quiet take over

[Ether Spitter]

I flow real from the mind and am thus noetic
Energitc. With zeal create symphony of words
a full meal
Eat well, sleep on clouds of knowledge and bow,
down in sweet sounds of angels wings. Hover round
I like this n steal away the learned like pirates
in private, we learn and as the world turns
our minds keep smiling.
X-claim what is yours and retort
by any means necessary in all sorts
we belong here. we from here
we shed tears. we bled here
a demon asked. . .where?

[Witty]

this wasn't bad.....you had nice vocab and I felt that your wording was alot better than the other one I left feed on. your structure still makes it kind of hard to read though,your flow was also alot better in this drop.....nice drop dude.

[Ether Spitter]

thats what it do....preciate it

[RhymeSwift]

compleccated/........................did you even understand your words?any ways.ned to elevate.peep my poems...................p-e-a-c-e........

[Ether Spitter]

when it comes to the complication of the mind...a simple mind can only stretch so far...yours prolly didnt even bend....

lol....but thanks for the feed

[Rubix cube]

It seemed a lil cluttered but it was good. it sends a feel free vib. keep at it

[Ether Spitter]

i feel what your sayin...now that i look at it ur right...the last line was hot tho rite

[Rubix cube]

It wuz scorchin!! try sayin ur rhymes out loud when u type them to see if it all fits. but its all good playa.