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    Art and the Hidden Messages Inside



    Art and the Hidden Messages Inside

    A Preview to Destruction


    Background:.................................................. .............................
    Naked, Art wakes bound to a cold metal table, unable to break free
    Tainted dart, takes down lieutenant Shaible, unstable, hooked to IV's
    Humvee's booked by medal'd crooks, floor pedals to metal, shook
    by cook books, an appetite of destruction, concealed on IC's. Look
    deep to peep the inner secrets imbedded deep in the governed tissue
    of a Government Issue, a misuse of fissile technology, all for a policy
    foreign to me. Adorned by a cause & sworn enemy, work'n endlessly
    at frenzied speeds with an end less seen... death, vengeance & greed
    Evil, seeds the flower beds of theodicy, and enemies beyond the sea
    as beau monde decrees drip from the lips of a Kings poisoned speech
    hemlock swallowers flock to follow words fired by hollow points preached
    where negotiations reached, bleed fast & uranium seeps past! Breached!


    Lieut. Art, Shaible.................................................. ....................
    Woozy from the drug laced dart, awakes to find himself held captive
    active scans of Gamma, raise questions as X-rays display interactive
    plans ablazed & coded by ways of digital frames mazed on Micro-chips
    un phased by waves of time, & unscathed by days gone by. Carbon ships
    steam past, all ITAR screens fast, w/ hidden message ridden in presage
    the foreshadowing here, forever shadows our fears, leaving impressions
    deeper inspections reveal bio medics concealed under deadly intentions
    as tensions build w/ 32 North, 53 East, , the political inflections are clear!
    the ghost made surgeon lurking the abysmal halls of back alley torture
    tore thru Lieut's torso w/ ease of a hot knife thru a morsel of tender flesh
    red blooded American ran thick on the gurney while screams unnerved
    the clergy who gathered to witness the extraction of secrets unearthed
    from the bowls of the unsuspecting, unrelenting the surgeon hacked on
    flesh clung to instruments of choice gushing fountains of life danced on
    crescendos of blood curdling screams and blood hurtling streams
    crash on the galvanized surface of the metallic lair & accent the dreary
    weary veins pump forth the sticky fluids of Art, painting a portrait in parts
    a clank of the surgeons' tool on a sterile plate indicates X hit its mark
    hidden in Art, the first of 3 messages removed of a void near his heart
    applause from the clergy erupted as Art convulsed in buckets of his own
    a gall stone fortress held the second of 3 hidden inside flesh and bone
    the scalpel ran past the fatty tissues of liver and deep into the mid right
    of his abdomen, fecal matter escaped his naked carcass in plain sight
    of uniformed men, life trickled & gurgled forth from the lips of an officer
    unbeknownst to him, a fallen solider tended to on a larger field of battle
    came home with more than just shrapnel, sutures and combat fatigue
    indeed, something deposited inside hid behind the scars of democracy
    catapulted up through the ranks our dear lieutenant fought the hypocrisy
    once wounded on blood drenched fields in fallen Babylon, modern battle
    won, the menacing face of terror surfaced in the form of a roadside bomb
    the injured G.I.'s name was held from all records, his efforts were covert
    the same surgeon who zipped him up then, was now undoing old hurts
    two encapsulated packages sat next to soiled tools, the third anchored
    its self to a fragment logged deep in his hip, Art's legs twitched violently
    as his tattered body contorted defiantly to sounds of the tool in his hip
    The drill bit ripped through the old wounds & bore through until plumes
    of smoke from friction burns & singed flesh poured through the cold room
    Arming sequences & codes to Pakistani Nukes along w/ plans for doom
    were transferred to an Axis of Evil, long devout on decimating the Jew
    operating room scrubs, soaked in the livid colors of an American youth
    left behind, as were the grisly remains of 'carnage... that stained truth
    sustained proof can be measured in the 'fall out', that still... claims fruit!


    Hidden messages in Art played key part...................................................
    .......................................in start of what's come to be known as the end
    The Seven Day War waged on foreign shores...........................................
    .............................erased militarized lines & reshaped the tribes of men


    Foreground:.................................................. .......................................
    Tehran harnessed the powers of Islam & showered the Sleeping Lion in Zion
    & the Paper Tiger in the West by raining warheads seized in a coup d'etat
    of course fire was returned in force, as guided missiles screamed over head
    lands racked with sand began to be wiped from maps as innocence napped
    & woke to violent diarrhea, radioactive craps, the lucky ones returned to ash
    in the flash of a centrifuge firing a chain reaction through enriched materials
    in which imperialists list as contraband & demand conformance by command
    of United Nations that threatened sanctions, same as deposed leader Saddam
    who bathe in the wealth of which that came from the same scum, all along
    oil 4 food proved lucrative crude can elude shrewd poker face politics brewed

    fresh from the grind, 'Red Button' pressed, it's ashes to ashes...........
    .............................................& dust to dust for the rest of our kind!!!



    ...Mankind was taken back 3000 years
    ............blurred lines and messages in Art
    ......................delivered us from the evils men spark
    .............................blown back to the age of the spear
    .......................................a new world emerged from the haze
    .................................................. ...
    by tears laid to earth in dawn of a new day...







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    Wow...this was an interesting topic...not quite what i expected...this is elaborate poetry...There were some points though I felt I lost focus in reading it because you might of explained too much...I think that might be the first time ive ever said that...I guess I feel the reader should be allowed to think for himself...When the reader plays a role in poetry as in deciphering his own message from the message given then its that much more interesting...This is great poetry nonetheless, and clearly amongst the best ive seen here on OM...Great job...this piece was excellent...Stay up Bounce...

    If you get a chance hit up my latest piece...its a hip hop verse not poetry tho...
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292765

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    ^ Right, which is why I'm not a huge fan of bounce's poetry: I'm just not a fan of the style itself. I like the short, sweet, emotional reads. Bounce certainly tells a story in which a moral can be found...but its not in the shorter form I like to read, with the rhyming. And I understand Bounce's writing, but it usually takes too much work, to the point where I can't enjoy it as much. but thats me - i understand that for many people, thats part of what makes a good piece good, the challenge of revealing its message. Either way, a unique style and a good writer. Good piece, Bounce.

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    My honest opinion on this, and im not trying to be bitter at all -

    I didnt like the piece this week. I think you got so caught up in the attempts at internal rhyming and whatever else that the plot got lost in the story, even as early as the opening stanza I started thinking 'What's going on?' and I abrely made it through the 'Background' before I started to lose interest. The body of the verse was a little better, it was more detailed, but still - the 'plot' was lost on me, and the links didnt really help either to be quite frank. Maybe its just that im not a 'poetry' fan, as is with Feebs, but you rarely used multies in this piece actually, when reading through you just use mono-syallable(?) rhyming, but frequently, so that it SOUNDS like you're using multies when infact you arent! I think a lot of people who voted this week, and im not saying ALL, were overly-prentencious with their votes. I doubt they read this right the way through, as I stuggled to find interest in it myself, and I actually agree with Eleete that you should of drawn your own meaning from the 'Hidden Meanings' in the art. The bars were often faaaaaaaaar too stretched and elongated for me to develop an actual 'flow' or feel to the piece, and I actually feel people had drawn their conclusions based on the lengths of both our verses this week, without even having to read either. I didnt think this was anywhere near your best, Bounce, and hopefully - I'll be getting a re-match soon enough.

    No hate, just my genuine opinion, even I am a bit narked.

    Peace!

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    this couldn't be even compared to my best,. this was shit actually. I rushed it in a drunken stupor, I have little time to write for this league. it's throwing you off becase it's written in the format I use when I'm recording a verse. lines are not streched though, that is a Bullshit text misconception, I can spit in upwards of 20 syllables a bar. you got to remember, I write only for audio, this is far from any thing poetic from me. My poetry is completly different from this. This would be the equivalent of me writing a quick couple of verse for a song. I could have formated it to highlight the meter, but I just do n;t do that. Not when I'm rushing to post on time...

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    Like I said, its nothing personal, infact - I think I was fairly annoyed when I responded to this initially, having put a fucking LOT of effort into my drop. Lol. I made the mistake of using such a complex piece in a league full of early teenagers, which they were never REALLY going to grasp, but I thought it would be a great time to coincide with the films release. Guess I got it wrong this week! But yeah, no hard feelings or disrespect intended toward yourself, Bounce.

    I`ll be back foir the title in due course.

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    Ok Bounce this was not the best piece I have read from you.It kind of drifted on loosing the readers attenton,unlike your other OM's where you would be glued to your piece.I am not saying this was a bad piece because it was above par it just wasn't your standard that you can write.I did like a lot of bits in this and in some places you were very creative.Some nice imagery in there too.No hate at all bro just expressing my opinion
    Heard about the guy who fell off a skyscraper?
    On his way down past each floor,he kept saying to reassure himself
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....
    So far so good.....

    But how you fall doesn't matter
    Its how you land

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    yeah, good topic. you used great complexity. you didnt need to use big words because your lyrics took up for it. great piece. i can tell it was from the heart. my favorite part was the background.

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    nice peice.ot your best but certainly something very nice.
    excellent vocab and complexity throughout this whole peice.
    this flowed well. and structure was nice. rhymes were good.
    nice imagery and overall this was something very nice. keep it up.

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