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Thread: A King Worth Killing (Ft. Atticus)

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    A King Worth Killing (Ft. Atticus)

    Atticus
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    Under that black top hat, stitched within
    its barers, rests Uncle Tom, and a delightful
    game of ring around the rosy meets the ashes
    of what's to come; while all the kids fall back
    as they watch Rosa run in black circled eye
    lashes, looking For the head of the pack.

    Then he stood, a foot in the grave as they gave
    the tipping point a blunt wrapped in those ashes.
    I smoked the bones of the land and braved
    to go on the brim, as niggers splintered the thin
    lumber and Black Jack Johnson turned limbs
    towards the kids; calling "timber!" until white men
    went limp, in sight of the heated summer.

    Coreta's in the corner, making Martin's
    death bed, As the sheets get caught in
    that stubborn old birch tree, while the willows
    trembled and their passionate tears burn two holes
    through these thin covers of purity;
    before they go opaque and twist their corners
    in to hug her screaming throat.

    We came engraved on stumps from the cherry
    tree that was chopped down, which became our
    coffin as drops of resin incased our tasteless eye.
    A golden apple stolen from the hands holding time.
    Washington watched them enter the garden
    and pick fictional leaves from the money tree,
    bringing dead presidents crumbling to their knees.
    So sit at the head of my table and tell me
    of the minorities who's basket came back empty.
    Then reach for the blood sun with the rope between
    the dirty leaves where poverty once hung.


    Monotony sowed it's seed when stores showed
    how deep we breathe into their hollow roots.
    We wore shirts that spoke cloaked volumes to
    listeners that were mute. They clothed our
    hatred, anger's naked, undressed resentment,
    that loathed a fashionable, complacent truth.
    We all followed suit, you would too soon enough.
    We all supported it, sporting outfits from innocent
    fists of infants gone missing under wheel barrows;
    carrying deals scandals materialized to hide narrow
    wrists twisting crops cops were peeling for proof.


    Mississippi state of mind; paths are being blazed,
    as Fredrick Douglas leads a train of thought
    underground, directly through the eternal grave.
    Meet at the safe house, but mind the barbed wire.
    The plantation stands as the sun's eclipsed in fire
    and each step leaves an entire asphalt highway.

    Roads are overgrown hospitals since we sold
    peace by the kilo to those homes in the ghetto;
    knowing young ones loved fame, wanting to
    snort the light, but it distorted the bright faced
    horizon into sporadic afternoons, where the moon-
    shine quietly made life frightful of black men that
    had broken bottles, but guns that cast no shadows.


    Hear the dogs bleed, their hungering screams
    into the dense air as Jesus yanks the collar
    so hard that a spark is born in dry atmosphere,
    While the darkness Watches from between
    gaps in the forrest's fingers before the flame
    dances up the arms of a quivering evergreen.

    The two thick trunks burn steady until all their
    limbs have been singed off and all that remains
    is a charred may pole as Jesus starts dancing,
    Hand in hand with ignorance, before the polls falter;
    land crossed on ground as embers light their pride.
    All these new constellations fall beside
    the rippling skies while Jesus opens his eyes;
    falls upon God's lost cross, into his transfixed
    crucifixion and begins to sing sin as he cries.

    ... And there, Betsy Ross sits on her colonial porch
    watching it all happen. Gazing threw the spaces of
    the railing she watches every black man there,
    trapped between the bars of a white picket fence;
    then tilts her heavy head down and continues
    sewing as the needle of that syringe cracks her
    ivory thimble. All seven red stripes began to bleed
    away, leaving a clean white page to fly at half mast.

    This past is nobody's flag that is flown over the rags
    of epitaphs. Our plague is on parade and we walk
    with crooked swags that are gladly bound and gagged.
    Who will praise this symbol if it's raised with
    simple prejudice for the thimble and the thread
    as we dragged our feet in trenches with bliss?
    They proclaim to wave proud and brag about names
    mentioned, being ashamed of the attention willing
    to make them a famous nation over a king worth killing.

    Continue to pace crab grass and broken shards
    of that stained glass window that decided to
    kiss the blarney stone. As the windows opened,
    the fog ran in, then tiptoed over every note
    and began to dance... hand in hand, toe to toe;
    Jesus was romanced into such a slow trance.

    The music led; fog followed, as the choir stood
    in awe and watched doves overcome the swallows.
    They just stood there, providing the soundtrack
    to the last site of equality...before the fog became
    tangled in threads of sanity. Faster the two twirled about;
    thread growing titer around The Minister's cold throat
    as the two continue to dance; Following the orchestrators
    hands before he raises them... the noose tightens,
    and Malcolm wears an "X" over each eye lid...
    while he dies, the music subsides on a high note.

    Likewise, when Martin Luther realized how steep
    the steps where set deep inside each steeple,
    he cried, "When I die... I'll scribe my Alibi in metal.
    Tell me if there's life above what we call good and evil!
    Should people fight if time passes away our rights?
    I've tried to turn the knob, I've tried to knock
    on the doors with the force of praying hands.
    But this neutral lock the Smiths picked to hold
    the broken pieces of people's complete soul
    can't fit through the key-whole..."

    The church clears. The screaming spectators
    disperse through the various halls to find an exit,
    While with ever ear piercing Screech Malcolm lifts
    Farther into the darkness of the cathedral rafters.
    Join us here, after the dead letters are opened again,
    and the spine of the Bible breaks under the devil's pen.
    He's drawn blood, while we've foregone awe to
    wonder if dawn will come. All it spawned was sons,
    that our daughters saw shunned to fields dreamed in cotton.

    But, there's a straggler. Harriet has lost her way;
    stumbling through the halls, It seems the walls
    have a thousand eyes, they see all, and judge more.
    She stop dead, reached a fork In the cavernous hallways,
    to the right she gazed into the light at the end of
    the tunnel, before she turned... looked quick then ran left
    as she disappeared............. into the darkness.
    The silence: deafening as the walls began to cry led;
    they lifted brick fingers, pointing, chanting "Death... Death...

    Death went out to the sinner’s house,
    Come and go with me
    Sinner cried out, I’m not ready to go,
    Ain’t got no travellin’ shoes.
    Got no travellin’ shoes, got no travellin’ shoes
    Sinner cried out, I’m not ready to go
    I ain’t got no travellin’ shoes

    Death went out to the gambler’s house,
    Come and go with me
    The gambler cried out, I’m not ready to go,
    Ain’t got no travellin’ shoes.
    Got no travellin’ shoes, got no travellin’ shoes
    Sinner cried out, I’m not ready to go
    I ain’t got no travellin’ shoes

    Death went out to the preacher’s house,
    Come and go with me
    The preacher cried out, I’m not ready to go,
    Ain’t got no travellin’ shoes"


    ("Travellin' Shoes" By Vera Hall Ward)



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    thread growing titer around The Minister's cold throat
    as the two continue to dance; Following the orchestrators
    hands before he raises them... the noose tightens,
    and Malcolm wears an "X" over each eye lid...
    while he dies, the music subsides on a high note.
    and
    Join us here, after the dead letters are opened again,
    and the spine of the Bible breaks under the devil's pen.
    He's drawn blood, while we've foregone awe to
    wonder if dawn will come. All it spawned was sons,
    that our daughters saw shunned to fields dreamed in cotton.
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    man that was dope

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    thread growing titer around The Minister's cold throat
    as the two continue to dance; Following the orchestrators
    hands before he raises them... the noose tightens,
    and Malcolm wears an "X" over each eye lid...
    while he dies, the music subsides on a high note.
    and
    Join us here, after the dead letters are opened again,
    and the spine of the Bible breaks under the devil's pen.
    He's drawn blood, while we've foregone awe to
    wonder if dawn will come. All it spawned was sons,
    that our daughters saw shunned to fields dreamed in cotton.




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    wow ill shit i would say my fav line was the same as the other two great ones by the way topic of this was nice you brought some fresh and original shit too it i think the rhyming could have been better but it was still good structure was good vocab was good in this so was the word play stay up peace
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    thanks for the read. I know it's longer then most so it's appreciated that you took the time.
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    I loved this right here, one thing that influenced my mind was that the lines weren't streched at all. That gave me a thought to not stretch my lines anymore and shorten them up a bit. But what i really loved is that, this flow way to good, lol. The flowed just soothed my mind and theres nothing much more i can say but...dope. This collab was great, you guys are real good. Whenever i get better, think you could collab with me anytime guys . Anyways, nice job.

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    this has imagery/potential , the rhyme scheme was boring made me feel like it was corny the way you put it together...I'm feeling this, excellent writing , and very well put together

    this gets 3 mics up
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    its was v. v. good man and her's ma fav. lines ?
    Death went out to the sinner’s house,
    Come and go with me
    Sinner cried out, I’m not ready to go,
    Ain’t got no travellin’ shoes.
    Got no travellin’ shoes, got no travellin’ shoes
    Sinner cried out, I’m not ready to go
    I ain’t got no travellin’ shoes

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    wow.. a bit too long for 1 readin all at once... but ill struggle on
    nice poetics still.... some nice rhymes and rhythyms throughtout.. plus i cited a few nice mettas... and imagery was vivd in places...vocab was used well. and was worded poeticaly
    so yeah some very good creativity at word
    not too much hip hop influence in this piece at times.. but is there in parts...

    nice writing still

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    thanks for the replies. leave links if you want.

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    damn this was dope.I loved it.....tight rhymes.dope imagery as well in this peice,flow was steady throughout,which is some acheivement considering the length of it.all in all it was a dope peice.....well done.

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    Nice drop by both kinda long but hey it's okay if it's dope,nice creativity by Mindless and Atticus had great Multi's nice how you guys went verse for verse like that that was unique and you both had a good topic to do this on and took advantage keep this up yall

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    My hats off to you guys on this, seriously good work guys. YOu took something attemped thousands of times here on RB and owned it complelty. Simply put, legendz material. The complexity was thought provoking and the writting beautiful, imagery on point and deep messages. Originality acroos the board here, there were some really viscious lines in this. Great drop, one that you can be sure I'll read over and over. I loved the mature content, and how you interwove the figureheads in this. This just oozed dopeness.

    Great job on a legendary peice guys.

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    man that was dope

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    thread growing titer around The Minister's cold throat
    as the two continue to dance; Following the orchestrators
    hands before he raises them... the noose tightens,
    and Malcolm wears an "X" over each eye lid...
    while he dies, the music subsides on a high note.
    and
    Join us here, after the dead letters are opened again,
    and the spine of the Bible breaks under the devil's pen.
    He's drawn blood, while we've foregone awe to
    wonder if dawn will come. All it spawned was sons,
    that our daughters saw shunned to fields dreamed in cotton.
    word

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