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    ...My Own Assassin...

    Wintry storms licking my temples… frostbites the mantle… goose pimples
    …I shudder… tremble… assemble my mental notion on loose principles
    Morals hardboiled inside the melting pot, still seeing hazard I fail to stop
    this rot that decays my flesh with a rage, ill being a bastard, hell the plot
    …Got lost at birth, I wasn’t born in a hospice just tossed to Earth w/o love
    exiled from heaven like that Satan kid, landed on my head….
    ………..............…….ear-splitting spitting FUCKS YOU to the skies above.


    We should call time here and not continue, since the rest of the menu
    …is surely a twisted venue to veer thru, I tell God “I still fear you”
    and perhaps I fear coming near you for fear what the fear will do.

    This spiritual recital stands vital… even the title raps it up in a nutcracker
    my initial survival is crucial like those pilgrims kissing stones over Mecca
    Eye’s flicker sleepily, looking around the corner cautiously….its creepy
    I’m knee-deep in shit through my khakis… soaked grossly with faeces
    The freeze leaves my joints seized…cords choked, I provoke a tantrum
    daylight’s in the distance, I move close to the mirage, a hoax,/phantom
    Bones shaken… as a vile ill fills my bile while I stifle in my grown chagrin
    stood back in panic grimacing… noticing me slaying myself…
    ………………………………………………............................…my own assassin.

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    uppin sum feeds

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    Wintry storms licking my temples… frostbites the mantle… goose pimples
    …I shudder… tremble… assemble my mental notion on loose principles
    Morals hardboiled inside the melting pot, still seeing hazard I fail to stop
    this rot that decays my flesh with a rage, ill being a bastard, hell the plot

    ^^^ one dope startin.. i loved ur vocabulary.. u used da right words in tha right place.. wiked imagery...

    fa real hun u was born a writer... ur shiit is dope as fuck! i'm feelin dis piece 2..
    u ended it perfectly 2.. & it flowed very good throughout da whole of it...
    wot else can i say keep writin coz i lurv readin ya shiit.. all ya pieces are so vivid & u no how 2 create imagery.. which is something some writers on here lack...
    bway u got talent... keep it comin...1
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    thanx a lot snypah.. i just painting those pictures you know

    peace1

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    yo i liked this one. it had imagery an vacab an it flowed pretty good. i liked the topic you used as well. overall this was a good peice. just keep at it. peace out

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    good shit

    damn this was a great drop.... I damn near felt like I was there...
    vocab -A
    Imagery-A
    flow- A
    fuck it man just a great fucking drop period..............................

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    safe 4 da looks brahs

    pz1

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    uppies

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    All of its ok except the openin lines which are great. The 1st 6 Id say
    Record this shiz n post on the audio bit, Id like to hear it
    If you neewd a beat to suit it lemme know

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    yeah fosho safe blud..what you good eith beats?

    i sure needa get some tracks put together

    ill holl@ u lata yeah

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