I'll Say No More.

[Art]

Thanks man, alot?

[Art]

Thanks again guys.

[Siege]

the flow was epic, and the multies were over one syllable so it made the flow great, also, htis had great storytelling, and awesome structure, good topic, the imagery was very very very nice and the emotion was deep, for the most part, the conclusion was dope, great twist. keep writing

hit up my piece "Racism" link in my sig.

[Art]

Thanks alot for the feed man.

I'll be sure to check out your peice.

[Mafioso.]

good pieace wording N's structure was decent creativtity was decent Imagary didn't really have none but this was good 7.6/10.................keep writing N' lmao at the pic.

[Art]

I guess you really didnt grasp the concept in here, or the metephors. And "lmao at the pic?" Its not funny, its depressing, and the man is terrified holding somebody he loved. I guess its just the imaturity some of you kids have. Its ok though, thanks for the feed.

[lyrical~boy]

that was real good man, you expressed real good lyrically...

[Art]

Thanks.

[ExDaGawd]

This was a pretty good kid, I liked the topic and how you didnt sway from it, Good read keep it up

[dotGod]

Def post this in poetry...
Storytelling is good... maybe got get in RSTL to hone the skills...

Work on some rhye scheme variations and such

[ThA C]

wow really amazing story ya got there..flowed really well and just was really well written...good topic choice too

[2hot2handle]

That was dope. Amazing imagery and storytelling. Move over slick rick. This was very poetic and I loved how you made the story connect by each verse. Very nice man, great flow, good to read. This is what I love seeing, and how you ended it perfectyl. I guess Ill say no more then.

[Soule]

Wow............Just wow.
At this peice.
It's really good.
Felt it alot.
Keep it up.
But eleavte on the wordplay a lil.
G/L to future work.