait until dawn before we break formation,
    Enough with the procrastination, marksmen send arrows at that manifestation with acceleration,
    Brace for their meezly attack lads, prepare to fire artillery at their enforcers on my command,
    I'll be damned, soldiers expand and be ready to embark on my demand,
    Stand strong men, I've planned this band to strand off while the leader mans offhand,
    They think they understand, blow the horn son to single are secret attack,
    First Briggades retreat back, and maintain plain sight on their flanking veins,
    Their shifting keeps me entertained, send a cannonball now to keep them maintained I ascertain,
    Again he fell for my trap, as they reload they're cannon back, charge for the attack!,
    Men I repeat fall back, where is damn that silent attack, draw you're weapons,
    Flank I repeat Flank!, Charge straight into their heart, Oh God..Pray to the heavens!,
    I’m starting to strengthen, march on for more progress, to the right and left transgress
    Briggades six and seven, lay down suppressing fire on our flanks God help us!,
    I confess the power we possess, I'm impressed, now strive forward for immediate success,
    Bless you all, suppress the enemy, this contest is the best of any see, duel to the death, I point my weaponry,
    You have no choice but to agree, I decree and demand you all yurn their authority into debris
    Yes create an opening for what must be done, so it can finally take place!,
    Their a disgrace, making a mockery of us, spitting in our face, prepare to embrace,
    Compare their face, to ours they look defeated, concieted in amungst their dispicable beliefs, slow our pace,
    Pick up our pace, display you’re fury, portray our soiree and convey without delay
    Show them no mercy, bloodshed must be our first love on this courages day!,
    Leave them in dismay, let arrows stray leaving them in dissaray, make them fray,
    Sargeant Cray, take your men up my flank to bank the enemies, mighty spray,
    Home of the brave, home of the free, the great USA, cover me men, for now I'm departing,
    ARTILLERY begin bombarding, the general is preceding in my way soon it will be starting,
    As soon as I started departing, cannons and arrows started falling, I ducked for cover,
    My sword cut another, as my hand smothered his mouth, making my kill silent,
    Arrows slaughtering my men, I became violent slicing heads off everyone in pursuit to the war lord,
    Eye contact was made, my honour to be made, I slowly drew my war sword,
    I see the general pull his sword, I try'd to ignore but he came charging in my direction,
    My inspection, saw a clear opening to the master, but my visual spawned misconception,
    I made an exception, shot an arrow in his direction but his men got hit in an interception,
    I began to corress him, my anger tearing at my collar telling my to continue,
    Jabs, he hit me with a few, I ducked as I see his sword pointed at my throat,
    I jointed but I hold, my honour told me to reach an pick up and hand him a saber,
    He tried to be generous, but this is hard labor, took his kindness for weakness and cut his wrist,
    Twice with this, It was out of honour with the saber, but he came back an sliced me with its edge like razor,
    Had him looking death in the eye, when my soldiers bombarded on his like a sudden attack from a glacier
    My wrist was bleeding major, I competed with this mayor, but it was still honour to be his saviour,
    With my men ambushing his, he knew he stood no chance and offered a wager,
    I waved the wager, and charged force, and felt the spears puncture my lower spine,
    I felt devine, say you’re last words because I need to feel refined and ending you’re life line is my design
    Before Im defeated, making my life complete, My lungs bubble blood as I want my soldiers to retreat,
    Told my men to lift them off there feet, with cannons to make their death complete,
    My heart rate, begins to stop faint, Im seeing how I harmed fates, as I die off into the dark state with calm traits,
    A stray arrow pierces my lung sealing my fate, but I die relatively painless knowing I freed the states,


    The Chosen Few
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    pohenominol work i am so impressed with your grasp and delivery for taking history and molding it to your own favor. i cant critiqque where to build caus ei cant see any place for that this was that good.

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    thanks for the feed man. much appreciation. lookin for some more.
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    exellent shit

    really nice work there homie
    i liked it all..really nice shit...i liked the wordplay and the vocab along wit da flow..your good..keep droppin
    nice piece

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    Has anyone grasped what we did yet?

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    ahahah word. i dont think so son. and ive also found that cats dont reply to your shit unless you tell them to through pm or you have to leave it on theres and rtf.
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    damn I liked the way you went one line each that shit was impressive,and if you weren't together while you were writing it,it is even more impressive.You both complimented each other and brought two different styles and made them fit in together perfectly,I honestly can't say which part is my favourite because I was impressed with every part of this.Thje only thing I could criticise you on is you line length,you both need to cut down on line length,it makes the peice a lot easier to read. nice work,keep dropping.

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    leave feed on that please
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    thanks for the feed. ill get on that piece as soon as i can. im just studyin for my final exams.
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    uppin, I know its long but read the whole thing.

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    wow this was nice you guys did a pretty good job liked the topic and how you took on it it was a good piece overall just need a better imagery and a bit more creativity but only a bit to spark the imaginations you know that would make the piece better in a sense it would just make it overall a better enjoyment to read and make the readers want to continue too read good shit guys pz.
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    Quote Originally Posted by The Witness.
    damn I liked the way you went one line each that shit was impressive,and if you weren't together while you were writing it,it is even more impressive.You both complimented each other and brought two different styles and made them fit in together perfectly,I honestly can't say which part is my favourite because I was impressed with every part of this.Thje only thing I could criticise you on is you line length,you both need to cut down on line length,it makes the peice a lot easier to read. nice work,keep dropping.

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    leave feed on that please

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    the imagery was phoenomanal vocab was excellent flow was perfect everything you guys said was nice i could picture everysingle word in that om...im gonna nominate this for HOF iight....

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    werd. thanks for feed

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