The Lord Loves, Satan Neglects.

[Vitalsyn]

The Lord Loves, Satan Neglects

Suicidal success? Or failure, either or.. Something happens
As gates welcome the soul.. Hell ignoring the absence
Human life evolved, no ones fault.. As mentioned, the feud-less
The past creator of earth, but stay the presence of cupid
Agony, say thy Satan, as there be no love he will make
But makes sure there be no feel of love, without hate
To dislike is no mistake, but the meaning is twirled
Into bias, discrimination.. To a point theres no peace in this world
Everything happens for reasons.. Good or not.. They make moods
And Satan’s neglect is what makes evil stay true..
Almighty charms.. Expressing warmth, and hold within arms
As almighty death has it so pain, is just the very start
Heavens light gives a tan, but not with one word
On WHY Satan hates enjoyment, giving thee sun-burn
Forbidden fruit or not, don’t let Eve’s garden fool
As Satan beholds something as simple as a farmers tool
His marks are cruel, simply leaving you to die
As lord will take the soul, but leave life in disguise
Leaving bright in their eyes.. Allowing hope to never be lost
But the cursed Satan.. Not even allowing hope to be crossed
All in all, there opposites.. And hope there is no tainting left
In the end, the moral is.. The Lord loves, Satan Neglects

[Vitalsyn]

Enjoy!

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...64#post4407064
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[Vitalsyn]

up.

[Vitalsyn]

c'mon.

[Vikkie™]

I feel this. Your religion is shown. & the way you feel for God is evident. Wording is good and structure is good also. I felt this alot. Good job.

[Vitalsyn]

thanks.

[P. Mortuus]

The structure of this was aight, i liked the topic lol, but more importantly i liked the way you pulled it off, it was good to see more new writers putting in a lil effort for thier pieces. Vocab was aight, flow same and i liked the religious vibe to the whole plot as well. Overall, a good piece, keep it up.........
.....Also, can ya leave feed on my new OM, much preciated
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=290637

[detremental.]

I like this piece. I can relate a little but not alot. This was not an imagery piece. The outlook on it was very different. The flow of it was very good. I've never seen an OM like this one. The vocab was there as well as the multi's. and the structure was good also. keep it up man. good work.

[Vitalsyn]

thanks dudes.

leave links, ill get to them by tommrow.

[Vitalsyn]

up.

[Vitalsyn]

what the fuck, jerks.

[ExDaGawd]

Nice little drop, It had more of a poetry feel to it then a Open Mic but It was still good. The flow on this was easy to follow just try putting more effort into your drops and makin em longer and more creativite and you'll be fine.

[Vitalsyn]

thanks. it was an FL battle verse, i figured id just drop it in here.

[Vitalsyn]

last up for this.

[2hot2handle]

It was cool, the structure was good and ya told the topic well. It had good meaning and description. Liked to have seen more vocab incorporated in this piece. Ya did ya thing man, good job. But I have a question, if GOD loves how come "people go to hell".