Racism

[Fuckingwitmenig]

very dope mayne. we be pimpin herman. me and my flock of gang are sailing away MEOW MEOW MEOW MEOW MEOW MEOW MEOW MEOW MEOW. Elevate Beeeetches

[mog]

I liked it. The begining drew me in... you should have kept it as strong through out. I give it 1 1/2 blunts up!!!!

[Kongol]

Drop cool
a gd topic
Structure alrite
Flow nice
Vocab improvin
keep@it

[Lack Focus]

You've said so much it's dificult to process in one sitting.

The vocab was immaculate and the message relayed flawlessly.
But, in my opinion, it lacked emotion and consequently didnt hit me. I felt exactly the same AFTER reading it as I did BEFORE reading it. I think it's because racism is such an everyday part of life that I was like "Well, yea, this makes sense. But it's nothing I've not heard before."

I hope you get what I'm saying and see it's no diss to you or your piece, just an opinion. Either way, I look forward to seeing other drops by you. I'm new on this site, so I'll keep an eye out for whats good.

Much Respect

[Siege]

thanx, and i can see where your coming from focus, thanx for the advice/feed

up

[pimpmickey]

that was a really strong peace and it was nicely put together on that sort of a topic

[Benny_Blanco]

In my personal opinion it's a poetic masterpiece in the making. Your portrayal of past history was what truly added depth to the "elongated" verse...lol. You're vocabulary was rather articulate and structure was well built. The flow (depending on the beat) was well imputted. I hope to see more and hope you decide to recite it in poetic clubs and venues. Outstanding bro!

[Killa-Beatz]

good english......... nice lyrics dawg keep it up

[Siege]

thnx........