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    The Thoughts Before a Murder

    Thoughts before a Murder....
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    Silence scriptures clocks tock and mulitple sounds of tickers
    looking at used stickers,and wrappers of an composed snickers
    enrolled in life but thoughts of a death caused by me is bizzare
    discard this felling,knowing what I will do shall become a scar
    anti social and deranged thoughts,I've been complained caught
    in lanes ought,to be insane brought,between names and slots
    horrific,consoared instance of his life being nomore of existance
    concords intense,of more sentence,then it was not the lords intent
    Viscious and polifitted,colliding with vivid,of this moment
    take control for a second waiting to soon own it
    Omniscient,stress worthy,untold stories,and a major loss of glory
    like strange orgy,as if this was to happen after and before me
    Complexity intimate,condencity inhibits,the total of 10 digits
    death and the man who comitted,this act is then reclivit
    Druged up nudged to a point to no longer capable to budge
    and the right to judge,then he instead gets recite of grudge
    confused to decide to comense,or to refuse to be convienced
    and get now then conclude to the act of a victim of vengance
    Sworn sacred to the word of the people that he stands for
    now these thought of the question still has not led up to an answer
    advance to a calm situation,steps to conspituation of this minipulation
    my soul becomes a cycle of precipitation,henced foward continuation
    re-signed thinking of whats right,murder him or lose the reputaion
    multiple trials and tribulation the outcome of several speculations
    Hearing the voice,questions a request for his weapon of choice
    then thinks of his kidnapping being the air characteristic of moist
    Images flash the minutes just past,derangely continues to laugh
    resumes in the venue and grasps,the torture utinsle at last
    and now in which he is about to commit this tonight
    Steps to the victim and then suddenly lifts his mic



    (Inspired by a true battle)the murderer is a rapper in a battle for you people who do not understand
    Last edited by +Glich+; March 7th, 2006 at 12:11 PM

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    looking at used stickers,and wrappers of an composed snickers
    ?..a bit confused at ^that line


    enrolled in life but thoughts of a death caused by me is bizzare
    discard this felling,knowing what I will do shall become a scar
    anti social and deranged thoughts,I've been complained caught
    in lanes ought,to be insane brought,between names and slots

    nice.. apart fdrom the rhyming of the last 2 lines,, diddnt rhyme 2 good 2 me neway


    overall nice vocab displayed.. not too over the top and not underweight... flow was tite..
    storyline rolled well..


    Omniscient,stress worthy,untold stories,and a major loss of glory
    like a strange orgy,as if this was to happen after and before me
    yeah..

    i'm not sure if the relation of the murderer being a rapper.. thus leading up to the final lines was nessary as such and maybe could of finished differently without the murderer being a rapper.. just a thought..

    dope writing fosho

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    Thanx appreciate that Ninjah......

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    I Hate You Glitch I Think You Are Very Unorthadox Because You Call Yourself A Rapper And All You Do Is Go Into Some Deep Thought Poetic Shit Noone Likes That Because You Dont Do It Right I Seen Your Battles I Like Em But His Shit Man Come The Fuck On Be Real Yall Take This Shit To A Level Where It Aint Supposed To Be Imagined I Dont Want To Have To Grab A Thesoras A Dictionary And Lap Top When I Hear Someone Rhyme You Were One Of Those Dudes Who When You First Started Rappin You Always Had A Dictionary Around And Rhymed Big Ass Words With Other Big Ass Words That You Didnt Know What They Meant You Fuckin Suck> You Have Just Had Shit Talked To You By The Professional Shit Talker Opie Mutha Fuckin Taylor Bitch!

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    lol!!!!!!

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    Opie his shit is raw. +Glitch+ i think you got a unique flow. and the way u rhyme its like youre tellin a story yet you are still making sense. Because sometimes when niggas story rhyme thay make themselves seem stupid

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    +Glich+ baby you did a really good job on this...... your thoughts were so profound in this excerpt i loved it... it was beautiful.... Opie dude look at your record dont talk shit unless you got the backs for it..... i mean yeah i talk a lot of shhit but i could back it up get ya game up kid im not feelin tha hate.... but like i said baby good job
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    thank you glad you liked it.....................oh yeah thanx to you too 357 I'm actually from Pomona homie big ups

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    uppin this

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    Ninjah where have you been though

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    LOL at u using this as a OM i already told u what i think of it...it was great...and i hope u win that battle homie...iight...good peice..real deep...

    9/10...keep it up...

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    hey white flame. can u look at ma rap entitled "I Should Be dead"

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    like GrimReapa : LOL at u using this as a OM i already told u what i think of it...it was great...and i hope u win that battle homie...iight...good peice..real deep...

    9/10...keep it up...
    and man put this rule : m good but there's betta
    so call me suck cuz at the end i'll end ya life
    wiz a mic. i have it n u lost it
    my words worest then kniv

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