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    .an influence by HIM.

    i hope i get HOF this month for this



    what if i, through his hands of equal hate & rath flip?
    then the skies blacken, and cry with every past drip
    teary and smug, my knees grow weary in mud...
    contemplate the scary among, the daring... dont run

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    hell is backed up by dark pastures, earth smeared w/ its evil resin
    God has to make natural disasters, for more recruits to heaven
    The ark angel is indeed needed, our existance may be completed
    if the gov.ment found eden, & didnt fuck it up like adam & eve did
    we all got a viper in our mind, fucking u over, your stuck in a slew
    whistling in our ears like wind chimes, about an easier way through
    awake in a day, asleep in a night, hes in ur shadow reaping a light
    we keep our devils in storage, still living, in a dark gleaming fright
    given into his tormented testimony is leaving ur life, breathing tight,
    ur colored cortex & vision w/ pupils are burnt to a steaming white

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    the charcoal spoke in the hazy air,
    im lookin through the smoke in a crazy stare
    was it a hoax? my eyes and i are a lazy pair
    he replies "i maybe here or i maybe there"
    we came face to face close...it gave me fear

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    resting among my stiff shoulder, behind my smile is his grin
    laughin with a figure much boulder, growing with every sin
    juiced up with a blend of the hate and vigatry we send
    my right hand clutches a fist ten times denced,
    i beg in repence, for a life is way too valuable to spend
    I've eye-witnessed accounts of people selling their soul
    and seen the dark prince pounce on regrets that take toll
    whether or not to debate hell,
    having your concience locked up, even if you hate cells
    he enters into ur presence and eats from it like a laydel
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    "the loots & jewels or loves to thee"
    shoot the rules of reality, just say its not for me
    even if he begs... turn your ears from the zoom zones
    even HE cannot follow you among your tombstone

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    The ark angel is indeed needed, our existance may be completed
    if the gov.ment found eden, & didnt fuck it up like adam & eve did
    ha creative! i liked that verse but this was my fav line
    given into his tormented testimony is leaving ur life, breathing tight,
    ur colored cortex & vision w/ pupils are burnt to a steaming white
    nicely setup... i hope i dont go out like that
    "the loots & jewels or loves to thee"
    shoot the rules of reality, just say its not for me
    even if he begs... turn your ears from the zoom zones
    even HE cannot follow you among your tombstone
    Nice! ending definatly tops it off very well

    this was an amazing piece... i can learn a few things.. great imagery.. i was picturing it while i was reading.. and the concept was very easy to understand.. the colors and text made it alot easier to catch on... flow structure wordplay all flawless... this is great work.. keep em coming
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    thanks for the feed

    feel free to nominate this piece

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    dam nice drop

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    dam nice drop
    i really enjoyed reading it
    it was all good but the ending was what did it for me it
    keep up the good work

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    dope drop...hmmm

    OK.

    First off, this was good topic to write about...I mean, I've seen this done before, but you really pulled it off well....It had great imagery, and the vocab was above par. I loved how you worded you stuff, and how 2 image points were given; it was interesting...It had a lot of great spots, but this part impressed me the most


    hell is backed up by dark pastures, earth smeared w/ its evil resin
    God has to make natural disasters, for more recruits to heaven

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    I've eye-witnessed accounts of people selling their soul
    and seen the dark prince pounce on regrets that take toll


    Nice...

    Now honestly, I don't think this is HOF material, but its CLOSE ...just keep working on it, and before long you'll be there...nice drop

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