thanks plain that was prolly the best feed we got beside verbal
thanks plain that was prolly the best feed we got beside verbal
uppin for some feed leave links
upps last time!!!!!!
''Crying Is Blackmail''
uppin leave links
Laydeee- very creative in the peice,nice use of vocab and structure made it easier to read,u had good imagery and it made it good cause it kept me readin...my favorite lines was....
A year has gone by now, i’m wit a man & ur memories ent faded
Bway i picture U wen i’m wit him, Not a single moment shaded
& it can’t ever be raded, ‘fore u are never degraded,
even though “we” never made it, ur stil in my heart only a change 2 it
i was really feelin that right there
Dastreetson-verse was decent, only thing it lacked alot of is Vocab...structure,imagery,and flow was all on point...evelate in vocab
my favorite lines was at the beginning......
do you believe in love at first sight,i do im seeing it right now
watching you from a distance, want to talk to u but how
theres another man by your side blocking my attemps
undressin u wit my eyes, wantin ur sexy body i must admit
felt like u was gettin a point across in them lines....Good job to both
thanks JQ uppin
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