Just My Shit

[da-one]

im on fire mostly out of control cant tame me
im out of my mind its my moms fault cant blame me
im carolina to da heart smoke marijuanna to da head
im make'em sick in carolina they take some carolina sudafed
who else u know keeps it coming hard
keep da fuckin raps running hard
on da track boulevard
make a choice pull a card
better make ya best pick
give a chick da best dick
best shit, backshots leave dat hoe breathless
since i came back to this site they been like damn here we go again
but i'll choke a nigga out and leave a ring around his neck like a bowling pen
best believe dat i blow da wind
this aint for fun bitch i flow 2 win
now dat im back its time to steal da show again
now dat im a older man
my armpits need stronger deoderant
i cut da lights on just to see da roaches scatter
u know this phatter
i serve it to yo ass right and make u hold da platter

[-IsIs-]

meh it was alright. you need way better structure b straight up.

since i came back to this site they been like damn here we go again
but i'll choke a nigga out and leave a ring around his neck like a bowling pen
^^
whos your alias?

the flow was alright in some places and needed to be improved. the vocabulary was simple nursery rhyme shit. the word carolina kinda fucked with your flow. try to use it in a slang way make it shorter. i liked the first line. but when your lines got really short ruined the piece.
keep droppin.

-Peace.