Story Of My Life...(Not Like The Bo'shit On This Site About Fake Gangstas)

[b_rEEz]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...48#post4036148
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...62#post4036162



Aiight….well my life…we need some tissues in here…its hard shit…cry if you wanna…laugh…but man, I live it..

All my life been emotionly hurt, thinking of the dirt
Where I wanna lay, why the fuck am i here today?
Thinking of my struggle, and the pain I keep feelin
Been fucked up so long, my emotions finally revealin
I keep telling people, leave me alone, when im not fine
Its not a pretty life I live, its fucked up, seems like a lie
If I was rich it’d be different, if I had love it’d change
But no matter all the good I do, shit still stays the same
I try my hardest, and I fail, its like I cant ever win
My lifes gone from being born, to a fuckin bloody sin
My demise is coming soon, and I don’t wanna deny it
Cutting myself for so long, I don’t advise you to try it
My emotions are as bloody as my lyrics are graphic
People livin life on the freeway, while im stuck in traffic
Red lights all the time, and I know I can see my demise
Close my eyes and try to vision a better life, but its hard
When I feel like im barred from going very far
I break down and cry, and just stare into the sky
Watching as every shooting star flys by…wishin I could wish
My lifes like a bitch, my lifes just a bunch of ish
Im breaking my life down, from whats bad n whats good
Nothings good, and iunno if id ever change that if I could
Maybe I like my life in misery, maybe I like these hard times
Putting my life into perspective for you in each one of my lines
Time after time I believe im gunna die, getting shot at from every angle
Waiting for someone to wack me at night, take my body to mangle
Im in hell in this picture, and Its all painted with my blood
No matter what I do im sad, so I resort to smokin bud
But it doesn’t help, fuck man I cant even get a high
But my lifes gone by 16 years, and still I cry alone in my room
Im in the life of doom, fuck whats the point of myself?
Im in good health, but my paper and pen is my wealth

Hook:2x
So as I take the gun outa the closet, my lifes a motion picture
I pause it, Waiting for people to applaud it, as I raise the gun to my temple
People looking at me, im going mental, they realize my real insanity
But do I give a fuck? NO, im living with no vanity

Im crying my eyes out, and no one seems to give a fuck
My lifes like a poker game, and Ive run out of luck
It sucks, I cant take this anymore, im gone
My life torn, as I try to think of another way to stop it
Put the gun to my brain and cock it, silencer on and I lock it
Whats next for me to do? tear apart a picture of you
And laugh…my lifes still not good, but at least I can smile
Take time to reconcile, and just sit down to think for a while
Pieces of you all over my bedroom floor, you’re a fucking whore
What the fuck did you take me for? You made me do this
As I pull out my dick on your picture, and start to piss
Im laughing at your face, and pissin in your mouth
Next im gunna kill you, and burn down your house
My lifes been so vacant without you in it, but ill live
I put the gun down for a second, think of my life as a kid
It wasn’t that great still, but when u came it was worse
You put me in my death bed, look im up in a herse
Curse your little ho’ actions, fuck you and your life
This woman aint no fuckin saint, shes trife
I give up on it all, it took me so long to finally realize
Through all the color skies, all that bitch do is lie
Im breaking apart, my life been done here for a bit
Takin myself apart from every angle, cuz its all shit
Try to smile and I cry, my happiness turn to tears
Realizing my true struggle thru all of my fears
I take my time in my death, takin my life precise
Tryna forget all of my struggles n all of my fights
Turning off the lights cuz im crawling to greater hights

Hook:2x

This is my life and my future, I’ll jus keep reciting my past
Thru all my pain and my agony ill keep on fightin to last
I gotta make it man…I gotta make this work out
Man, now people finally realize what im about
I will make it, I will stay strong and stand alone if I have to
And I’ll do whatevers in my power to get right past you
So listen, anytime you think your down…write a few lines
Cuz that’s what I do, and then produce my rhymes
Im already feelin better, although I know my lifes shit
Cried for so long, I have no enegery left to spit
So I laugh, and try to gain composure back into my life
People stop givin me shit, and don’t listen to me thru spite
But ive just killed myself…and all I can see is heavens light

Hook: 3x

[massive attack]

shiit was long but it was dope i could relate to this shyt nigga. i was feelin this big time. vocab was lil simple and flow wason point tho. niggah keep flown that sum nice shyt dawg

[b_rEEz]

Haha, Aiigh....Yeah, Its A Bit Long, But Its The Story Of My Life....Im 100 Years Old Duke...Haha

Uppin..

[b_rEEz]

Uppin?

[Resolute]

Definately liked this. The topic choice was nothing original, but your take on it is. I liked the rhyme schemes you toyed with here too, especially in the beginning verse. Its nice to see the newer heads experimenting a little. Lol. The rhyming was fairly basic though, and at times - your choice of words hurt this piece. Some vocab wouldnt go a miss, just to keep the reader interested and get them drawn in. Nahmsayen? You could use more jmulties to tighten up your flow and schemes a little, but other than that - not bad. A good read. I enjoyed.

[rufus_dirty]

the rhyme was nice -- the hook was hot - pain was nice and the shit was for the hood but uhhhhhhhhhhhhh some shit I couldn't feel like the verse about ole girl -- it's MOB -- later baby, i'm bout my money now / trying to come up on something / and that shit you talking bout ain't nothing ------ ya know but shit hot full of pain - borderline crazy -- but shit hot can't front

[b_rEEz]

Aiigh Thats Whats Up.....Uppin.

[Resolute]

Hey, what goes around comes around. Respond to mine: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...44#post4043444

- Res

[Arsenist3rd*]

simple elevate
it wasn't bad but it wasn't good vocab doesn't create creativity tha wordplay needs leveled up juss keep workin at it

[b_rEEz]

Aiigh, Uppin

[big j da fat boy]

yo i really liked this. it was a long read but worth it. the shit you was sayin i could really relate to it. you had great flow an i liked the way you use ya words an ya wordplay. i liked it cause it made a story of my life too. you had great imagery in this an it just painted a picture in my head of what you was sayin an i could see where you was comin from on this one man. peace out dawg. could you return the favor an check out my collab wit teflon-king it's called baby i'm in love. if so thanx man

[D Infamous]

u live a very lonely life
yes son t.h.u.g

[-*tyrone*-]

Aiigh, thats whats up....


D Infamous,.,,lets do battle on the front lines cuz.....ypu reply back and you'll get buried.

[-*tyrone*-]

Ps..Tyrone...is..b_rEEz