86 Regiment

[Mudlark]

i'm nu to dis site and this is ma first post...plz gimme sum feedbacks
this is a song on ma mixtape featured wit ma crew *86 Regiment*...it's called 86 Regiment.....the audio will be posted soon this is ma verse tell me wat ya'll think:


I'm a legend Muddy is a mythology epic
He's a devil against sociaty ethic
A menace not at all religous
Worse than the muthafuckin bird flu epidemic
When I take ma bolo pos all in solo
Come to ma lolo get fucked in a slow mo
I grew up to throw dudes in caskets
1 years old played with soldier plastics
With ma point of view the game need a diagnosis
My rhymes ogrish, tremendous get the synopsis
You see the blockheads in da club get tipsy
And ma tech on the waste get frisky frisky
Be a risky don't be a fuckin cripsy
You Telly-Tubie got less skills than Dipsy
Let's get in politics those trash democrats
And the publicans I stick em all together in bush's ass

[Black Ninja]

this is a decent verse homie...

the use of vocab was not baad the structre waz not baad either....
but ur new so this waz not at all bad for ur first verse aka Om

[Mudlark]

thanx dawg

[Dukes-A-HaZZaRD]

The Vocabulary is There but Most of your lines seemed Forced... Like you were Pushing words together that u wanted to rhyme... but it kinda pushed things off topic.. But im sure if u could hear it on your mixtape it would all mesh together... this was an Alright Piece it diddnt really catch my attention... But i hope 2 see more id like to see some progress... Stay up Kid 1!

[Mudlark]

thanx Dukes

[M-A-D]

you wanted to put your words in there that you thougt would sound cool though i dont see this as an biomet though needs structer

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