Liljayy921.. (0-1) vs 1 Lyricist (0-1)

[A. Know-phistage]

i told u that i was trying to elevate werd upping fo votes

[Archilleez]

L's The First To Lose,Ya Hot Pff.....Every Thing You Say Aint True
how can he have the lime light when you can't reach the lamp dude
this was an aight opener, I fink u couldve re-worded the 1st line 2 make it dope, but still aight
Damn L's Soft As Fuck Will Some One Grab This Herb a Pillow
This Bitch Jumping off High Well Let Me Open The fucken Window
ok
Ya Dope Fuck This 1st Lyricist Can't Even Manage to Sell Bricks
Stuff a Clock Up Your Ass,look at your verse,and cant even tell shit
lol funny but not hard hittin
Why's Lyricist in This League,You'll Never Gain Respect,Geek
Lyricist Is The Main Problem Of Herb,Cuz He's Stuck To The Letter E
ok-ish
Its a Long Way Down,But L's verse is First Down The Wale Brah
Yah Wack kid Even Front Lines gave The F to Fucken Fail Yah
ok not hittin too hard tho
Im Hot Your Not So Bitch You Just Best To Damn Believe This
Cuz When Lyricist Drop We'll All Fall Off When We Read It
aight closer

v

Liljay.. your verse is more stretched than the marks on a fat bitch
Cos your skillz run out every few months like a vehicles tax disc
lol nice opener
Now this kids buzzin cos he just figured out how to freepost
But your punches go missing like shaq and his free throws
lol aight
Jays biting so much he hasnt got a style to keep to
Your a bitch, thats why the first link in your sig directly precedes you
eh?
Kid you can try to whore me or spit fiction its just your own perogative
I would "aid" you with rap skillz but this dudes already hiv positive
lol nice
Aines dust off your banning stick, cos son just look what thor did
He did a tutorial...
And you couldnt bite em properly if it was pre-encore bitch
whats that gotta do wid him? no ,blah concept
And i wouldnt go to audio when your text is an embarrsment too
Cos son even the term wack.........is jealous of you
lol aight closer

Both came aight, nothind really dope from neither of ya though...
Liljay came more consistent with the 'ok' punches, and lyricist had some better lines, but not as consistent.
I would have to give it to lyricist tho, because imo his better lines, still hit harder than jays consistent "ok" bars.
Lil jay i liked ur opener, even though it coulda been re worded into somethin rlly dope imo, but it kinda went down hill for me after that. And ur punches were just "ok", nothing hitting hard enough.

L's The First To Lose,Ya Hot Pff.....Every Thing You Say Aint True
how can he have the lime light when you can't reach the lamp dude
VS
Liljay.. your verse is more stretched than the marks on a fat bitch
Cos your skillz run out every few months like a vehicles tax disc
Kid you can try to whore me or spit fiction its just your own perogative
I would "aid" you with rap skillz but this dudes already hiv positive

V/ lyricist

[>Inertia>]

Jay.

L's The First To Lose,Ya Hot Pff.....Every Thing You Say Aint True
how can he have the lime light when you can't reach the lamp dude
(Eh, not really.)
Damn L's Soft As Fuck Will Some One Grab This Herb a Pillow
This Bitch Jumping off High Well Let Me Open The fucken Window
(Nope.)
Ya Dope Fuck This 1st Lyricist Can't Even Manage to Sell Bricks
Stuff a Clock Up Your Ass,look at your verse,and cant even tell shit
(Not really.)
Why's Lyricist in This League,You'll Never Gain Respect,Geek
Lyricist Is The Main Problem Of Herb,Cuz He's Stuck To The Letter E
(ugh.)
Its a Long Way Down,But L's verse is First Down The Wale Brah
Yah Wack kid Even Front Lines gave The F to Fucken Fail Yah
(Nope.)
Im Hot Your Not So Bitch You Just Best To Damn Believe This
Cuz When Lyricist Drop We'll All Fall Off When We Read It
(Uh..no.)

vs. 1 Lyricist

Liljay.. your verse is more stretched than the marks on a fat bitch
Cos your skillz run out every few months like a vehicles tax disc
(eh..not really)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...80&page=5&pp=15

Now this kids buzzin cos he just figured out how to freepost
But your punches go missing like shaq and his free throws
(Ug..ight I guess.)
Jays biting so much he hasnt got a style to keep to
Your a bitch, thats why the first link in your sig directly precedes you
(Naw.)
Kid you can try to whore me or spit fiction its just your own perogative
I would "aid" you with rap skillz but this dudes already hiv positive
(Bad wordplay)
Aines dust off your banning stick, cos son just look what thor did
He did a tutorial...
And you couldnt bite em properly if it was pre-encore bitch
(Nope.)
And i wouldnt go to audio when your text is an embarrsment too
Cos son even the term wack.........is jealous of you
(wack.)

This battle sucked. I gotta vote 1 Lyricist though just cuz he was less wack. Word.

/v 1 Lyricist

[Untold.]

Damn L's Soft As Fuck Will Some One Grab This Herb a Pillow
This Bitch Jumping off High Well Let Me Open The fucken Window
Its a Long Way Down,But L's verse is First Down The Wale Brah
Yah Wack kid Even Front Lines gave The F to Fucken Fail Yah
Im Hot Your Not So Bitch You Just Best To Damn Believe This
Cuz When Lyricist Drop We'll All Fall Off When We Read It

vs.

Now this kids buzzin cos he just figured out how to freepost
But your punches go missing like shaq and his free throws
Jays biting so much he hasnt got a style to keep to
Your a bitch, thats why the first link in your sig directly precedes you
Kid you can try to whore me or spit fiction its just your own perogative
I would "aid" you with rap skillz but this dudes already hiv positive
And i wouldnt go to audio when your text is an embarrsment too
Cos son even the term wack.........is jealous of you

this was a pretty good battle. jay, you had some decent punches, but some of that shit was weak, man. some just needs better wording. seems like you got the concepts, but jut not the wording on point. work on that and you'll be dope.
as for lyricist, pretty dope shit. really was feeling some of them punches. same with you though, some of them shits could've been worded alot nicer. keep elevating and you'll do good to.

v/ 1 lyricist...

[A. Know-phistage]

5-1

[Alphabetized]

L's The First To Lose,Ya Hot Pff.....Every Thing You Say Aint True
how can he have the lime light when you can't reach the lamp dude
(heh, ok.)
Damn L's Soft As Fuck Will Some One Grab This Herb a Pillow
This Bitch Jumping off High Well Let Me Open The fucken Window
(no)
Ya Dope Fuck This 1st Lyricist Can't Even Manage to Sell Bricks
Stuff a Clock Up Your Ass,look at your verse,and cant even tell shit
(nah)
Why's Lyricist in This League,You'll Never Gain Respect,Geek
Lyricist Is The Main Problem Of Herb,Cuz He's Stuck To The Letter E
(no..)
Its a Long Way Down,But L's verse is First Down The Wale Brah
Yah Wack kid Even Front Lines gave The F to Fucken Fail Yah
(gay)
Im Hot Your Not So Bitch You Just Best To Damn Believe This
Cuz When Lyricist Drop We'll All Fall Off When We Read It
(no)



VS

Liljay.. your verse is more stretched than the marks on a fat bitch
Cos your skillz run out every few months like a vehicles tax disc
(ok)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...80&page=5&pp=15

Now this kids buzzin cos he just figured out how to freepost
But your punches go missing like shaq and his free throws
(played)
Jays biting so much he hasnt got a style to keep to
Your a bitch, thats why the first link in your sig directly precedes you
(lol this was good)
Kid you can try to whore me or spit fiction its just your own perogative
I would "aid" you with rap skillz but this dudes already hiv positive
(lol. probably true, kinda goes with the line above, so this is good)
Aines dust off your banning stick, cos son just look what thor did
He did a tutorial...
And you couldnt bite em properly if it was pre-encore bitch
(kinda stretched)
And i wouldnt go to audio when your text is an embarrsment too
Cos son even the term wack.........is jealous of you
(lol, better ending then his.)

Liljay- You have good concepts, but your wording was off. Plus, some of the punches i said NO to, were basically statements. for instance.
Damn L's Soft As Fuck Will Some One Grab This Herb a Pillow
This Bitch Jumping off High Well Let Me Open The fucken Window
More of a statement than punch. Watch that. Everything else was aight just word your concepts better n they could be dope, avoid making statements.

1 lyricist- The link just fucks up the strucutre. Watch out for played concepts and make sure your not stretching your lines. I think your wording was a little bit off, but not as much as liljay. It was an ok drop for you but dont fuck ur strucutre up with a link and avoid stretched lines, n u woulda won this easy if u did that.

Vote 1 Lyricist for better wording, harder hitting punches and a more enjoyable verse.

P.S. Achilleez, you don't get the first link procedes him punch? First link in liljay's sig was "Whore." lol

[A. Know-phistage]

whore is a Om You Dippy

[Vaskez]

L's The First To Lose,Ya Hot Pff.....Every Thing You Say Aint True
how can he have the lime light when you can't reach the lamp dude
^^he/you? stay consistent in who ya addressing. Plus how do you know he's short? He's older than you as well, lol. Not feelin this

Damn L's Soft As Fuck Will Some One Grab This Herb a Pillow
This Bitch Jumping off High Well Let Me Open The fucken Window
^^ok but not really worded as a diss
Ya Dope Fuck This 1st Lyricist Can't Even Manage to Sell Bricks
Stuff a Clock Up Your Ass,look at your verse,and cant even tell shit
^^nah, poorly worded
Why's Lyricist in This League,You'll Never Gain Respect,Geek
Lyricist Is The Main Problem Of Herb,Cuz He's Stuck To The Letter E
^^meh
Its a Long Way Down,But L's verse is First Down The Wale Brah
Yah Wack kid Even Front Lines gave The F to Fucken Fail Yah
^^huge stretch in logic
Im Hot Your Not So Bitch You Just Best To Damn Believe This
Cuz When Lyricist Drop We'll All Fall Off When We Read It
^^meh needed better wording

Jay if that's your dope drop, then really you need some help, homie, no hate. Read some LLL battles, you really have not elevated much, you need to word your disses much more directly. And seriously stop capitalising every word, it makes you look like a newb. No hate, just tryina help.

vs.

iljay.. your verse is more stretched than the marks on a fat bitch
Cos your skillz run out every few months like a vehicles tax disc
^^ok

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...80&page=5&pp=15

Now this kids buzzin cos he just figured out how to freepost
But your punches go missing like shaq and his free throws
^^meh
Jays biting so much he hasnt got a style to keep to
Your a bitch, thats why the first link in your sig directly precedes you
^^heh, ok
Kid you can try to whore me or spit fiction its just your own perogative
I would "aid" you with rap skillz but this dudes already hiv positive
^^needed better wording, not a bad concept
Aines dust off your banning stick, cos son just look what thor did
He did a tutorial...
And you couldnt bite em properly if it was pre-encore bitch
^^meh
And i wouldnt go to audio when your text is an embarrsment too
Cos son even the term wack.........is jealous of you
^^tried to be creative, but not really hard hitting

however 1lyricist worded everything more directly so he takes this

v/1lyricist

[Keyser]

7-1

[Aines]

1 Lyricist wins

Liljayy921.. (0-2)
1 Lyricist (1-1)