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    Babbler And More Fukn Babbler

    what am I gonna do way drunk, who would of thought
    life was something i wish sometimes i wouldnt have bought.
    shit better yet, i dont think i purchased it
    can I end and call this it, better yet call this the end.
    sorry but this is a drunken cry of pains within
    water build up from simple rains sitting quiet in pudddles.
    come together plan out thoughts like football huddles
    fuk this world its given me all but then nothing
    is a full house with an empty image really something?
    I thought something was a thing id be made up off
    but my mothers hopes I completely crumbled
    became a nothing who just begs and crumbles his cries in mumbles
    she thought id grow up to be someone but a dead beat said hi
    waiting for the one but just a someone waiting to say hi.
    walls closing in. sinks and worlds just falling in within
    sometimies i wonder why i came to be just why? why?..god
    god this kid is smart as ever gonna be someone
    but by hiumself with the only person hearing him is no one.
    '


    FUCK THIS WORLD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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    So angry.. Counseling would be great huh?

    decent read. not so happy really, GREAT EMOTION I Guess

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    I like.

    Full of emotion, very direct to the reader too.
    I also liked they way you used rhetorical questions. They helped to include the reader.

    fuk this world its given me all but then nothing
    is a full house with an empty image really something?


    ^^ that was dope.

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    yeah, good piece, nice verses, no major downfalls in lyrics, text or scheme. u definitely got a good way of expressing yourself with great emotion.

    good job

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    Nice to see you back Bribe. But get the links or this is closed.
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    nice but you sound like you were mad at somone but this was a pretty decent drop I guess creativity ws nice but tthe topic was not that good to me but you had meta's and complexity in a way just drop with a better topic to make the piece better iight good piece though

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    yeah pretty good and direct verse.. does have some impact.. yeah emotion came thru well.. clearly expressed and literal..
    could of been a lil longer i reckon coz was good...
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    oh man what in the world did I write...lol
    I was very very drunk and angry last night.
    I came on here and just jotted whatever came in mind, even if it didnt rhyme at times..
    interesting what the mind altered by alcohol can do lol...wow
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