Puzzled thoughts....

[_Lyrics]

babump

[Cody Nash]

Pusha C- Felt you could've done a lot better but you brought some imaginations and shit to this...Some of your lines were nice and some were just mere basic fillers...structure doesn't matter so I won't nag about that...your flow was off in some parts but for the most of the verse you were on key...Wordplay and vocabulary was meh but you did fine...overall I'd say it was hott...

Dick- No...verse was nearly horrible, not much imagination, lines need to be a little more stretched and your flow was off...you need to use less of all this shit in your verse: !$&*!@%^!@)^%!$!@${}{}{ $><)((''''''*....seriously fucks with the whole goddamn thing...you need elevation...

Bobericc- Decent...the best verse in here by far...I suggest next time you do a collab do it with people more highly skilled than these people...Pusha C I ain't complaining about but people like DICK here sure fuck it up for the rest of the people...Your verse consisted of constant flow but some little falloffs here and there...nothing you couldn't or didn't pick up on...you brought some vocab to the piece as well..good job...the structure of this whole verse was kind of wack...all of you should've PM'ed the verses to one person and had them color coded and posted up in the same thread...but it's too late for this now...Good job overall...

Keep working on your shit push and dick...and bob, for the most part your on track, some flaws buy your doing good...

*~Leaves the room Nameless~*

[XxXGodzXGiftXxX]

Bob
[Nice open]
whos to say the complexity of thoughts are simple???
all those in oppose...have plans sorted like "wheres my thimble"
my ways of explainin are far out...like horizon's through windows
our theories tip below ur average minds, like we'z playin limbo

our puzzled ideas come from the deepest emotions of gangta~life
see...we thinking before we rape and suffocate gangtaz~wifes
[this was ight]

my theory iz that the heart pumps solely so the brain smaccs
ill leave the audience clappin guns and hands for my puzzled act
[my fav from u was u'r closein]
Overall nice drop homie

{pusha c}
Look my mind so puzzled that all i can do is destroy
they say i'm ill going into war wit my son as a decoy
[lol i liked this]

i'm puzzled and shocked knowin dudes out to gut me
and not caring about no mother fucker on earth..but me
[dig that shit]

I walk onto the battle fields with no click and no gun
my mind puzzled and confused but still scared of no one
[shit nigga u sound like me lol]

i know i'm bout to die so i role up some...trees.....
got enemies watchin but there hands cant fuck wit these
[lol damn so far every line u done dropped i liked]

my body feeling hot,and my chess start to sweat,my shirt getin wet
But i wont stop running till i make it back to my set
[ahh amn this shit so funny]

when i pulled out the heat dudes start ducking in trash cans like
oscar from seasame street
i know they saw the shit we tote but still my gun stuck his face
to his door like a sticky note
[nice closein homie]


{Dictionary}
[this was ight]
My words, from crazy minds, hit n fuck up minds,
so quick, so deadly, swallow this sick "tip", but it's not even from a "9",

so follow me, im da leader......my mind has been mixed,
so ima take a second........oops u "shot", There's yo fix,
[this was ok not bad]

i don't flinch, twitch, i just watch the blood splatter,
Im so "Vain", feelin so much pain, nothin 2 gain, so ima touch n watch a nigga shatter,
[nice flow, work on structure]

it's just da Puzzled reaper, corrupted finger "Tip" of destruction,
u bust from my combustion, LL, got bitch's hushin, so wen shit rushin,
it's a guaranteed 2 leave a concusion, so stop fussin n rest n peace,
I'll swallow yo brain, spitted it out deformed n mixed, It'll b puzzled burnin underneath...
[nice wordplay and choice of words]

overall this was a good drop I'd rate it a 7.9/10

my fav verse was Pusha C's

Keep it up yall and make sure yall go check out my crew OM

[b_rEEz]

this was a good collab............

bobericc- u had a flow going, but at some pointr i got lost. vocab was great. ur structure was clear as well. the problem was that you need to make your piece more visionary...7.7/10

pusha c- you had an ok flow, and i like your structure. very understandable.really clear as well. vocab needs to extend more, everything else was good....good drop
6.6/10
dic-tio-nary- you had an off flow, good vision. also need to improve with the vocab, your structure was clear, your concept was ok to uderstand.....6/10

this was a good topic to talk about, your group. thats good.. but good luCC wit ya crew. and i hope you keep writing.....overall= 7/10

WoRD^^

^^^ Word.....everything he said is true....
nice job

[Pusha C]

uppin

[<Supreme>]

take out the sigs and shit...or jus do it as 1 drop (pm all the verses to 1 person)
verses all flowd well
gd structures
gd reads
mainly gd rhymin
keep @ it

[Pusha C]

thanx for feedback

[jnick22]

The king is here rhyme gangsta.hit hard like a punch leavin you daze.ak by my side many hoe ready to lock load and ride.

[Johnny 6-feet]

Closed, stop upping older open mics.