Life In An Inkblot

[soulstice.]

A twisted morphologist engulfs the
Last ray of hope. The beauty of
A complete security breach in the
Schedule shines in the dark eyes of
A schemeing demon, bent on forming
A fracture in Madam Macrocosms ever
Eternal agenda. An infernal presence
Known as an anticelestial toxicity
Reforming our beautiful panaroma with
Their revolving hands, shaping futures
Like dying, ephemeral clay. Dust to
Dust, so it shall be with our adobe entities.
And no the mindscape is not suffering
Acute Schizophrenia, the toxicity is not
A futurustic dictator or Satanic hell cult
Bent on waking doom and demise a little
Early for this universe. These things are
YOU.

Life and Nature are our paper, our
book, our diary. The power to create
a beautiful novel is at the tips of our
fingers, tounges, and minds. Let us
not spill our ink and create an inkblot.

Seeing the timberline in hell, or perhaps
An ocean of blood instead of the
Aquamarine fantasies we have come to
Know via short stories before bedtime,
Is not a dream if mine. Traversing
A Post-Carthaginian landscape until
We choose to close our eyes and
Fade into a divine cradel is just
Another way of condemning yourself
To your own personal apocalypse, and
Punching a ticket for the pleasant
Neighbor next door. A silver spoon
Taken for granted is used to sip
Poison from the cup you bought
yourself, your own consumnation,
your own deal, your own fault.

Life and Nature are our paper, our
book, our diary. The power to create
a beautiful novel is at the tips of our
fingers, tounges, and minds. Let us
not spill our ink and create an inkblot.

Life In An Inkblot
- Soulstice

[Daverick]

"A twisted morphologist engulfs the
Last ray of hope. The beauty of
A complete security breach in the
Schedule shines in the dark eyes of
A schemeing demon, bent on forming"

Great opening, the theme to me of this sounds very dark..especially with your vocab. The imagery was very gloomy and had a great atmospheric 'touch' to it. Keep Writing...

[soulstice.]

thanx man..

[D. Josey]

We seriously do need to create a collab.

[Dyl]

Ok this was an excellent piece and it is my 1st time reading something from you.You seem to have very good imagery and you painted such a vivid picture in my head.You expressed your emotion through out this poem excellently an you really did a very good job.Structure was also very good and it was easy to follow

Life and Nature are our paper, our
book, our diary. The power to create
a beautiful novel is at the tips of our
fingers, tounges, and minds. Let us
not spill our ink and create an inkblot.
^This was a very good closure

I will be looking out for more of your pieces and what I have seen from you is very impressive.Very well done

[soulstice.]

thanks... uppity

[D. Josey]

Soul, PM me about that collab dude.

[Atti]

Great piece, yes, but you've got to work on the rhyming because other than that it's flawless. You take the same rhyme approach that I use pretty much, but when you do that, you have to made sure the piece rhymes according to punctuation, otherwise the line breaks are irelivant. Uuum, great vocab, you're beyond your years man. Nice short lines, structure was clean, storyline organized aswel. Only thing you've got to touch up is the rhyming. Because when you write like this you get the "this belongs in PS" comment, so stop that from coming you have learn to properly flow this structure.

[soulstice.]

thanks man, but honestly i wasnt trying to rhyme this...

ill post a revised version sooner or later

and this is in poetic scriptures, lol

[Marshall]

Great piece.. very good imagery and emotion.. i cant quote any because i belive the whole piece was great. first peice ive read from you and would like to see more.

Many people think that everything had to rhyme but they are misconceived... this did rhyme but not intentionally, showing that when there is not stand out rhymes there can be a hidden rhythmic tone.

i dont think ive seen anything that has done this, but you have created this. i think its worthy of a nomination in the HoF.

great piece

[Atti]

Lol ya Im retarded man, I don't know where my heads at. I just figured that since you replied to my Om that the favor you wanted returned would be an Om aswell so I didn't even look at the top, I just assumed and I look like a retard now. Haha so ya, sorry... Given this aaaaaaa, newly aquired information, excellent piece.

[soulstice.]

lol ya..

thanks anyway

[soulstice.]

rise above the pies

[Young~Disciple]

I seen the tittle and i thought it was going to be played out, but it wasent at all, it had a good flow and a good vibe, used a wide range of vacab, the rymes were good, and the structure wasent dull and messy, wich kept me reading, good peice

[soulstice.]

so datz whutz /\ sunz..

thanks for feed upping