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    Peace With The Cops Part 2

    Peace With The Cops
    Part II


    (Verse 1)
    I followed the sheriff down the hall and i was ready..........
    Walking all tough walkin stance real steady.....................
    He hopped on a chopper and i hopped on too..................
    He said the pilot will tell you what to do.........................
    Hope you succeed.....and true good luck to you..............
    He slid the door closed and we started goin up................
    I had a vison what i was goin do, sumthin bout blowin up...
    Bullets ricocheting backin forth makin me throwin up..........
    These fuckin cops were even lucky that i was showin up....
    but i did want to d a mission all th years i've been growin up
    The pilot said we are off to a place called France............
    The pilot said that this place was known for romance......
    the food was great and the buldings were a nice sight
    We started headin down...it was a very long flight........
    but thats alright i didnt feel like startin a fight................

    (Verse 2)
    I headed to my hotel room it was really big and rich lookin..
    Started feelin hingery so i checked what the bitch is cookin....
    I got a call from the pilot that get a sidearm bad men are comin
    Got out my 9mm i dont know what i was becoming...................
    I heard foot steps drummin and a few men hummin..................
    They knocked on my door and I crept slowy up to it...........
    knowin if i opened it....murder was what i was gonna committ
    But this was the mission so i didnt hold back to open tha door
    Biut right at that mopment the men kicked it in i went to the floor
    I ran behind the couch and took cover if they shoot.............
    the man went over to me and kciked me with his boot...............
    He asked me for my lute and i said " go fuck yourself ass hole"
    he took out his gun and shot at me i ducked right away......
    he said lets have a gun battle but i had to pass though...........
    I pushed all three of them aside i coudl really stay..................
    I ran to the pilots room and i found him tied up, dead.....
    Blood stained room and shirt...bullt wound to the head........

    (Verse 3)
    I coulndt bare this nonence these cops are gonna get me killed
    even though i was just about professionally skilled................
    I seriously didnt want to get bullet filled like a nigga on da block
    But i just have to pretend that i'm pullin da trigga on da block..
    So i decided bnot to trust them and kill them along with da men
    I went in the ahll again and bullet skimmed my shirt ...............
    It kind of hurt due to the fact that bullets are hard.......
    I roled sideways and shot back at them and hit one........
    This was a difficult battle but i'm gonna win this one.........
    There were two left and i needed to get more ammo......
    I got angry and i was like damn!!!!!!!!!!!!!!, yo.................
    I needed a helpin hand yo.......not a fagot with a banjo
    (haha) Security fled to the situation and helped me out...
    I had a badge with permission to kill that they didnt worry about
    I just smiled.....and didnt say a word..nuthin came outta my mouth
    I went up the elevator and took the chopper home..............
    On my way there i knew i was close to bein a dead man....
    And knowin that i'd neva trust the cops ever again.......

    The End

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    Nice, liked the first part better, but this was cool too
    in this verse i especailly liked...
    I got angry and i was like damn!!!!!!!!!!!!!!, yo.................
    I needed a helpin hand yo.......not a fagot with a banjo- funny shit man

    I had a vison what i was goin do, sumthin bout blowin up...
    Bullets ricocheting backin forth makin me throwin up..........
    These fuckin cops were even lucky that i was showin up....
    but i did want to da mission all the years i've been growin up- liked the verse, nice flow, maybe should have thought about using something else apart from up, but it worked
    Disliked- had a badge with permission to kill that they didnt worry about
    I just smiled.....and didnt say a word..nuthin came outta my mouth
    I went up the elevator and took the chopper home..............
    On my way there i knew i was close to bein a dead man....
    And knowin that i'd neva trust the cops ever again.......

    didnt like the ending, and no rhyming.

    he took out his gun and shot at me i ducked right away......
    he said lets have a gun battle but i had to pass though...........
    I pushed all three of them aside i coudl really stay..................
    Couldnt get into this bit, it kinda fucked up that bit, sorry..

    But i liked it, the story was good, the vocab was aiight, the flow was good in places, not so good in others, kepp working it man
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    thanks homie.....uppin for more

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    i like this shit alot
    it was nice
    i like how it was a follow up to the previous peice
    u really should put this in an audio peice it'll be dope
    nothing much i didnt like
    everything was on point
    vocab, structure, ect.

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    thanks uppin...check out part 1 before readin this

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    uhm nice idea structure looked good.. flow was good.. i diddnt like most of the line endings tho.. mostly lacking in rhymes... had some good quotes and hot 1 liners still.. i'd say elaborate on the rhyming skills tho... you threw in a couple of ill multies but diddnt stay consistant in any manner other than the structure and flow
    story was cool apart from the ending which was a bit of a let down

    stay @

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    thanks for the feed//uppin

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    nice i liked this one and i liked part 1 but this one was betta..

    He slid the door closed and we started goin up................
    I had a vison what i was goin do, sumthin bout blowin up...
    Bullets ricocheting backin forth makin me throwin up..........
    These fuckin cops were even lucky that i was showin up....
    but i did want to d a mission all th years i've been growin up

    that verse had an awesome flow and thats what i care about mostly...like i said on part 1, keep up the good work

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    thanks JJ for the feed.....i appreicate it.....uppin

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    Yea the flow was on point and shit, but there was couple of probs with final couplets and all, like the ending rhymes not rhymin as much but i reckon the structure, flow and overall presentation covered that lil prob, so yea this was good and keep it Poppin'

    Skribble, if ya got time, can ya check this OM out, aight thanks
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=262034
    Last edited by P. Mortuus; January 3rd, 2006 at 03:12 PM

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    yo skribble, dont mean to freepost but holla at me if u wanna do a collab on open mic..the info is in my sig and i already wrote some of my verses down in a notebook..aight peace and let me know soon, i wanna get this shit done

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    iight i'll holla when i get a chance..

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