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Thread: Truth, Dreams, & Sorrow

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    Truth, Dreams, & Sorrow


    Truth, Dreams, & Sorrow.....

    envisioned a dream....my thoughts had predicted a scene
    about a man who was old....took a trip to a stream
    he tried to drink a lil water he was dyin from thirst
    cryin from hurt.....swollen wounds.....I decided to nurse
    this old man....5’5....was a hundred and four
    gave em some water and some bread he started mumbling more
    his stomach grumbled and roared......devoured nothing for days
    looked at his face.....felt the pride that his darkness portrays
    and then he smiled away.....slightly troubled from pain
    in his wrists...pulled up the sleeves....he was buckled in chains
    and it was evident to me this modest man was a slave
    born and raised.....hit me deeper than the core of a cave
    as I glanced in his eyes.....less darker than black
    he turned around.....i was stunned by the scars on his back
    tears rolled down my eyes.....sensed the ache of my past
    my breathing paused....felt the weight like someone’s takin my last
    nothing comes close to the sufferin he was touchin
    he told me how his masters would give him endless instructions
    callin em king shit.... then gave him a royal flushin
    after all....they were beatin this man like a percussion
    his heart was pure as the sunlight on a rainy hour
    sayin im trapped....but still movin cuz God gave me the power
    hes motivated....u smile but u grimace from truth
    asked him who he was he said the image of u
    .
    another dream...another scene....a beautiful world
    not in the house of a quarrel thru a beautiful girl
    and what beautiful pearl thats trapped inside of a clam
    emotional vibes is what she really needs from her man
    he walked outta the door......she cranked the water works
    her prince doesn’t pay attention when her heart-is-hurt
    shes 5’2....long hair...hourglassed....brown skin
    the type that’s always noticed when shes around him
    I asked her whats the problem girl u lookin pretty heated?
    I know its complicated but he doesn’t really mean it
    hes conceited and not real....how long yall been together
    she said.....it doesn’t matter cuz it wont get any better
    he doesn’t say I love u....and hes workin all the time
    I just wanna be noticed......let em know whats on my mind
    I know that im the star of his show.......I wanna shine
    hes so far ahead of his life......he left me behind
    im not the candy in his eye....I don’t even wanna live
    resurrect the good old days?....my soul I would give
    it’s a shame....I looked in her eyes the pain was drippin
    im trippin from the inflictions of sorrow that she was given
    she looked familiar....I inquired a description of her hubbie
    5’5 ...dark skin....suceessful....smart.....and funny
    kind heart....well it used to be, his face featurin youth
    come to think of it....I realize....he looks like u
    .
    now this shyt is getting into my brain....into my lane
    the story’s flowin like the blood thats into my veins
    ponderin if it’s a curse or an incandescent blessin
    seems these thoughts are “aim”ed at me to send an “instant message”
    saw a lady.....unaccompanied....short....in her late 80’s
    in the cemetery....white dress....by a grave wailing
    now this chick look like my mother.....the ambiance I sensed
    drew me into her presence.....my muscles started feelin tense
    felt emotions like I knew her......gave the lady a hug
    then she fainted in my arms like i gave her a drug
    opened her eyes.......startled cuz im into her sight
    squintin like she saw the brightest of perpetual light
    eyes widened.....became the source of a thousand rivers
    spoke of her sons demise.....gave me icy cold shivers
    up my spine....she cried....told me of her noble son
    her 1st born outta 5 and he was the oldest one
    confessin, he died in car accident....broke his chest in
    his demise met with destiny like they were best friends
    saw a photo by the grave.....his smile shined vividly
    dark skinned....brown eyes....5’5....looked full of energy
    my heart full of sympathy....he shook life free
    as I stared....my heart stopped cuz he looked like me
    we dread on the past and future....survive the present
    don’t half ass life like a moon in its cresent
    demises come and go.....we all gotta pay the toll
    cuz freedom in this life.....is the ultimate goal

    People Im Sorry For This Being So Long
    And The Second Verse Was Writtin In Like 30 Minutes
    It Was Supposed To Be A Colab But They Took To Long
    So I Decided To Go Solo

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    damn lol this was loooonnggg,

    but it was well worth the read,

    like the wordplay and it seemed pretty deep,

    would be cold for a topical battle aswell,

    and what beautiful pearl thats trapped inside of a clam
    emotional vibes is what she really needs from her man
    I know that im the star of his show.......I wanna shine
    hes so far ahead of his life......he left me behind

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    thanks

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    Really felt the topic coming from you.
    Structre was aiight could have been a lil better.
    Flow was feelable liked it.
    But the wordplay needed some work.
    Can you hit up my om with Nash please.
    Keep it up.


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    This was sick man, i culdnt rely c it in an audio but for a written its v. gd. Ur wrdplay was gd and ur similies and shit were sick. rhymin was nice and that like about a pearl in a clam is deep man i liked ip. U got skill showin especially at 15. Dope

    Keep droppin

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