the despicable race

['AntZ|]

theres a despicable race
that on this earth should not have it's place.
all they do is eat up our air and use up our space,
every time i see one, i take out my mace
so that their eyes drool out their face.
despite what yu may think, we aint talkin bout colour,
but about them guys who fuck emselves in the juggular.
we should offer the homos no future:
fuck them faggots they degradin nature,
they worse than an insect feedin off pasture.
now if thers one single faggot readin this shit,
grab the nearest knife n slice off yo dick,
cos you aint worthy of bein a man,
you should be cookin and sizzlin in a fryin pan,
kinda like what Hitler shuda done in Japan.

[A. Knew lee-streched]

ummm don't like it relly
its plane boaring
its doctor suse style rhymes
over all 4/10

jus elivate but keep trying

['AntZ|]

To start with, its doctor Seuss, not suse, you twelve year old pansy.
now second of all, the whole fuckin point of this rap was the FUCK FAGGOTS, not show yu my rhymes. if i wanna show my rhymes, i do an open mic JUST wit rhymes, with no fuckin content, unlike this.
so go eat your mother out till she bleeds, its your fuckin curfew anyway

['AntZ|]

uppin people, come on

['AntZ|]

come on ya'll... im uppin this shit right here

[Queen_Icey]

i think that you need to work a better structure and try to come slightly better with flow and vocab AS WELL
it wasn't too abd bra but i just feel that you got some shit that you need to work on to come stronger ya feel me? it was all good though just try to improve ya skills

['AntZ|]

aight thanks yall, still uppin...

[Rave]

OMG this is SO good. shit man, i think the same about all them disgusting faggots. no offense to them ass jockeys, but i hate em. anyway, even if the flow and style was inspiring of geniusness, the content <was ill as shit.

[Atti]

I didnt like it man. I felt like the concept, was actually the only good part, because I havent seen it, but I feel like you should have dropped the attempts at intellectual strides and just have been purely blunt an vulgar. Because, discriminating an entire group of people is a pretty ignorant thing, so to interwine a subtle sense of intellect somewhat contradicts the initial motive. Also, you flow is very weak. It was just irritably simplistic due to the fact you didnt use any internal rhyming or multies. So, you've got some things to work on... Keep writing.

It'd be dope if you could return the favor on my new Om,
In the Shadows of the Livingroom
Thanks alot, I really apreciate it.