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Thread: The Letter (Feat Mr.Ncredible)

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    The Letter (Feat Mr.Ncredible)

    I'm sick of your racism it making me furious
    Why are you stalking me all the time, I’m curious
    You need to understand how I feel, do you,
    Do you know what I’ve been going through
    If you come near me again, your gonna die
    And I wont have enough time to cry,
    This isn’t a threat, it's a promise letter
    Your attitude needs to get a lot better
    While I’m trying to mind my own
    You showing people how I’ve grown
    You better move away real soon
    Before I pop you like a balloon,
    You given me this inner sickness
    Asking god for your own forgiveness.

    Who would write such a thing horrible like this
    I wouldnt stalk somebody what’s there to be curious
    Who are you and why did u write this to me
    no name nor an address who could you be
    whats wrong wit my attitude what should I change
    im not races how can u put this on me whats there to blame
    I would reply to this letter but theres no address
    No way to ask why, now im working up all this stress
    I knew once I saw those words “Your dead” I would cry
    Why would someone want to kill such an innocent guy
    Please got help just make my life ez and better
    Who would write me an unsigned letter


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    lol nice save.
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    yeah i wasnt tryin to get this closed....uppin for some feed plz

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    hey this was niice.. fa real... i liked the topic very interestin.. like the first verse then the second one came in very niicely.. rhymes was good & flow was smooth.. dam both u'z good! keep it coming...
    ''Crying Is Blackmail''

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    thanks for the feed Laydee....uppin for more feed.

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    ty rise!

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    uppin for feed....ppl dont sleep on this we need feed...
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    hey leave the link 2 this in my crew its great! & they should leave yall feed...
    ''Crying Is Blackmail''

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    piece was OK.. not a complete attention grabber but decent. You both have done MUCH better than this. The storyline was basic, the piece didn't contain much information about the topic. But your flows and such were on point. Vocabulary was meh.. Ncredible took the vocab, fallen you need to learn how to base things on storylines. You dove right into the topic instead of giving an intro or something. and hah.. you both rhymed with curious.. work harder next time, this piece was quickly written.. TAKE YOUR TIME..

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    What ever Aaron.
    Rise.

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    could ya check out my o.m... :-(
    ''Crying Is Blackmail''

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    well i thought the topic was interestin on this flow was nice so was the rhyme scheme that to me was the best the end of the second verse really sumed it up but also brought some new idea like u could do a part two so overall good piece keep it comin
    leave feed on my om question
    hit up these om's wit some feed

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