Painted Reflection.

[Evolve]

My mind seems to stay focused on the hopeless times & days
Its designed some ways to know less so i can hide away
Inside i'm plagued; confined'n chained to a soul swole with pain
Im contained in this old hole's terrain slowly going insane
The cold rain exposes those viens holding a corroded shame
Loaded with blame.. I aimed..
My name became the target.
And from the start its been me who has hit the hardest
I've been painted the enemy by my mirror's artist
My face traced to appear.. with clear tears for heartless
Martyrs...
Who would die to see me rithe in horrid fear, regardless..
Of how good MY heart is.. I constantly hear the starters
Who talk shit & orbit.. a universeal hate that harbors..
Ill will & fills the atmosphere til its killed & trapped us here
We're all actors here.. Hoping to hear claps & cheers..
Reaction steers distractions near the facts to veer..
The truth off course & impact what attracts our ears
A poor source can attack sincere thoughts'n ideas
And cause severe cracks of supports intact for years
Beyond repair.. they collapse and lay stacked till cleared
Then its back to where.. I started.. hardened & jaded
In the mirror.. image clearer..
I am what the artist has painted
Except im faded.. Their true colors started to hate it
The chance.. I never should have bothered to take it
Should have waited.. for the brush stroke to dry
Now im saturated with crushed hope and lies
A damn mess is this canvas ..
Cant save it.. nope .. good bye
As I lie.. here in this crater created by the painter's skill
I know the pain & the rain drops are made by a much greater will
However, the debate is still.. Will I wait for more paint to spill
Or will i kill the artist in the mirror.. and this hate i feel
And create a new me capable of seeing whats fake or real

Shame on me for believing you.

[Edicius]

you suck niga

[B.I.Detained.]

Sup, man. Well, although I've seen you do a piece like this before, you just re-invented it totally. Still seems you're bitter about something, and no doubt its to do with the fine art we call rap. Your use of multi-scheme rhyming is dope as you use it naturally rather than having sections, here and there, forced. & like most, the content is full of simlies to how the game chewed you up, and finally spat you out. Might be fiction, who knows.. but you wrote a decent that screamed reality, and this is one of many few OM's I read that I could read out loud. Props, 'volve.. keep dropping & setting a standard.

Brix.

[Evolve]

LOL at Edicius. And thanks Brix for the feedback. Yes i am bitter about something.. betrayal, fakeness, lies.. shit of that nature.

[Evolve]

I replied to Feeble & some other dude that wrote "off the head" or some shit

[Nique.]

Oh my your flow was ridICulous in this joint. I write like this ALL the time, but lately I've been trying to stray away from my usual multi-syllabic rhyme scheme, but this joint was nice..content was on point..all of your topicals are very personal and mind blowing because you always leave apart of you with each and every last one of them..explaining the struggles of your life and the game itself. another solid piece of work evolve.

[Evolve]

Much appreciate Nique.. your opinion is definately respected by me. I seen your piece too.. well done.

[LedgenZ]

without a dout one of my favorite writers on RB. Everything I see from you is on point,your pieces are always worth a closer look. You have a real knack for stringing words together in an almost seamlessly effortless manner - this piece was no exception, its flow was fluent, fluid, and flawless throughout. Seeing as how this piece was so expressive I was kind of expecting a random display of frustration and otherwise isolated ideas, however you managed to ramble on and on without every really losing the main focus of the topic, thus created an rather clean and copasetic read - which in turn elevated the enjoyability (not a word) of the entire process OR in other words you kept me interested.

Favorite lines:

Then its back to where.. I started.. hardened & jaded
In the mirror.. image clearer..
I am what the artist has painted
Except im faded.. Their true colors started to hate it
The chance.. I never should have bothered to take it
Should have waited.. for the brush stroke to dry
Now im saturated with crushed hope and lies
A damn mess is this canvas ..
Cant save it.. nope .. good bye

^The flow was.......well....as it always is..incredible.
and your wordplay was very nice.

Overall...This was another great drop. You did ya thing dawg. Keep it up!

peace.

[Evolve]

Thanks Ledg... i hit up your piece about the collab too.

[Big C.]

dope rhymes and multies.
interesting topic.
nice flow. alright structure.
vocab was nice throughout
And overall this was a good drop
keep it up. peace``

[Evolve]

Thanks. Any more?

[Evolve]

Stop sleeping

[Richard Parker]

well... I do envy your ability to rhyme and yet maintain the message of your piece just the same as it would be had you not rhymed at all. but since your getting showered with compliments, well deserved... but i have to rain on your parade, aka be picky and give the little negative feedback i can come up with:

The only thing that stood out to me in this piece as something I didn't like was the martyr line in particular - the line above the marytr line didn't express a complete thought, leaving me lost, plus the flow was off at first read (although excellent at second read). but i shouldn't have to read twice to get the message or the flow. However, it was just in that one line... No real harm done...and still a good piece overall. Not your most emotional ever, but still, good content.

Pz!

Oh, and one tip about your writing style and maybe writing in general that you probably realize, and that any reader will recognize: Your pieces always seemed much more emotional to me when you put in a personal experience, example: your legends piece where you talk about your father and his expectations of you. .just something to keep in mind, although almost all your pieces are raw, they're even rawer when the reader can relate to your problem or elation, or whatever emotion it is. .

[Mystery~Murdera]

Very impressive. The use of multis isn't something
i feel I should comment on due to you being who you
are, lol... that's like telling picasso "nice use of paint".
I'm to a point where I view your pieces on content and
this was nice. Like duke above me said, not sure if it
was k or brix, you totally reinvented this and the stuff
you're putting out now is like "Evolve: life after death"
a new era in your text or something, lol, always a great
read. You & Niq do have shocking close writing styles.
Y'a'll should collabo sometime.

[Evolve]

Thanks to the two legends above me.

Feebs.. the martyr lines refers to them dieing to see me in pain or fear or unhappy. I just meant that thier mission is to see me unhappy.

MM.. yeah me & nique are similar... I wouldnt mind doing a collab with her.. or you two for that matter. holla