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Thread: If I Can't Cry Can I Borrow A Tear?

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    If I Can't Cry Can I Borrow A Tear?


    If I Can't Cry Can I Borrow a Tear?


    June 10, 1944
    Four days after the Allied invasion of Normandy

    [ Massacre at Distomo:
    A most despicable atrocity took place in the village Distomo, a province of Boeotia in Central Greece. A unit of the SS Police Panzergrenadier Regiment No 7, on an anti-partisan sweep, massacred 218 Greek civilians in the village.]


    Through the eyes of a survivor...

    For my village I can shed no tears
    …trust that I’ve tried for years
    instead I write my story in hopes,
    …to borrow some of yours!


    The tree-lined main street whispered in the painful tongue of these tortured souls
    Blood drips in thick globes off those left swinging in the wind like orchard rows
    Butchered displays of freshly torn flesh hung from the village trees and rooftops
    A thousand new mops could never sop up all the life spilt fresh here on this spot
    My eyes singed from the blinding images in binding scrimmages of mans wrath
    Finding limitless the depths of wickedness as I sulk down this blood beaten path
    House after house and shop after shop mutilated limbs lay scattered and chopped
    Lopped-off like basket displays on guillotines I bask in dismay at killing scenes
    Feeling green I hurl the contents of an empty stomach gone days without bread
    I flirt w/insanity, all the while trapped in this tragedy as I hurt deep for the dead
    I saw a woman stripped naked, by her side was an infant still suckled to breast
    White-knuckled I buckled when I noticed the nipple was detached from the rest!

    When you have seen the evils that men do
    …the devil offends you,
    & nothing defends you, from the wicked or cruel
    …the system is crude,
    & never expect to see these types of pictures
    …ever painted in News,
    & slated for spools to be broadcasted by fools
    …so chose what you chew,
    & hold on to a few memories that fuel the fires
    …that brew deep within,
    & hold your head higher when faced
    …with such dire straights,
    Because life is a lesson, & you might as well
    …lesson the take!


    They took everything from me, friends, family and in a sense my innocence
    Gutted like the entrails of victims they left, my existence’s a mess ever since
    Haunted by despicable acts of men driven mad frothing at the jugular of war
    Corrupt to the core bloodshed erupts and disrupts the flow of life ever more
    I endured more pain & washed more stains from blood caked walls than most
    I’m a ghost of the man I once was touched by the icy fingers of an evil host
    They killed every essence of my being, left me numb defenseless and fleeing
    The dark corners, subjected to seeing the devils work through human beings
    Men, women & children young and old fired upon, raped, beaten and stoned
    By the maggot soldiers of symbolism in an era referenced as The Hemoclysm
    I could hardly breathe for life let alone shed any tears from these sunken eyes
    Drunken cries from a machine called war left me butchered & dried my eyes
    so I can cry no more…

    For my village I can shed no tears
    …trust that I’ve tried for years
    instead I write my story in hopes,
    …to borrow some of yours!


    [ The unit commander, SS Hauptstrumführer Lautenbach, was later charged with falsifying a military report on the massacre but the charges were dropped as the massacre was judged a 'military necessity'. Today, the skulls and bones of the victims are displayed in the Mausoleum of Distomo. In 1960, Germany paid the Greek government 115 million marks as compensation for the suffering of its citizens during the German occupation but as yet no payment is forthcoming for the victims of Distomo. ]


    If I can’t cry can I borrow a tear?


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    I liked the first. Verse and the middle parts the best. the second verse kindof bored me. But still this is tite. Looks like u put alot of time into this. Good shit. peaaace

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    I'll edit this later with a reply... Gotta run to work.

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    Ok i read this...I have never actually looked at one of your peices before bounce and might i say..From what i have heard...YOu live up to every word...This peice jus made me want to continue to real until the end...ANd then over again....THe words painted a clear picture in my head Of how the story played out...Novel quality with emotion and insit...Ending was Something i didnt expect to be portrayed so......Magnificently..Keep everything ur doin jus the same..

    Please hit this Om with feed...Its called...Enough..
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...71#post4311271

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    Yo homiE.......

    I thought this was an amazing piece of poetry. I'm not too much into the gore of rhyme, but am seriously considering studying it now. I read the subject title....and was kinda skeptical, but you proved me wrong. Capture demensions in your mind like this more often homIe. I wana read some more you have floating around that mind of yours.........

    Ill....
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    anyone out there?

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    I left feed and a link...

    I would really hold your feed above jus about anyone elses bounce..

    would you?

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    oh sorry man, when i get a chance and I'm not as fucked up;ike npw I will take a gander at your peice, forgive me. I'm well forgetful and really pressed form time...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Bounce
    oh sorry man, when i get a chance and I'm not as fucked up;ike npw I will take a gander at your peice, forgive me. I'm well forgetful and really pressed form time...

    LOL..I understand...and thank you

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    do me a favor and please remind me if I don;t get around to it in a bit, I really want to give you some detailed feed back.

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    Its not a detailed peice....But nobody else seems to understand it...

    I'm hoping you will....If I wrote it good...But yeah i can do that....

    Too bad i nvr know when ur online

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    Wow, this is amazing. The picture was so eerie and spooky, I liked the 'horror' theme that you incorporated into the piece. In my eyes, you're the most consistent poet here on the board, and I wish you the best out in the real world. The title for this was very original, I dont know if this was a topic from SS, but you approached it well, in an unique direction. The path that the drop followed was obliterating, and hopefully people will understand what you are portraying here. A lot of new heads are not coherent enough to form a logical intellect and actually take the time to understand what you're sending out. You're a great writer, a great person, stay that way. Please hit the link below.

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=286851

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