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    Dead Life

    The tightened pressure exerts the steam within
    With these beats bumpin to lyrics ive written
    Dimensions of thoughts combust at the core
    Leakin the message as the chaos turns to war
    The life forms together model the domino theory
    Eliminates every hypothesis and many inquiries
    The true answer has appeared in our vision
    Everyone shuts up, stopped actions and listens
    If nature was born to self destruct whats been made
    With blood, bones, dead bodies nailed by grenades
    Then the creator helped the suicidal destruction
    By the material things and the money consumption
    Lead by powers who told us we knew nothing
    Cause hatred is easy to feel with lack of loving
    Maybe everything we build eventually falls to a force
    We may never know due to an unknown source

    Rebels band together as the animals fight each other
    Everyone gets fucked up calculated by the numbers
    The dead rise again to make things complicated
    Electricity shuts off as the phones arent operated
    Lines disconnected with the sparks flare in the air
    Everythings quiet, warriors formulate in bundles and pairs
    Every creature lines up for judgement to be resolved
    Circulate on the surface each group then revolves
    As midnight struck pitch black with stars as lights
    The attack mode paints a picture of an unthinkable sight
    Ignites anger and hatred into a blood bath everywhere
    Sea creatures drain the water as the flesh tears
    Oceans dry as fires spark across the dried up land
    Storms threaten the Earth as hurricanes blow sand

    Its between me and you we view the atmosphere
    Everyone focused on the death of another peer
    The fightin sparks, hell emerges upon the ground
    Ressurrects Satan as the bodies drowned
    Blood floods the streets where nature dies
    Life has ended and continuation is denied
    Hell rebels but heaven self destructs together
    Neither persist in existence is the drama setter
    Night fades as light comes to the surface
    Life died and all was left was the rap verses

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    Last edited by 2hot2handle; January 3rd, 2006 at 08:37 PM

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

    - Martin Luther King Jr.


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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

    - Martin Luther King Jr.


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    This was pretty dope, there was alot of imagery and i think u made it a point for that to be prominent and you accomplished that, the lines weren't too complex but they where good enough to not be simplistic. "If nature was born to self destruct whats been made", i like that line alot, for some reason it stands out to me, the last line was a nice touch to the verse even though i didnt really see where that fit in, overall it was a couple of good verses. Hit up "Just like he said" in my sig, thnx.

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    i like this piece its pretty dope, nice insights and you write alot of nice lines like
    "Cause hatred is easy to feel with lack of loving" n "Night fades as light comes to the surface/ Life died and all was left was the rap verses" sick way to end it

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

    - Martin Luther King Jr.


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    pretty nice yo..good poetry fosho.. tite struture and rhyming skills in and out..
    i liked the second verse/stanza the best.. it just seemed to flow more complete.. and maybe had a firmer vocab to it.. second verse also had the better imagery.. but yea the 1st verse was a decent introduction in retrospect...
    diddnt like the opening 2 lines that much but they worked i guess..
    still the ending was good both rhyme wise and in concept...
    some lines seemed like they could of had a little more to it...particaly in the last verse.. some lines seemed a lil incomplete for want of a verb or 2

    other than that

    nice drop...

    check this out yo

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=261974

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    it was tight
    good job my nigga
    8/10

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    uppin, an no shit feedback like noxious did

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    wun word 2 define dis "DOPE" fa real... lurved da way u started it and ended it..
    it flowed perfek, niice structure, very clear & very creative... overall i'll rate it 10/10
    wun lurv...
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    i 4got 2 add - u had a very gud use of vocabulary 2... nice wun....
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    i like this piece its pretty Nice, nice Thoughts and you write alot of nice lines like
    "Cause hatred is easy to feel with lack of loving" n "Night fades as light comes to the surface Life died and all was left was the rap verses" sick way to end it......but this wasnt the best.....keep elevating

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